学校一日生活(05北京)讲评.ppt

WRITING,学校一日生活,美国中学生Jeff将要来你所在的红星中学体验生活、学习中文。假设你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照下图顺序介绍他在学校一天的安排。 注意: 1.信的开头已为你写好。2.词数不少60。,1,2,3,4,Key points,Go to school by bike Have Chinese class Have lunch in the dining-room Have sports in the afternoon,Ways of going to school Having classes Lunchtime and breaks Activities,Evaluation,1) 是否覆盖了内容要点； 2）是否运用的句式和词汇基本/能够满足任务要求； 3）是否语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。,Mark & Correct!,If you want to write a good passage, you should,Give full details. Use proper conjunctions and conjunct sentences. 第二档（15-17分）：完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务的要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致； 使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。,Enrich & Improve!,I have prepared a room for you in my house. Our school is quite close to my house, so we can go to school together by bike. The first class begins at 9 oclock. We will learn Chinese until 11:30. I can help you when you have difficulty. At noon we will have lunch in the dining-room. There are many kinds of Chinese food. Im sure you will love it. Whats more, you can make more friends and talk with them while you are enjoying your lunch.,Possible version,1,2,3,Body:,In the afternoon, we can have fun with our classmates in the playground. If you like, we can play basketball, football or table-tennis. Also, there is a swimming pool in our school. We can go swimming as well. If you have any questions, please let me know. I will try my best to make yourself at home.,4,Ending:,I have prepared a room for you in my house. Our school is quite close to my house, so we can go to school together by bike. The first class begins at 9 oclock. We will learn Chinese until 11:30. I can help you when you have difficulty. At noon we will have lunch in the dining-room. There are many kinds of Chinese food. Im sure you will love it. Whats more, you can make more friends and talk with them while you are enjoying your lunch.,Possible version,1,2,3,Body:,In the afternoon, we can have fun with our classmates in the playground. If you like, we can play basketball, football or table-tennis. Also, there is a swimming pool in our school. We can go swimming as well. If you have any questions, please let me know. I will try my best to make yourself at home.,4,Ending:,WRITING,学校一日生活 讲评,时间顺序及其表达,记叙文：学校一日生活,You will go to school by bike with me in the morning. We will learn Chinese together from 9 to 11:30 a.m We will have lunch in the dining room. You can make more friends while you are enjoying tasty Chinese food. You can do a variety of sports in the playground. Im sure you will love our school.,You will go to school by bike with me in the morning. _ We will learn Chinese together from 9 to 11:30 a.m _ We will have lunch in the dining room. _ You can make more friends while you are enjoying tasty Chinese food. _ You can do a variety of sports in the playground. Im sure you will love our school. After that, then, also, after class, after lunch, in the morning, at noon, in the afternoon From 9 to 11:30 a.m., As for lunch, During lunchtime, After a busy day of study, When you finish your study, Besides, In the meanwhile,Practice: Our social practice on farm Last Thursday, we 开班会讨论 where to go for social practice. We 提出几种方案 such as helping the old, clearing the boards at bus stops, and visiting a farm. We decided to visit a farm.,We 很早在校门口集合 and 出发. The farmers 热情地欢迎我们. The head of the farm showed us around. How glad we were to see the crops and vegetables growing well. We had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. We 玩得很开心 singing, dancing and telling jokes or stories. Two of us even played a game of chess. We had to say goodbye to the workers.,Keys: held a class meeting to discuss came up with several choices met at the school gate and set off gave us a warm welcome had great fun /had a great time,Coherence (连贯性) Our social practice on farm Last Thursday, we 开班会讨论 where to go for social practice. We 提出几种方案 such as helping the old, clearing the boards at bus stops, and visiting a farm. We decided to visit a farm.,1,We 很早在校门口集合 and 出发. The farmers 热情地欢迎我们. The head of the farm showed us around. How glad we were to see the crops and vegetables growing well. We had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. We 玩得很开心 singing, dancing and telling jokes or stories. Two of us even played a game of chess. We had to say goodbye to the workers.,2,3,4,5,6,7,Our social practice on farm Last Thursday, we 开班会讨论 where to go for social practice. We 提出几种方案 such as helping the old, clearing the boards at bus stops, and visiting a farm. _ we decided to visit a farm.,The next day, we 很早在校门口集合 and 出发 soon. _ the farmers 热情地欢迎我们. _ the head of the farm showed us around. How glad we were to see the crops and vegetables growing well. _ we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. _ we 很开心 singing, dancing and telling jokes or stories. Two of us even played a game of chess. _ we had to say goodbye to the workers.,The moment we arrived / On our arrival, the farmers gave us a warm welcome Then the head of the farm showed us around At noon we had a picnic lunch After a short rest we had great fun singing Time passed quickly / Time flew Before we knew it, we had to say goodbye to the workers.,Good expressions,记叙文：学校一日生活,1,Its only 5 minutes ride from my house to school, so every day we go to school by bike. 