高中英语写作课堂实录及点评

高中英语写作课堂实录及点评StepIGreetingandLeading-in:T:Classbegins!Ss:Goodafternoon,teacher!T:Goodafternoon,everybody.Sitdown,please!Ss:Thankyou.T:NicetohavethisEnglishclasswithyou.Firstofall,pleaselookatthelearningaimsofthisperiod.1.Writeaparagraphgivingtheoppositeview.2.Developagoodwritinghabitread,discussandwrite.3.LearntostudyontheInternetinaproperway.【评：首先出示本节课学习目标，而且学习目标设定具体，明确：会写表达自己观点的小文章；课型：写作课；写作过程：读讨论写。这样学生听课过程中有的放矢，心中有数。】T:ThinkaboutasmanythingswecandoontheInternetaspossibletorelaxoneself,tocommunicate,toworkorstudyandsoon.WhatcanwedoontheInternet?Thinkaboutasmanythingsaspossible.A.torelaxoneself:B.tocommunicate:C.towork/study:D._S1:Wecanlistentomusicandwatchvideosormoviesonline.S2:Wecanplaycomputergamesandchatonlinewithfriends.S3:WecansendE-mailstoourfamilyandfriendsaswell.S4:Wecandoonlineshopping,whichisbothconvenientandcheap.S5:WecansearchforallkindsofinformationeasilyandquicklyontheInternet.S6:Wecanalsostudyonline,forexample,listentoEnglishlisteningmaterials.S7:Wecanlearnnewsathomeandabroad.【评：通过开放性问题激活学生已有知识。学生们各抒己见，表达自己的观点，为下一步评价作者观点做好铺垫。开放性的问题有利于引导学生思考，从而展示学生不同观点，体现了学生即资源，不同即丰富的理念。】T:Welldone.Yes,wecandoanumberofthingsontheInternet.SosomestudentsthinkwecanlearnallweneedontheInternet.Doyouagreewiththisopinion?Ss:Yes!/No.T:Differentpeoplehavedifferentopinions.Letsreadashortessayfirst.【评：引导学生通过阅读了解他人对某事的看法和观点，从而导入本课阅读文章。】StepIIPre-writingTask1.ReadingT:Readtheessayonpage56anddotheexerciseonyourguidingpaper.1.Whatsthewritersopinionaboutstudyingontheinternet?2.Whatsthesupportingideastosupporthisopinion?3.Whatsthewritingstyleofthepassage?4.Whatsthetenseofthepassage?【评：问题设计很有价值。通过这四个问题，首先引导学生在阅读中学会找到作者观点和支撑观点的论据，然后观察文章的写作风格和时态，为下一步学生自己的写作做了非常好的铺垫。】Thestudentsreadtheessaysilentlyandthendotherelatedexercisefortwominutes.T:Haveyougottheanswers?Ss:（学生没有回答）Itseemsthatsomeofthestudentsarenotsureabouttheiranswers.T:Ifyouhaveanydifficulty,youcandiscussyouranswerswithyourpartners.Thestudentsdiscussforawhile（学生热烈讨论起来）【评：在学生学习过程中，关注学生之间的分享和交流，既丰富了学生思维，又达到了兵教兵的目的。始终贯穿“差异即资源，不同即丰富”的理念。】T:Letssharetheanswers.Whowouldliketoanswerthefirstquestion?S1:WecanlearnallweneedontheInternet.T:Doesanybodyhavedifferentopinion?Ss:No.（学生齐声回答）T:Ok,youareright.Youhavegottherightanswer.Howaboutthesecondone?S2:Thefirstoneisthattheteachercanthelpeveryoneintheclassin50minutes.Thesecondoneisthatitwouldbemuchbetterifwespentthetimeworkingonacomputer.T:Doyouallagreewithhim?Ss:Yes.（学生齐声回答）T:Youhavegotit.Howaboutthethirdone?S3:Thewritingstyleisargumentativewriting.T:Youarequiteright.Howaboutthefourthone?S4:Thetenseoftheessayisthepresenttense.T：Good！【评：通过阅读和讨论，学生解决了四个问题的同时也就明白了作者如何表达自己观点。学习写作就是模仿，模仿作者的表达方式，模仿作者的构思框架。让学生在模仿中学习写作，既有据可循，又降低了难度，增强了学生敢写的信心。】Task2.DiscussingT:Afterreadingwehavegotthewritingstyle,thetenseandthestructureoftheessaygivingaview.Nowitstimeforustothinkabouthowwecanwriteaparagraphtogivetheoppositeview.Discusshowtosupporttheoppositeviewandwritedownthekey(关键的)words.1.theimportanceofhavingteachers:2.theimportanceofworkingtogether:3.thedangerofspendingtoomuchtimelookingatthecomputer:4.Othersupportingideas:5.Whatconclusion（结论）canyoudrawfromthediscussionabove?T:Pleasereadthegivenexpressionsandpatternssilently.Ss:IdontagreewiththisopinionInmyopinionItsveryimportanttoItwouldbeverydifficultto（学生们默默的读着）【评：这是在为学生写作准备素材和语言材料，给学生写作继续搭支架，为下一步写做准备。】