专题06 叙事描写类-备战2021中考英语六大类作文高分秘笈

叙事描写类的书面表达是以叙述和描写为主要表达方式，以写人、叙事和经历、写物、绘景等为主要内容的文体：这一类的书面表达动词现率最高，且富于变化，用得最多的是动词的过去时态，各种时态为辅。合理使用丰富多彩的动词时态是这类书面表达的首要语言特征。人物类书面表达如果是对人的性格、外貌等叙述常用一般现在时，如果通过事件来刻画人物的性格，那么就要用过去时。写好这类书面表达要注意以下几点:1.头绪分明，脉络清楚写好书面表达，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都要围绕五个＂W＂和一个＂H＂来展开，分别是why,what,when,where,who及how。2.突出中心，详略得当在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写或粗述那些非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而会使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。3.用活语言，准确生动记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的叙事描写类书面表达的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事物描写得具体生动。1.

Amongvariouskindsofthings/personsinmymind,

...isthemostunforgettableone．2.

Onasunny/rainymorning，

whileIwas...Firstofall...Then...Afterthat...Intheend...3.He/she/thiswasoneofthemostmeaningful/enjoyable/unforgettablepersons/thingsthatIhaveevermet/experienced,

Iwillrememberhim/inforever．加分句子：1.Sth.impressedmegreatly...2.Whatimpressedmemostisthat...经典句型：1.

Last

Sunday（Saturday...）,it

was

sunny（rainy,

windy,

foggy）

2.

I

got

up

very

early

（late）.

After

breakfast

I

went

to

with

my

friends

by

bike,

bus...

3.

We

enjoyed

ourselves.4.

We

forgot

the

time.

We

didn’t

come

back

until

5

o’clock.

5.

We

all

felt

very

tired,

but

we

were

happy.

6.

I

thought

I

would

never

forget

this

trip.

7.

Last

summer,

my

parents

and

I

went

to

Beijing

for

our

holidays.

8.

We

visited

a

lot

of

places

of

interest.

9.

We

had

a

good

time

there.

10.

We

bought

a

lot

of

things.

The

clothes

here

are

good

and

cheap.