黄琳玥 It is a good chance to enjoy the scenery. 韩昳琳 Its also a good way to build up our body.安迪欣,1,by bike. The morning in Beijing is very wonderful with clean air and warm sunshine. So, on your way to school you can relax yourself and prepared for the new day. 曹洪宇 It is a convenient way to school and also helps us keep fit. 刘京,2,Youll have Chinese class which is taught by a very experienced teacher from 9 to 11:30 a.m 李春光 The teacher is very kind to students. She can help you when you have difficulty. 崔旭 郭冬梅 And you can communicate with my classmates who are very kind.,2,You will have two and a half hours to learn the beautiful language with us. All of our teachers are learned and patient. So you are sure to make great progress in Chinese. 康丽 Here youll learn more about Chinese and have a better idea of Chinese culture. 黄琳玥 高雅坤,3,You can choose whatever you like to eat and chat with many new friends. 马艺琳 It is a good time to make some new friends and chat with them. 王嘉琳 刘彦强 I think you will like the delicious Chinese food there and also enjoy talking with friends. 丁珊,3,After class, we can have a variety of delicious Chinese food in the dining room. In the meanwhile, you can talk with some students, all of whom are friendly. 郜佳琪 At noon we will have lunch in dining room, where not only can we taste a lot of delicious Chinese food but also make friends and chat with them. 刘宇,3,You can choose whatever you like here: dumplings, noodles and many kinds of snacks. Im sure that you will enjoy yourself with so many delicious dishes. When you finish your study, you can relax yourself by playing sports at the playground. Maybe you will like to learn how to play Pingpang with our classmates. It must be very interesting. 孙波,4,As the member of our school table tennis team, I will teach you to play Pingpang if you like. 于浩 Youd better play table tennis because it is very popular in China. 刘彦强,4,I think you will love playing table tennis, which is one of the special sports in China.高雅坤 ,which will be a precious experience for you. 安迪欣,4,In the afternoon, its time for sports! Its really a good chance to stretch your arms and legs after sitting in the classroom for a whole morning. You can either compete in table tennis with others or enjoy your time on the basketball field. Whats more, we have a swimming pool on campus. Its a good idea to relax yourself in it. 黄琳玥,开头：Here I will tell you what our school time will be like during your stay here. 黄琳玥 You will lead a colorful life in our school while studying Chinese here. It is certain that you will have a good time on the one-day trip to our school.,结尾：Well try our best to make you have a pleasant experience in Beijing. 丁珊 I hope you will be happy while you are in Beijing. 韩昳琳 I believe it will be the greatest memory in your life. 储元 After a whole day, you wont feel lonely any more because you have lots of friends and a new school life. 王潇潇 李璇,话题 - 句型,记叙文 (看图) 1： Get pleasure & benefits,Youll feel amazed at the beauty of the Chinese language and Chinese culture. It is a great chance to make new friends while enjoying delicious Chinese food. 句1. be /feel amazed at /struck by be /feel pleased that 句2. It is a great chance to do /give us a chance to do,The Great Wall,Snacks,the Summer Palace,Peking Opera,1. be /feel amazed at be/feel pleased that 2. It is a great chance to do /give us a chance to do Standing on the Great Wall / Having been told about the history of the Great Wall, I felt amazed at the world wonder. We watched Peking Opera, which gave us a wonderful chance to experience a real Chinese art and culture.,The Great Wall; Peking Opera; Snacks; the Summer Palace,1. be /feel amazed at be /feel pleased that 2. It is a great chance to do /give us a chance to do We strolled through the Flavor Street, which is a great chance to experience wonderful Chinese food and culture. Strolling around the Summer Palace, we were amazed at /struck by the unique beauty of ancient Chinese Royal gardening.,Snacks; the Summer Palace,“和平友谊”夏令营活动,姓名: 王姗 性别: 女 年龄: 16岁 学校: 北京阳光中学 其他: 爱好音乐、摄影；善于与人交流，乐于助人；热爱自然，热爱和平。 参加夏令营的目的：结交朋友，了解外国文化。,I would like to join the Peace & Friendship Summer Camp since it would be a great opportunity to make friends with young people from different countries and learn about their cultures.,During this time, youll find how interesting Chinese is. You can learn more about our Chinese special culture. You are sure to get to know Chinese culture by chatting with others and making many friends. I think /feel it a good idea to communicate with others in Chinese during lunchtime. 