WritingEnglishComposition.ppt

WritingEnglishComposition,通城县隽水寄宿中学卢细华,-SavingtheEarth,writing,CompareAwithB,whichisbetter?Why?,CompareAwithB,whichisbetter?Why?,习作演练(15分),随着经济的快速发展，中国发生了巨大的变化，但我们也遇到许多问题。请你根据表格内的要点提示，以Savingtheearth为题写一篇短文，列举人类的不明智之举，以及导致的问题，并且针对问题提出解决办法。,要求：1，必须包含所有提示信息，词数在80左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数；2，意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；3，请勿使用真实姓名、校名及提示信息以外的地名。SavingtheEarthAstimegoesby,manismakingtheearthsick._,Pre-writing,认真审题,1,Whatcontentsshouldbewritten?,现象Phenomenon(1.throwrubbisheverywhere2.cutdowntrees3.pourwasteinto）,influences(4.Changeintodesert5.Waterandairdirty6.Thetemperatureisrising),opinions(1.Wehadbetter2.Wehaveonlyoneearth.),2,Whatlinkingwordswillbeused?,whatsworse,also,Asaresult,notonlybutalso,so,3,Howmanywordsshouldbewritten?,About80words.,列出提纲，画写作导图(makeawritingmindmap),Writing,几点建议：,1.注意标点和字母大小写.,2.注意句子的结构正确。,3.注意恰当使用关联词(thelinkingwords)。,本篇文章应分为几段，每段都写什么？应选用哪种时态？第几人称？需要用到哪些句式结构？,请构思：,Correctthecompositionbyyourself!,1，Exchangeyourarticleswithanothergroup,thenunderlinethegoldensentencesandcirclethemistakes.2，Scorethecomposition.,Groupwork,Post-writing,评分标准（Writingscorestandard）,Correctthemistakesinwriting,1,“汉语式”英语2,时态的误用3,用词不当4，修饰语错位5，结构不完整6，逻辑关系混乱不清7，词性误用8，指代不清9，综合性语言错误(大写字母、拼写、主位一致、标点、冠词、名词单复数）,Onepossibleversion,SavingtheEarthAstimegoesby,manismakingtheearthsick.Peoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Alsotheycutdownmanytrees,whichdoesgreatharmtoourenvironment.Whatsworsetheypourwasteintotherivers.Asaresult,richlandisbecomingdesert.Thewaterandairaregettingdirtieranddirtier.Evenworse,thetemperatureisrising.Sowemustdoeverythingwecantosaveourearth.Itsourdutytoprotecttheenvironment.Stoppouringwastewaterandproducingterriblegas.Wehadbetterwalk,rideabikeortakeasubwaytoworkinsteadoftakingabusorataxi.Wehaveonlyoneearth.Savingtheearthistosaveushumanbeings.,1.Beforewriting,readthetopicrequirementcarefully,thenmakeawritingoutline/map.2.Whilewriting,useEnglishexpressionsasoftenaspossible.3.Afterwriting,correctyourwritingagainandagain,makeitcorrect、fluentandneat.,Sometipsforyou!,Homework,A：继续改写本节课作文，使它更加完美。B：“保护