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模拟3：Dear friends， As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, its very important for us to form healthy eating habits. However, bad eating habits are still very common among us students. Some of us often go to school without breakfast; some like to have snacks; some others are particular about food; and still some eat or drink too much. All these bad habits will surely do harm to our health. To keep fit, we should have various healthy diets, which generally included proper amounts of fish, meat, vegetables, fruit as well as main food. Besides, wed better have meals regularly. In my opinion, we should try to develop healthy eating habits to build up a strong body. Only in this way can we have enough energy to study better. Thats all. Thank you!模拟4:Dear Tom, The Palace Museum is also called the Forbidden City. It was first constructed in 1407 and completed in 1420. It has 9999 rooms in all. In China, the number “9” is traditionally regarded as a lucky one. The Palace Museum attracts many visitors from all over the world every year. Now it is open to Chinese students free every Tuesday. The Palace Museum has a lot of precious treasure in the history of China. Welcome to China. I am looking forward to your arrival.Best wishes! Yours, Li Ming 2010 年会考书面表达：某英文报纸正举行“我难忘的一次经历”主题征文比赛。 假设你曾参加过全校大合唱比赛。请你以“An unforgettable experience”为题，根据下表提示， 用英语写一篇短文，准备投稿。ActivityA group singing competitionPreparationResultWin the first prizeYour feelingse.g. No pains, no gains注意：（1） 短文徐包括上述要点， 可适当增加细节以使行文连贯 （2） 文中不饿出现真实的人名、校名等个人信息（3）词数： 100左右。开头部分已给出，不计入总词数 An unforgettable experience During the past year at high school, I have had many unforgettable experience. One of them was.常见失误分析从评卷老师反馈的情况来看，学生在书面表达中暴露了英语学习中的诸多问题，特别明显的有：1、篇章方面（1）审题不仔细。此次写作要求考生描写“大合唱比赛”，根据题目要求，考生需要发挥想象力，进一步描写赛前准备、比赛结果和赛后感想。出现的审题错误主要集中在两处，把“大合唱”写成个人参赛，以及赛前准备理解为上台前的准备。（2）重点不突出。根据题目要求，考生应该把重点放在赛前准备和赛后感想上。部分考生却以大量笔墨书写比赛情况，多数考生赛后感不够突出。（3）文章未分段部分考生虽然在语法上表达正确,要点也基本齐全,但难以令阅卷老师给以高分，主要是文章没有分段落，造成阅卷不适，影响阅卷老师理解及阅卷速度。此外，书写太差或涂改太多, 影响卷面的整洁，也造成部分失分。2、基础知识掌握不够扎实。主要表现在：（1）词法方面A词性混淆。如，I didnt sure I would do it well. But my classmatessmile and gave me brave./ To our surprisedB代词误用或乱用。如，Wes feeling is No pains, no gains./ Teachers admired our./Ours class were happy.C情态动词用法错误在情态动词方面，考生最常见的错误有：情态动词后不跟动词原形；如，No one could described how excited we are./I cannot to sing well.另外，情态动词忘记使用过去式，如该用“could”时却用 “can”（2）句法方面A.谓语部分系动词和行为动词同时使用，这是最典型的错误。比如： Our teacher and some girls were cried. 又如：We were had。B.谓语与非谓语不清。如，And in music lesson, listen to carefully is also important. When I singing over, any teacher give me a beautiful smile.。C句子部分缺失。如，Only try your best, can you get success./ Not only felt no pains, no gains, but also thanked D时态混乱。如，My classmatessmile and gave me brave. I believe myself would to be best.E复合句结构紊乱。如，Its true what you believe you can do that you can succeed.F复合句连接词用法错误。如，I never so happy before that we were won the first prize. （3）母语干扰严重，中式英语流露明显。太多的考生未能形成良好的英语思维，表述时，还是离不了从中文到英文一一找对的模式。比如，We are in the singing competition very happy./This is sentence can around my life./ I think we win the first prize are difficult.（四）高分作文基本特点：1、语言有亮点，能适当使用一些高级词汇及高级句型结构，语言地道，基本没有低级语法错误，句式多样化。如：Morning found me singing by the window.We got along well with others despite the fact that were from different classes.Luckily, we made progress gradually.We sang the song again and again, making full use of time to practice.We won the first prize in time.We made it.As the competition was approaching, 2、 观点与众不同，体现个性。绝大多数考生的赛后感采用了题目中提供的 “No pains, no gains.”，除此以外，并无其他更多想法。但也有考生提到这次经历改变了他（她）的性格，让他（她）变得自信，还有考生提到通过大合唱比赛，自己交到很多朋友，深刻体会学会合作的重要性。附录中的优作4和优作5便是很好的例子。作文1：During the past year at high school, I have had many unforgettable experiences. One of them was a group singing competition, which left a deep impression on my mind. As you can imagine, how delighted I was when I heard that I was chosen as a member of the singing group. Meanwhile, I became aware of the difficulty. I had to admit that I was sort of weak in singing, even if I was so into it. In order not to let others down, I began to make great effort. Firstly, I hurried to buy some tapes and tried to learn the sill by myself. Then I left and discussed with teachers and partners together as well. Most particularly, I practiced every day. I felt strongly that it could make a real difference to practice constantly. Practice makes perfect, isnt it? Much to my joy, we took the first prize. I learned much from the unforgettable experience. As the saying goes, “No pains, no gains”， which inspires me a lot. Only when I put into my heart, can I get a great result back.作文2：During the past year at high school, I have had many unforgettable experiences. One of them was a group singing competition.In order to get success, all of us devoted ourselves to preparing the competition. Some of them wrote a beautiful song together, some bought cheap but great clothes, others borrowed guitars and violins. With the help of our teacher, we gathered together after class to practice singing the song. Although it was difficult to sing well, none of us thought about giving up. We tried our best no matter how difficult it was. Finally, we did well in the competition and won the first prize.I learned a lot from the experience. No pains, no gains. It is worthwhile for you to do everything meaningful and you will benefit a lot, just like Nothing is impossible to those who will try. So when I am in trouble, I will sing the song, which can cheer me up. This experience is so unforgettable that I will never forget it.作文3：During the past year at high school, I have had many unforgettable experiences. One of them was taking part in a group singing competition, which was held in our school. Every class was supposed to prepare for it and compete. As a member, especially a leader of my class, I devoted much time to organizing our perform. Having selected the song, we remained everyday after class to practice it. We helped each other and often sang together whenever we had spare time. I encouraged my classmates to believe in ourselves. And because of the determination of winning, we paid great effort. Eventually, we won the first prize. And I have learned that “No pains, no gains.” 作文4：During the past year at high school, I have had many unforgettable experiences. One of them was the experience that I took part in a group singing competition.As a matter of fact, I used to be shy and I didnt dare to sing in front of others. It was my classmates who had encouraged me to be brave. I was afraid to forget the words, which would make a bad impression, so we practiced after school. Two weeks later, we stood on the stage where we could show ourselves with sweet smiles. As for me, I stood confidently and tried my best to sing as well as I can.No pains, no gains. We won the first prize. Everyone was tired but happy. The competition made it possible for me to become confident. After all, there is nothing impossible for those who will try. What an unforgettable experience it was for me!作文5：During the past year at high school, I ha