句3. learn more about /get to know by doing 句4. think /feel it great to do think /feel it a good idea /choice to do,Chinese building /architecture,Chinese culture and history; a digital film; typical places of interest in Beijing;,make /create; DIY area,We learned more about the development of our Chinese special architecture. We got to know our brilliant Chinese culture and history by watching a digital film on typical places of interest in Beijing. We got to know our folk culture by making whatever we like in DIY area. I think /feel it great to create many new things in DIY area.,Although tired, we were happy and excited because we had gained so much knowledge.(太泛) Through the activities, we came to realize the spirits of Leifeng. (更多句式？) 句5. We enjoy so much that we felt happy () that /because 句6. bring /give us arouse our interest /desire,Ending 1: We enjoyed so much that we couldnt help talking about what we had experienced.,Ending 3: The activity gave me a sense of pride as a Chinese. More importantly, it aroused our great excitement and interest in our traditional culture and custom.,Ending 2: We felt happy and excited because we had learnt better about our culture and history as well as have lots of fun.,Time flew. Before we knew it, we had to say goodbye to the workers. We,Time flew. Before we knew it, we had to say goodbye to the workers. We felt so happy and excited that we couldnt help talking about wed experienced.,Time flew. Before we knew it, we had to say goodbye to the workers. We felt so happy and excited about the unforgettable experience.,话题 - 句型,记叙文 (看图) 2： Help others & contributions,Gifts?,A good deed?,假设你是红星中学高三一班的李华，上周你们班组织了一次感谢恩师的活动。请根据下面图示，为学校网站写一篇英文稿件，叙述这次活动从准备到结束的完整过程。,Evaluation,1) 是否覆盖了内容要点； 2）是否运用的句式和词汇基本/能够满足任务要求； 3）是否语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。,Mark & Correct!,Example passage: Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly On May Day, Li Yue and Zhang Hua, students from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work. Upon their arrival, Li Yue and Zhang Hua were warmly welcomed. And respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits, which would be good for their health. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor so that they would live in a tidy environment.,Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people, sharing interesting stories and bringing them laughter. When it was time for the volunteers to leave, the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever. Li Yue and Zhang Hua felt very happy to learn what responsibility means. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives as well. By Chen Jie, School Newspaper,活动 (送水果、打扫、聊天),Upon their arrival, Li Yue and Zhang Hua were warmly welcomed. And respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits, which would be good for their health. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor so that they would live in a tidy environment. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people, sharing interesting stories and bringing them laughter.,Upon their arrival, Li Yue and Zhang Hua were warmly welcomed. And respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits, which would be good for their health. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor so that they would live in a tidy environment. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people, sharing interesting stories and bringing them laughter. 主题 (to the point) 和连贯性 (coherence),活动 (送水果、打扫、聊天),简短评论,When it was time for the volunteers to leave, the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever. Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives as well.,When it was time for the volunteers to leave, the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever. Li Yue and Zhang Hua felt very happy to learn what responsibility means. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives as well. 立意 (what the activity means),简短评论,If you want to write a good passage, you should,Give full details to the point. Use proper conjunctions and conjunct sentences. 第二档（15-17分）：完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖了所有内容要点；运用的句式和词汇能满足任务的要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致； 使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。,Enrich & Improve!,Possible version: Last week our class organized an activity to thank our teachers before graduation. On Thursday we had a class meeting to discuss what to do. We came up with many good ideas. Then we decided to send them gifts and do some good deeds.,The next day we carried out our plan. Some of us cleaned the teachers office and decorated it with pots of flowers so that it would be more comfortable for the teachers to work in. Others helped wash the cars or bike