人物类书面表达主要通过刻画人物性格，塑造人物形象，反映生活，表现主题，模版如下：IwillneverforgetmyEnglishteacher…IwillneverforgetmyEnglishteacher…Sheisabeautifulwoman…Itwas…o’clock,Idid…in…Irealizethat…开门见山，引出要介绍的人物正文（时间、地点、人物正文（时间、地点、人物……）感想感想叙事和经历类书面表达通过叙述事件的起因、经过和结果表现主题。写景状物类书面表达通过对事物和景点的描述表现主题。文章宜采用总—分—总的结构或总—分的结构，模版如下：介绍景观介绍景观…isoneofthemostbeautifulsceneryspots.…isoneofthemostbeautifulsceneryspots.介绍旅行经历Ivoluntee介绍旅行经历Ivolunteeredaguidetointroduce…总结旅行感受总结旅行感受ItwasabusyandtireddaybutIwasveryhappyItwasabusyandtireddaybutIwasveryhappy典例一【2020•河北中考】李硕今年五岁，他的妈妈疫情期间去支援武汉。请根据下面四幅图片及文字提示写一篇短文。saygoodbyekisshismotherreceiveawarmwelcomegiveherabighug注意：（1）短文须包括每幅图片的主要信息，可适当发挥，提示词语供参考；（2）文中不得出现真实的地名、校名和人名；（3）词数80左右。开头已给出，不计入总词数。LiShuoisafive-year-oldboy.OneSundayafternoon,hismotherwasgoingWuhantohelppatientsthere.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【写作思路】本题属于看图作文，题目的开头已给出。要求根据图画内容并结合文字提示，发挥想象来写一篇英语作文。写作时要包含每幅图片的主要信息并进行适当发挥。适当使用副词和连词等增加亮点。写好时，再阅读一遍，减少语法错误，不要犯单词拼写上的错误。【参考范文】LiShuoisafive-year-oldboy.OneSundayafternoon,hismotherwasgoingWuhantohelppatientsthere.Hisfathertookhimtosaygoodbyetoher.Oneday,hesawhismotheronTVwhileshewasaway.HemissedhersomuchthathekissedhismotheracrosstheTVscreen.Whentheoutbreakwasundercontrol,hismothercamebackwithothermedicalworkers.Theyreceivedawarmwelcome.Assoonashismothergothome,LiShuogaveherabighug.Howhemisseshismother!名师点评名师点评这是一篇比较优秀的例文。例文紧扣题目要求，根据图画及文字提示，以一般过去时讲述了李硕的妈妈去武汉抗疫到回来的过程中的几个细节。例文简明扼要，结构清晰，语言表达到位。亮点回放亮点回放短语：saygoodbyetosb.；acrosstheTVscreen；beundercontrol；comeback；medicalworkers；receiveawarmwelcome；givesb.ahug。句型：Oneday,hesawhismotheronTVwhileshewasaway.(while引导的时间状语从句)；HemissedhersomuchthathekissedhismotheracrosstheTVscreen.(so...that引导的结果状语从句)；Whentheoutbreakwasundercontrol,hismothercamebackwithothermedicalworkers.(when引导的时间状语从句)；Assoonashismothergothome,LiShuogaveherabighug.(assoonas引导的时间状语从句)；Howhemisseshismother!(以how开头的感叹句)典例二(2020徐州中考）.2020年6月16日，我市某中学发生了一件感人的事情。请以Whatamovingstory!为题，写一篇英语短文，简要叙述事情经过并谈谈感想。要点如下：经过1．两工人为学校装空调，怕影响学生学习，夜晚工作；雨天路滑，不小心碰掉一块瓷砖；留下纸条和50元钱，愿赔偿。2．学校表示不用赔偿；学生也为两人点赞并送去了西瓜。感想……（内容自拟）注意：（1）词数90左右。短文需包含表格中的要点，但不要逐字翻译。（2）短文已给出的部分（见答题卡）不计入总词数。（3）短文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名。参考词汇：空调：air-conditioner瓷砖：ceramictile________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Whatamovingstory!Amovingstoryhappenedinaschoolofourcityon16June,2020.Inordernottodisturbthestudentswhowerestudyingatschool,twoworkersdecidedtoputinair-conditionersatnight.Itwasrainyandwet.Whentheywerecarryingoneair-conditioner,theybrokeoneceramictile.Feelingsorryforwhattheyhaddone,theyleftanoteand50yuantopayforthetile.Theschool,however,didn’tacceptthemoney.Thestudentsgavethetwoworkersthumbsupandsentawater-melontoshowtheirgratitude.Ithinkboththeworkersandtheschoolhavedonesomethingright.Ifwedosomethingwrong,weshouldbehonestandfaceitbravely.Meanwhile,forgivingothersisalwaysappreciated.Justasthesayinggoes,“onegoodturndeservesanother”.名师点评名师点评本文主要用第三人称进行写作，讲述事情主要采用一般过去时态来写作。讲述事情的经过叙述完整且条理清晰。亮点回放亮点回放短语：inordernotto;decideto;atnight;feelsorryfor;payfor;give…thumbsup。