写作新题型续写与概要写作省公开课金奖全国赛课一等奖微课获奖课件

新高考英语写作几点注意事项1/29读后续写评分标准：1.本题总分25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先依据所续写短文内容和语言初步确定其档次，然后以该档次要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最终给分。3.词数少于130，从总分中减去2分4.评分时应从以下四个方面考虑：1）与所给短文和段落开头语衔接程度2）内容丰富性和对所标出关键词语应用情况3）应用语法结构和词汇丰富性和准确性4）上下文连贯性5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性一个主要方面，评分时应视其对交际影响程度给予考虑。6.如书写较差以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次2/29注重故事情节的结尾出人意外情理之中描写景物发人深省的结尾景情相关景中带情留白提供想象空间意犹未尽的结尾若隐若现藕断丝连读后续写几个基本形式理性分析思想拔高的结尾紧扣主题立意高远情绪宣泄让人共鸣的结尾合理铺垫水到渠成浙江省衢州一中3/29读后续写关键点续写呼应细节意境修辞浙江省衢州一中4/29Example5/29Paragraph1:What’sworse,myteachercalledmyfatheraftertheexamandtoldhimaboutmycheating._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Hearingmywords,myfatherdecidedtogivemeanotherchance._______________________________________________________________________________________________6/29意境设计缺点：平淡没悬念和高潮情感渲染不够，不能引发读者共鸣结尾拔不高，限制了文章高度人物角色不明，语气不符合角色以自我为中心，缺乏一些人文素养在内，如：爱传递，贡献，善良，正义，宽容等。7/29新高考概要写作几点注意事项8/29概要写作指导1概要写作评分标准解读2

概要写作案例分析9/29本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。评分时，先依据所写概要内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次要去来衡量、确定或调整档次，最终给分。词数少于40和多于80，从总分中减去2分。评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑...拼写与标点符号是语言准确性一个主要方面，评分时，应视其对交际影响程度给予考虑。如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。1概要写作评分解读10/291）对原文关键点了解和展现情况2）应用语法结构和词汇准确性3）上下文连贯性4）对各关键点表示独立性情况11/29④评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：对原文关键点了解和展现情况；应用语法结构和词汇准确性；上下文连贯性；对各关键点表示独立性情况。档次描述第五档(21-25)—了解准确，涵盖全部关键点。—能准确使用对应语法结构和词汇。—有效地使用了语句间连接成份，使所完成概要结构紧凑。—完全使用自己语言。

第五档评分标准启示

12/29写作重难点：关键点完全准确提取用自己语言有效概括13/29概要写作疑难点：怎样进行概要写作改写句子怎样用自己语言来概写句子14/29疑难一：怎样概写Example:1)Hiscourageinbattlemightwithoutexaggerationbecallediron-like.→Hewasverybraveinbattle.2)Hewashardupformoneyandwasbeingpressedbyhiscreditor.→Hewasinfinancialdifficulties.3)SheboughthomeseveralChineseandEnglishnovels,afewcopesofTimeandNewsweekandsometextbooks.Sheintendedtoreadallofthemduringthewintervacation.→Shebroughthomealotofbookstoreadduringthevacation.15/29疑难二：怎样在不改变题材原句意义上改写关键点（example摘自全国统一考试英语科考试说明P24

）16/29[例7]（选自全国统一考试英语科考试说明P24）

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫学家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.17/29Transitionalwords:

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist（免疫学家）,encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.18/29

关键点1

nothingfixed;attitudestodirt

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Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.P-W之

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关键点2

dirtontheskin;blockoutdisease;alongtime;Europe;livedwithdirtPeople,suchasEuropeans,thoughtdirtdefendedtheirbodiesagainsttheattackofdisease.People,suchasEuropeans,hadlongconsidereddirtontheskinhelpedresistillness.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.（选自考试说明范文）People,suchasEuropeans,usedtoregarddirtontheskinasabarrieragainstdisease.21/29P-W之

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Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?

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关键点3

cleaningawaydirt;good;standardsofcleanliness;movedbeyondscience

Itwasnotuntilthe18thcenturythatpeolecametobelievewashingoffdirtbenefitedhealth,butovertimetheyhavebecometooparticularaboutcleanliness.Peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwashingdirtoffourbodycankeepushealthy.（选自考试说明范文）Centurieslater,peoplecametoadoptascientificviewondirt,andconsidereditahealthypracticetoremovedirtofftheskin,whichlater,however,leadstoanobsessionwithcleanliness.23/29P-W之

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Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫学家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.

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关键点4

playinthedirt;buildupastrongimmunesystem;gainingsomegroundSomebelievekidsshouldbeencouagedtoplaywithdirt,whichmayhelpstrenghthentheirimmunesystem.Somesocietiesbelievethatexposuretosomedirtmayhelpourimmunesystem.（选自考试说明范文）Somepeoplesharethebeliefthatexposingkidstodirt

mayboosttheirimmunesystem.25/29

transitionalwords

Gettingridofdirt,intheopinionofmostpeople,isagoodthing.However,thereisnothingfixedaboutattitudestodirt.Intheearly16thcentury,peoplethoughtthatdirtontheskinwasameanstoblockoutdisease,asmedicalopinionhaditthatwashingoffdirtwithhotwatercouldopenuptheskinandletillsin.Aparticulardangerwasthoughttolieinpublicbaths.By1538,theFrenchkinghadclosedthebathhousesinhiskingdom.SodidthekingofEnglandin1546.ThusbeganalongtimewhentherichandthepoorinEuropelivedwithdirtinafriendlyway.HenryIV,KingofFrance,wasfamouslydirty.Uponlearningthatanoblemanhadtakenabath,thekingorderedthat,toavoidtheattackofdisease,thenoblemanshouldnotgoout.Thoughthebeliefinthemeritofdirtwaslong-lived,dirthasnolongerbeenregardedasaniceneighboreversincethe18thcentury.Scientificallyspeaking,cleaningawaydirtisgoodtohealth.Cleanwatersupplyandhandwashingarepracticalmeansofpreventingdisease.Yet,itseemsthatstandardsofcleanlinesshavemovedbeyondsciencesinceWorldWarⅡ.Advertisementsrepeatedlyselltheidea;clothesneedtobewhiterthanwhite,clothseversofter,surfacestoshine.Hasthehatefordirt,however,gonetoofar?Attitudestodirtstilldifferhugelynowadays.Manyfirst-timeparentsnervouslytrytowarntheirchildrenofftouchingdirt,whichmightberesponsibleforthespreadofdisease.Onthecontrary,MaryRuebush,anAmericanimmunologist(免疫学家),encourageschildrentoplayinthedirttobuildupastrongimmunesystem.Andthelatterpositionisgainingsomeground.26/29S-PPeoplehavemixedopinionstowardsdirtonourskin.Foralongtimeinhistory,peopleofsomeEuropeancountries,suchasFrance,believedthatdirtprotectedpeoplefromgettingill.However,peoplebegantochangetheirattitudestodirtabout200yearsago.Peoplehavebeentoldthatwash