2016.11书面表达(公开课,姚).ppt

1,书面表达之五步规范写作,写作五步骤：.审题.列要点.译成简单句.句式升级现亮点.誊写,2,Leadingin&Learning:,3,4,你校英语报征集城市介绍的稿件，请你根据以下提示写一篇英语短文，介绍一下我们的家乡-仁寿。,第二节书面表达（满分25分）,1.位于四川省西南部，距离成都大约100公里。2.有1400多年的悠久历史，占地2606平方公里，是一个有160多万人口的大县（county）。3.黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人，每年吸引了成千上万的游客。4.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。5.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异，呈现了一个崭新的面貌。注意：1.词数100左右。2.可适当增加情节，以使行文连贯。,5,Learning:,6,你校英语报征集城市介绍的稿件，请你根据以下提示写一篇英语短文，介绍一下我们的家乡-仁寿。,1.位于四川省西南部，距离成都大约100公里。2.有1400多年的悠久历史，占地约2606平方公里，是一个有160多万人口的大县。3.黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人，每年吸引了成千上万的游客。4.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。5.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异，呈现了一个崭新的面貌。注意：1.词数100左右。2.可适当增加情节，以使行文连贯。,第二步：细节要点和核心词汇：,7,.我的家乡-仁寿。.位于四川省西南部。.距离成都大约100公里。.有1400多年的悠久历史。.占地2606平方公里。.是一个有160多万人口的大县。.仁寿的黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人。.每年吸引了成千上万的游客。.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。+.人们可以在这里放松自己。.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异。(12).呈现了一个崭新的面貌。,细节要点分解：,8,.我的家乡-仁寿。.位于四川省西南部。.距离成都大约100公里。.有1400多年的悠久历史。.占地2606平方公里。.是一个有160多万人口的大县（county）。.仁寿的黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人。.每年吸引了成千上万的游客。.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。+.人们下班后可以在这里放松自己。.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异。(12).呈现了一个崭新的面貌。,第二步：细节要点和核心词汇：,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,_,它,它,它,它,仁寿,仁寿,population,takeup,changealot,takeon,relaxoneself,attract,tensofthousandsof,inthesuburb,fascinatingscenery,beawayfrom,liein/belocated/situatedin,withalonghistory,hometown,_,9,你校英语报征集城市介绍的稿件，请你根据以下提示写一篇英语短文，介绍一下我们的家乡-仁寿。,1.位于四川省西南部，距离成都大约100公里。2.有1400多年的悠久历史，占地2606平方公里，是一个有160多万人口的大县（county）。3.黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人，每年吸引了成千上万的游客。4.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。5.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异，呈现了一个崭新的面貌。注意：1.词数100左右。2.可适当增加情节，以使行文连贯。,第三步：连词成句：,Practice：,10,.我的家乡-仁寿。.它位于四川省西南部。.它距离成都大约100公里。.仁寿有1400多年的悠久历史。,Renshouismyhometown.,ItislocatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince.,第三步：连词成句：,Itisabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.,Showing:,11,.它占地大约2606平方公里。.仁寿是一个有160多万人口的大县（county）。.仁寿的黑龙滩（湖）景色迷人。.每年它吸引了成千上万的游客。,Itattractstensofthousandsoftourists.,ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeisveryfascinating.,Ittakesup2606squarekilometers.,a.Renshouisalargecounty.b.Ithasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,12,Peoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,Inthepasttenyears,Renshouhaschangedalot.,Ittakesonanewlook.,Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear.,.去年在郊区还建成了一个漂亮的新公园。+.人们下班后可以在这里放松自己。.在过去的10年里，仁寿日新月异。(12).仁寿呈现了一个崭新的面貌。,13,4.ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.,1.Renshouismyhometown.,2.ItislocatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince.,3.Itisabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,8.Itattractstensofthousandsoftourists.,7.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeisveryfascinating.,6.Renshouisalargecounty.Ithasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,5.Ittakesup2606squarekilometers.,9+.Peoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,11.Inthepasttenyears,Renshouhaschangedalot.,12.Ittakesonanewlook.,9.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear.,学生草稿版：,14,学生草稿版：,4.ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.,1.Renshouismyhometown.,2.ItislocatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince.,3.Itisabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,6.Renshouisalargecounty.Ithasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,5.Ittakesupabout2606squarekilometers.,第四步：句式升级造亮点：,1.2.ItisveryeasyforustovisitChengdu,becauseRenshouisonlyabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,1.1.Renshou,locatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince，ismyhometown.,2.,6.Renshouisalargecountywhichhasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,15,5.Renshouhaschangedalotinthepasttenyears,takingonanewlook.,4.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear,sopeoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,8.Itattractstensofthousandsoftourists.,7.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeisveryfascinating.,9+.Peoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,11.Inthepasttenyears,Renshouhaschangedalot.,12.Ittakesonanewlook.,9.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear.,3.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeissofascinatingthattensofthousandsoftouristsareattractedtoplayhere.,16,第四步：句式升级造亮点：,5.Renshouhaschangedalotinthepasttenyears,takingonanewlook.,3.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeissofascinatingthattensofthousandsoftouristsareattractedtoplayhere.,1.2.ItisveryeasyforustovisitChengdu,becauseRenshouisonlyabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,1.1.Renshou,locatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince，ismyhometown.,2.,4.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear,sopeoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,4.ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.,1.Renshouismyhometown.,2.ItislocatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince.,3.Itisabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.,8.Itattractstensofthousandsoftourists.,7.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeisveryfascinating.,6.Renshouisalargecounty.Ithasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,5.Ittakesupabout2606squarekilometers.,9+.Peoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.,11.Inthepasttenyears,Renshouhaschangedalot.,12.Ittakesonanewlook.,9.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear.,6.Renshouisalargecountywhichhasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.,17,Renshou,locatedinsouthwestofSichuanProvince，ismyhometown.ItisveryeasyforustovisitChengdu,becauseRenshouisonlyabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.Ittakesup2606squarekilometers.Renshouisalargecountywhichhasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeissofascinatingthattensofthousandsoftouristsareattractedtoplayhere.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesuburblastyear,Sopeoplelivingherecanrelaxthemselvesafterwork.Renshouhaschangedalotinthepasttenyears,takingonanewlook.Renshouwilldevelopbetterandbetterinthefuture.YouarewelcometoRenshou.,4,第五步：过渡衔接联成篇（誊写）：,18,Renshou,locatedinthesouthwestofSichuanProvince，ismyhometown.ItisveryeasyforustovisitChengdu,becauseRenshouisonlyabout100kilometersawayfromChengdu.ThehistoryofRenshouisaslongasmorethan1400years.Ittakesup2606squarekilometers.Renshouisalargecountywhichhasapopulationofmorethan1.6million.ThesceneryoftheHeilongtanlakeissofascinatingthattensofthousandsoftouristsareattractedtoplayhere.Abeautifulnewparkwascompletedinthesubur