读后续写：救援类-漂流瓶求救讲义-高三英语写作专项

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。RescueinaBottleCurtisWhitsonhadrafteddowntheArroyoSeco,ariverincentralCalifornia,severaltimesbefore.Thisyear,CurtisWhitsonknewthewater-fallwascoming.Hefiguredhewouldgetoutofhisraftintotheshallowwater,getdowntherocksalongropesoneithersideofthefalls,andcontinueonhisway,ashehadonaprevioustrip.Butthisyearwasdifferent.Heavysnowandspringrainshadturnedtheusuallymanageablefallsintosomethingfierce.Andthisyear,insteadofhisfriends,Whitson'scompanionswerehisgirlfriend,KrystalRamirez,andhis13-year-oldson,Hunter.Asthethreeofthemapproachedthefallslateintheafternoonofthethirddayoftheircampingtrip,Whitsoncouldtellfromtheincreasingroarofwaterinthenarrowingcanyon（峡谷）thattheywereinserioustrouble.Therewasnowaythey'dbeabletogetdowntherocksasplanned.“Thewaterwasjustroaringthroughtherewithtremendousforce,“recallsWhitson,45.Theyhadnosmartphoneservice,andtheyhadirtseenasinglepersoninthepastthreedays.AndWhitsonknewthatthey'dbesharingthegroundtherewithrattlesnakesandmountainlions.Ashewasthinkingwhattodo,Whitsonhitonabitofluck—heheardvoicescomingfromtheothersideofthefalls.Heyelled,butthesoundoftherushingwaterdrownedhimout.“Wehavetogetthesepeopleamessage."Whitsonthought.Hegrabbedastickandpulledouthispocketknifetocarve“Help"init.Thenhetiedaropetoitsothepeoplewouldknowitwasn'tjustanystick.Hetriedthrowingitoverthefalls,butitfloatedawayinthewrongdirection."We'vegottodosomething!”Whitsonyelledtohisson."Havewegotanythingelse?”Thenhespottedhiswaterbottle.Whitsongrabbeditandcarved"Hclp!”onit.Ramirezalsoremindedhimthathehadapenandpaperinhisbackpack.Whitsonknewitwasaslimhope.Buthewrote"6-1519:00Wearestuckhcre@thewaterfall.Gethelpplease“andpushedthenoteintothebottle.Thistime,histhrowoverthewaterfallwasperfect.“Allright,that'sallwecando,“WhitsontoldHunter.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语己为你写好；Paragraph1:Ittook30minutestogetbackupstreamtothebeachwherethey'dhadlunch. Paragraph2:Thenextmo门ling,thehelicopterreturned.文本大意：本文中,Whitson一家前往峡谷漂流并预计漂流结束可从山上爬下回到安全地带。由于冬雪融化和春雨如注被困在峡谷内。尝试了各种办法均已失败告终，由于没有携带任何通讯工具，无奈之下只得把求救纸条塞进瓶子扔进河流中希望能够获救。分解故事情节：这篇续写关键的解题句是第二段的开头句，一个return便能提醒学生在第一段必须要写的内容-直升飞机来了又走。第一段也是先定下结尾走向。再根据首句提示，写好下一个情节：筋疲力尽到营地——度过难熬的一个晚上——听到直升飞机来的声响——呼救失败（讨论原因：天黑和水咆哮声）——直升飞机又走了。此处可让学生讨论，引导学生去抓主要动作。其次结尾的定格可让学生自行选择-是由人物说出口还是通过场景描述来定格。提纲：切勿把故事复杂化。飞机来了——发现他们任——他们被救一一得知自己如何获救——点题结尾。情节走向：第一段：细节一方面描述人物如何面对难熬的黑夜和飞机来了又走了情绪变化。此处穿插合适的夜色描写。配图帮助学生构建画面感。带着学生一句一句去添加细节和过渡句子。给予学生两种不同的结尾。第二段：细节着重于直升飞机降落营救环节。此处需注意，在峡谷中飞机无处降落，唯一可行的营救方式便是救回飞机上。同样配图提示营救所需的动作描述。并需要通过合理的方式点出标题的主题，引出这个关键的瓶子。语言激活：DetailsrelatedtoahelicopterThereweretwohelicopterscirclingaround.Ahelicopterhoveredoverheadasoneofthegangmadearunforit.-那伙人中的一个逃跑的时候，一架直升飞机在头顶上空盘旋。Thehelicoptercircledaboutthearea,lookingforaproperlandingfield.-直升飞机在洪水地区上空盘旋，想找一处适合降落的地方。Overhead,thechopperroaredthebigbladeschurnedtheair.直升飞机在头顶上轰响着，巨大的浆叶搅动着空气。Therescuehelicoptermadeanothersweepoverthebay./Thehelicopterroseintotheair.Wesattightandwaitedtoberescued.Survivorswaitedfortherescueboats,dazedandfrightened.Guidedbyperiodicshaftsoflight,rescueteamsmadetheirwaythroughthepitch-blackastheysearchedforsurvivors.在忽明忽暗的竖井灯光的指引下，援救队伍在黑暗的废墟中开辟道路寻找幸存者.Thenaturalenvironmentthedarknessofnight&roaringwater•theblacknessofthenightwithdarknessfallingunderthecoverofnight.Thenightwaspressingup.Asthenightworeon/deepenedexhaustionovercametheirdiscomfortParagraph1:Ittook30minutestogethackupstreamtothebeachwherethey'dhadlunch.Tircdastheywere,theyhadtostrengthenuptospendanightthere.Afterlightingupacampfire,thethreehuddledintheirtentonsuchachillynight.However,lateinthenight,theyheardahelicopterhoveringjustabovethem.Wildwithjoy,Whitson,Ramirez,andHunterflewoutthetent,wavingandyelling.Unfortunately,thedarknessandtheroaringwaterdrownedeverything.Endingl:Thehelicoptercircledaroundandgotback.Ending?:ThenightbroodedoverthemotionlesshillsandmeltedthenoiseofthehelicopterWhitsonconsoledhissonandgirlfriend,"It'llbeback.”Paragraph2:Thenextmorning,thehelicopterreturned.Afterthethreewerespotted,thehelicopterloweredacrewmemberonacable.Therescueworkergottothegroundandhelpedthethreegetsaved.TherescuersliftedHunter,Ramirez,andWhitsonoutofthemountainonebyone.ltwasnotlongbeforetheyweretakentosafety.Thatwasamomentofpurehappinessasthethreechatted