T:Pleasediscussingroupsoffourhowtosupporttheoppositeviewandwritedownthekeywordsonyourguidingpaper.Ss:（学生热烈的讨论起来）Afterdiscussingingroupsoffourforaboutfiveminutes.T:Now.Letsappreciatesomeofyouropinions.Whowouldliketotellustheopinionsabouttheimportanceofhavingateacher?S1:Inmyopinion,itsveryimportanttohaveateacher.Wecanaskteachersquestionsandchatwiththem.Theycanalsotellushowtolearnwellandwecangetalongwellwithteachers.T:OK!Sitdown,please.Anyotheropinions?S2:Wecanasktheteacherforhelpwhenweareintrouble.S3:Theteachercanexplainthingsmoreclearlyanditismorerelaxingforustostudywithateacherhelp.T:Oh,Iagreewithyou.Teacherscanexplainthingsmoreclearlyandvividly,comparedwithcomputers.Whatdoyouthinkoftheimportanceofworkingtogether?【评：学生们对第一个问题回答后，老师及时加以总结和提升。】S4:Itwouldbeverydifferenttosolveproblemsalone.Ifweworktogether,wecanhelpeachother.S5:Wecanlearnfromeachotherandwecanexchangeourideas.S6:Wecanalsomakefriendswhenworkingtogetherasaclass.T:Yes,friendshipisveryvaluable.Anyotheropinions?S7:Workingtogether,wecanbemoreenergeticandmoreinterestedinwhatwelearn.T:Welldone.Howdoyoufindthedangerofspendingtoomuchtimelookingatthecomputer?S8:Itwilldoharmtoourhealthanditsbadforoureyes.S9:Spendingtoomuchtimelookingatthecomputermaywasteourvaluabletimeandinfluenceourstudy.S10:Ifsomeonespendstoomuchtimewithcomputers,hemaybecomecold-bloodedandhavedifficultyingettingalongwellwithpeoplearound.S11:Sometimeswemaybelostincomputergames.T:Oh,thatwouldbealittledangerous.Doyouhaveothersupportingideasbesidesthethreepointsabove?Itseemsthatthestudentsdontknowhowtoanswerthequestion.T:Areallthewebsitesandinformationgoodforthestudentslikeus?【评：在同学们解决完课本上的问题后，老师引导学生回答开放性问题，为了便于学生理解，老师使用了back-upquestion.】S12:Maybethereissomeinformationandwebsitesonlin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passageclearlyorganized,youcanusethephrasesonthescreen,suchasFirstly;Secondly;Thirdly;Inaword;orTobeginwith;Inaddition;Whatsmore;Inconclusion,andsoon.Aboutfifteenminutesforyoutowriteaparagraphabout100words.Iwillaskoneofyoutowriteontheblackboard.Thestudentswriteaparagraphontheguidingpaperandonegirlisaskedtowritehersontheblackboard.Aftertenminutes,mostofthestudentshavefinishedit.【评：通过以上各种活动，学生明白了写作任务，知道写什么，怎样写，然后给学生一个相对安静的环境，限时写作。老师走到学生中间巡查，个别指导，以了解信息。】StepIVPost-WritingT:Sinceyouhavefinishedwriting,itstimetoevaluateyourwork.Firstofall,lookatthestandardsonthescreen.Andthenreadyourwritingandcheckthemistakesbyyourselffirst.Twominutesforthestudentstochecksomesimplemistakesbythemselves.T:Letsevaluatetheworkontheblackboardinpublic.Pleaseappreciatesomebeautifulsentencesandphrases.Aboveall,whatdoyouthinkofthehandwriting?Ss:Ok.Butitsnotverybeautiful.T:Iagreewithyou.Herhandwritingneedsalittleimproving.Letsseethestructure.Hasshegiventheviewfirst?Ss:Yes.Thatsthefirstsentence.T:Aretheresomesupportingideasandaconclusion?Ss:Yes.T:Shehasalsousedsomeoftheexpressionsandpatternsmentionedabove.Thatsgreat.Whocantellushowtomakeherwritingbetter?Ss:Byusingsomephrasestomakeitmoreorganizedandclear.【评：老师先引领学生批改，目的是让学生知道怎样批改，学会欣赏美句。】T:Thatsright.Now,pleaseexchangeyourpassageswithyourdeskmatestoevaluate.Later,Iwillchoosesomeofyoutoshowinpublic.Thestudentsexchangetheirwritingandevaluateeachothersaccordingtothegivenstandards.Fourminuteslater.【评：给出评价依据，学生两两互批，老师走动指点,这及照顾个体有关注全体，有面及点，效果好。】T:Nowletsappreciatemore.Pleaselookatthescreen.Howdoyoufindthehandwriting?Ss:Notsogood.T:Thehandwritingneedsimproving.AndthefirstletterofInternetshouldbecapitalized.Theboyhasusedthepatternsandexpressionsdiscussedabove.T:Anothercomposition.Ithinkthehandwritingismuchbetter.Pleasepayattentiontothepatternsandsupportingideas.【评：展示学生的作品，师生共同评价，提升学生评价能力。】T:Well,inthisperiodwehaveknownhowtowriteanessaygivingoppositeview,r