2024届高三英语作文复习写作专项读后续写：猎枪与相机任务单素材

读后续写：猎枪与相机Hisfathersaid,“Allset,boy?”andJeremynodded,pickinguphisgunwithawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.Ordinarily,Jeremywouldtakeouthiscameratorecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgoduckhuntingforthefirsttime. However,hehatedit,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.Buthewasdeterminedtogothroughwithit.Helovedhisfather,andwantedhisapprovalmorethananythingintheworld. Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyandwaited.Toreducefear,hetookapictureofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun. Jeremygothisgunready.“I’llletyoushootfirst,”hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun.“Youknow,I’vebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus...”Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.“There’sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.I’llgiveyoutheword.” Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather’sface,tenseandeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,“Don’tletthemcome,please!” Buttheykeptcoming.“Fourblack,”hisfathersaid.“Onemallard（绿头鸭）.”Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...“Getset,”hisfatherwhispered. “Now!”criedJeremy’sfather.“Takethem!” Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersandflew.“Shoot!”saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy’sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.P1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”P2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim. 情节设计：P1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”P1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”Jeremy解释自己不想杀死可爱的野鸭---以为父亲会失望，感到难过---父亲递给他什么东西他觉得可能是猎枪P2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.他高兴地抓拍野鸭---父亲也为他高兴----父子之间彼此全新的理解范文和笔记：P1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“whydidn’tyoushoot?”Staringathisfather’sdisappointedandcrossexpression,Jeremymurmured,“Becausetheyweresoalive”,withhisheaddown.Hesatonthegrassandsobbed,hisfaceburiedinhishandsandtearsrollingalonghisfingers.Allthehopeofpleasinghisfatherburstlikeabubble.Jeremy盯着父亲失望而生气的表情，低着头喃喃地说：“因为它们是鲜活的生命呀。”他坐在草地上，抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落。所有让父亲高兴的希望像肥皂泡一样破了。Foralongmomenteverythingwasbathedinsilence.ThenJeremyfelthisfatherkneeldownbesidehimandpathimontheshouldergently,whichundoubtedlyloadedJeremywithgreatcouragetovoicehisinnerfeeling,“Dad,canyouforgivemeforquittinghunting?”有很长一段时间，一切都沐浴在寂静之中。然后Jeremy感到他的父亲跪在他身边，轻轻地拍着他的肩膀，这无疑让Jeremy充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受：“爸爸，我放弃打猎，你能原谅我吗？”Suddenly,hisfatherroseup,shouting,“Getready!”Feelingcoldmetaltouchinghishand,Jeremylookedup,asenseofconcernsurgingthroughhismind.突然，他父亲站起来，喊道：“准备好！”Jeremy感到冰冷的金属碰到了他的手，他抬起头来，心头涌起了一阵忧虑。笔记：现在分词，with结构；无灵主语句；which非限制性定从；设计与第二段开头衔接的情节P2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.Hetookoverthecameraunbelievably.Justatthatmoment,abeautifulwildduckflewcloser,itswhitebreastshininginthesunshine.他难以置信地接过了相机。正在这时一只美丽的野鸭飞近了，它白色的胸脯在阳光下闪闪发光。Jeremyhelduphiscameraimmediately,“Igothim”.Abroadsmilelituphisfaceandhisfathergavehimathumb-up.“Itisokay.Justdowhateveryoulove.”Jeremy立刻举起相机，“我拍到它了。”他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容，父亲朝他竖起大拇指。“没关系。你喜欢做什么就做什么。”ThatspecialmorningwitnessedJeremyandhisfathergoinghomewithnotaduckbutanewunderstandingofeachotherandthelovefornature.在那个特别的早晨，Jeremy和他的父亲回家时，带回的不是鸭子，而是对彼此一次新的理解和对大自然的爱。笔记：副词表达感情色彩和动作节奏；无灵主语句“某时/某地witness某事件”；结尾点题中文自测： P1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“whydidn’tyoushoot?”Jeremy盯着父亲失望而生气的表情，低着头喃喃地说：“因为它们是鲜活的生命呀。”他坐在草地上，抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落。所有让父亲高兴的希望像肥皂泡一样破了。有很长一段时间，一切都沐浴在寂静之中。然后Jeremy感到他的父亲跪在他身边，轻轻地拍着他的肩膀，这无疑让Jeremy充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受：“爸爸，我放弃打猎，你能原谅我吗？”突然，他父亲站起来，喊道：“准备好！”Jeremy感到冰冷的金属碰到了他的手，他抬起头来，心头涌起了一阵忧虑。P2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.他难以置信地接过了相机。正在这时一只美丽的野鸭飞近了，它白色的胸脯在阳光下闪闪发光。Jeremy立刻举起相机，“我拍到它了。”他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容，父亲朝他竖起大拇指。“没关系。你喜欢做什么就做什么。”在那个特别的早晨，Jeremy和他的父亲回家时，带回的不是鸭子，而是对彼此一次新的理解和对大自然的爱。 语料默写：盯着父亲失望而生气的表情__________________________________________低着头喃喃地说_________________________________________抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落___________________________________所有...的希望像肥皂泡一样破了_________________________________________一切都沐浴在寂静之中_________________________________________跪下________________________________________轻轻地拍着他的肩膀_________________________________________让某人充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受_____________________________原谅某人做了某事_________________________________________站起来_________________________________________心头涌起了一阵忧虑_________________________________________接过某物_________________________________________举起某物___