句型：Whentheywerecarryingoneair-conditioner,theybrokeoneceramictile.(when引导的时间状语从句)；Ifwedosomethingwrong,weshouldbehonestandfaceitbravely.(if引导的条件状语从句)；Feelingsorryforwhattheyhaddone,theyleftanoteand50yuantopayforthetile.(what引导的宾语从句)；Inordernottodisturbthestudentswhowerestudyingatschool,twoworkersdecidedtoputinair-conditionersatnight.(who引导的定语从句)A【2020吉林长春中考模拟】始于今年年初的新冠病毒(COVID-19)严重影响了人们的日常生活，中国举全国之力抗击疫情。请以"COVID-19BroughtPeopleCloserTogether"为题写一篇不少于80词的短文，给学校英语园地投稿，叙述你与家人在抗疫期间亲身经历的一件事或所见、所闻，以及你对这件事情的感悟。(文中不得出现真实的人名和校名)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：COVID-19BroughtPeopleCloserTogetherLastSunday,Itookpartinaspecialactivitythemed“FightingCOVID-19”formiddleschoolstudents.IfeltCOVID-19broughtpeopleclosertogether.Isawalotofvolunteers.Theywereallbusywiththeirwork.Eventhoughallthepeopleweretired,noneofthemstoppedtohavearest.ItisreportedthatahighschoolstudentwenttoWuhanonhisowntovolunteerwithouttellinghismother.Hewantedtodowhathecouldtohelppeopleinneed.Hehelpedthepatientsdistributefood,getmedicine,talktothem,andencouragethemtofacewithCOVID-19bravely.Iwasdeeplymovedbyhisbehavior.Asmiddleschoolstudents,weshouldlearnfromhim.【2019•甘肃省天水市】“你养我长大，我陪你变老”父母亲一直在为我们的成长默默付出，成长要学会感受爱、回报爱。今天你即将毕业，是向父母表达感激的好机会。请根据以下所给要点，写一篇英语短文。要点：(l)给我生命，一直照顾我成长；(2)努力工作，为我提供良好生活和教育条件；(3)拥有爱心，教我学会……；(4)今天，我要为你们……（自主发挥一至少两点）a注意事项：(l)词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；(2)文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息。Youbringmeup.Iwillbewithyouinyourlife.Youareimportantpersonsintheprocessofmygrowth.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________B【天津市西青区2019年九年级初中毕业生学业考试调查】班里同学成绩有好有差，对于学习成绩好的同学是否愿意和学习成绩差的同学坐在一起呢？我们看看李磊是怎么做的呢，请同学们按照以下内容要点记叙这件事并发表你的观点。1.李磊的学习成绩非常好，乐于助人，和班里每个同学都相处融洽2.上周，班里新来了一个同学叫做王刚，张老师让他坐在李磊旁边。3.王刚成绩不好，上课爱说话惹老师生气。很多人不愿意和他做朋友。4.但是李磊帮他学习，并且阻止他上课乱说话过了一段时间他们共同取得了进步。5.如果你的身边有王刚这样的slowerstudent，你会怎么做？注意：1.词数：100词左右，短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；2.短文需包括表中所有要点，内容可适当发挥，以使行文连贯；3.参考词汇：成绩差的学生：aslowerstudent；使老师生气makesb.angry乱说话talknonsenseLiLeiisaverygoodstudent.Heis_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________A【参考范文】Youbringmeup.Iwillbewithyouinyourlife.Youareimportantpersonsintheprocessofmygrowth.Yougivemelifeandtakecareofmeallthetime.WhenIhaveproblemswithmystudyandlife,youarealwayspatientenoughtohelpmeandencourageme.Inordertoletmeliveapleasantlifeandreceivegoodeducation,youalwaysworkhardfrommorningtoeveningeveryday.Youarealsopersonswhohaveaheartfulloflove.Youarereadytohelppeopleinneed.Itisyouwhoteachmetobeakindperson.Inthepast,Ineversaid“Iloveyou”toyou.Today,Iwillgraduate,soIwanttosayittoyouloudly.Iwillstudyhardertogetbetterresultsinthefuture.Ihopeyouwillbehappyandhealthyforever.名师点评本篇范文成功地完成了写作任务，按照写作要求，根据词语及问题提示，用简洁的语言，准确地表达出汉语意思，语言流畅。写作思路清晰。名师点评BLiLeiisaverygoodstudent.Heisgoodatstudyingandreadytohelpotherssohegetsonwellwithhisclassmates.LastweekanewstudentcalledWangGangcametohisclassandMr.ZhangmadehimsitnexttoLiLei.ButWangGangisweakinlearningandlovestalkinginclass.ThismadeteachersangrySomeofthestudentswouldn’tliketomakefriendswithhim.ButLiLeihelpshimstudyandstopshim