2010考高考作文讲评学案试.doc

2010高考作文讲评学案Part 1 Analysis of the homework开头：（ 已给出）第一幅图1. On Saturday, I searched for the train ticket about Beidaihe. My grandparents around me and asked the weather and the hotel. and then I went to buy the tickets for them.2. I searched the informations about Beidaihe on the Internet including the train tick, hotel and whether.3. On Saturday morning, I got up very early. After breakfast, I surfed the Internet with my grandparents. We wanted to search for some information about the train ticket, the hotel and the weather in Beidaihe. ( 王天元) 第二幅图1. Then I helped them to buy two train tickets.2. On the next day, I went to train ticket office on my own to buy two tickets. There were a lot of people buy the tickets to Beidaihe. 3. But there were so many people, I spend nearly 3 hours to buy it hardly.4. After doing that, I went to the train station in order to buy the next days tickets. There was so many people that I had to spend lots of time waiting, but luckily I succeeded to buy two tickets. （邱昊阳）第三幅图1. I helped their prepared the cloth and the map about Beidaihe and two sunglasses. My grandma gave me a bottle of water and leted me have a rest.2. Due to the sunshine in Beidaihe was really strong, I prepared two sunglasses for them.3. As soon as I got home, I helped my grandparents to prepare the useful things which must be taken with them. Including clothes, shoes, umbrella and the map of Beidaihe. The most important thing were sunny glassed because the sunshine was too heavily. （ 肖强）4. I helped them prepare their luggage, such as sunglasses, umbrella. I also took a map of Beidaihe so that they could know how to get to the hotel which we booked, also they could go to some interesting places. ( 孙晓晴 )第四幅图1. The next morning, I sent them to the station and said goodbye to them. They sat in the train with smile and grateful.2. we said “goodbye” to each other through the window. And then, the train set out.3. The next day, they started their trip to Beidaihe. I said goodbye to them in the station with the hope that they could have a good time there.（ 郭宇）结尾1. My grandparents were proud of me because I did so many things for them. I was proud of myself , too. （ 陈莹）2. I am very excited to prepare their trip to Beidaihe. It helps me develop my abilities. I am not a child any more and I should do more things for my grandparents. I love them.（ 王贺）Part 2 参考样文Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe. On Saturday morning, together with my grandparents, I searched the Internet for the train schedule, the weather in Beidaihe, and some hotel information. In the afternoon, I went to the train station and managed to buy two tickets for my grandparents although there was a long queue. After dinner, I packed into the suitcase the things my grandparents need, such as clothes, glasses, an umbrella, and a map. The next morning, I went to the station to see them off. Waving goodbye to them on the platform, I felt happy for them and wished them a safe journey. 2010年 高分作文1.It was a really busy weekend. When my grandparents decided to pay a visit to Beidaihe, I was searching for information on the Internet as quickly as possible. I had to ensure some information including the train tickets, hotels and weather that my grandparents questioned me. After that, I went to the station to buy two tickets from Beijing to Beidaihe. It wasnt too long before I went back home. I also had to check the thing that my grandparents should take. While my grandfather was finding things, my grandma and I packed the bag. After the clothes, shoes was put in bag. My grandma reminded me of the unbrellar to avoid the rainy. When the most important thing map was found. Everything was in place. Early in the next morning, my grandparents were tooking the train. They were very happy to the thing I had prepared for them. Seeing the train left, I felt very proud of myself. （159 words）得分：17分点评：完全完成了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的。覆盖了所有的内容要点，并有细节支撑。运用的句式和词汇能满足任务的要求；语法和用词基本准确，少许错误为尽可能表达丰富内容所致；所写内容连贯。2.Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe. In order to have a full preparation for the trip, I searched the Internet to get some useful information. Sitting before the computer, we had so many questions to ask. My grandparents paid attention to the hotels and the weather, while I was concerned about the train tickets.After collecting the information, I succeed in buying two tickets to the destination on my own. Luckily, I got the final two at the place where the tickets were sold.Besides helping my grandmother to prepare the things for the trip. I also took a map of Beidaihe so as to plan a specific and enjoyable path of the journey. And I remind her of taking umbrellas and sunglasses in case the weather would be changeable.Two days later, my grandparents set out to the place which they admired. When they settled themselves well on the train, I expressed my best wishes to them and said goodbye. They were also grateful for what I did for them and spoke highly of me. I was delighted I could did them a favour in return. After all, they devoted much to my growth. Seeing the plesant facial expressions on their faces, I couldnt help smiling. (212 words)得分：18分点评：完全完成了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的。覆盖了所有的内容，并有细节支撑；使用句式和词汇多样，表达内容丰富、连贯，结构紧凑。有个别语法错误（如动词过去式）和拼写错误。3.Questions flooded every inch of our mind at first. There were so many things that had to be taken into consideration. What the weather would be like? What was the price of the train? Even hotel booking was a vital problem. Fortunately, the internet helped us a lot.Having got the information about the train, I went to the train station to buy tickets. It seemed that many people were planning to travel for the sake of the short weekend.Next came the most troublesome part. I rummaged a large suitcase for packing. I referred from the internet and made a specific list of things to carry.My grandma prepared T-shirts and shorts and slippers because of the hot weather. I went to the post office to buy them a map of Beidaihe, which allowed them to lead their trip finely. So far as I could consider, I packed them two sunglasses. Finally, grandma remembered to take an umbrella with them in case I rained.Finally, it was time to set off. I accompanied my grandparents to the train station to see them off. They were very happy and excited for the expected trip to Beidaihe. Waving my hand, I saw the train became smaller and smaller, finally disappeared.I was very proud of myself in that I organized the whole trip. The broad smiles on my grandparents faces delighted me. And I decided to do more for them in the future. (242 words)得分：19分点评：完全完成了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的。覆盖了所有的内容要点和细节，句式和词汇丰富，较地道，体现了较高的语言运用能力；内容连贯，结构紧凑。有极个别错误，但为表达丰富内容所致。一、职业生涯规划的意义 1、以既有的成就为基础，确立人生的方向，提供奋斗的策略。 2、突破生活的格线，塑造清新充实的自我。 3、准确评价个人特点和强项。 4、评估个人目标和现状的差距。 5、准确定位职业方向。 6、重新认识自身的价值并使其增值。 7、发现新的职业机遇。 8、增强职业竞争力。 9、将个人、事业与家庭联系起来。 二、正确的心理认知 1、认清人生的价值 社会的价值并不被所有的人等同接受“人云亦云”并不等于自我的人生价值人生价值包括：经济价值、权力价值、回馈价值、审美价值、理论价 值。 2、超越既有的得失每个人都很努力，但成就并不等同。后悔与抱怨对未来无济于事，自我陶醉则像“龟兔赛跑”中的兔子。 人生如运动场上的竞技，当下难以断输赢。 3、以万变应万变 任何的执着都是一种“阻滞”前途的行为想想“流水”的启示“学非所用”是真理 三、剖析自我的现状 1、个人部份健康情形：身体是否有病痛？是否有不良的生活习惯？是否有影响健康的活动？生活是否正常？有没有养生之道？自我充实：是否有专长？经常阅读和收集资料吗？是否正在培养其他技能？休闲管理：是否有固定的休闲活动？有助于身心和工作吗？是否有休闲计划？ 2、事业部份 财富所得：薪资多少？有储蓄吗？有