2011江苏高考书面表达解析

2011江苏高考书面表达解析,第五部分：书面表达（满分25分）81.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容：描述照片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等；结合自身实际，谈谈你的感想；举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。注意：可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。Theburdenofstudentshasbeenahottopicforyears,buttheloadofparentshasreceivedlittleattention,especiallyfromtheirownchildren._,此次的书面表达是一篇漫画类作文,是考纲中一直出现,但是首次露面的题型。这篇漫画类作文的话题很传统，体现的是学生所熟悉的“感恩”的内容，但是图中的提示，与其他省市以往的中文提示不同，这次使用了英文提示，但是英文提示不难。本文将从谋篇，遣词，造句，逻辑四方面展开。,(一)谋篇三步走精读文字部分写作主题:“感恩”1.Describethepicture2.relatethepicturetoaphenomenon3.voiceyouropinion,1.“描述图片”应该包括何人何事和何感受。何人：alittlegirlandherworkingmom何事：Alittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily.Realizinghermommustbeverytiredafteradayswork,thelittlegirlhelpstoremovethebagfromhershoulder.Meanwhile,hermomkneelsdown.何感受:Themomisthankfulanddelighted.Seeingthis,wearealltouched.,所以第一段可以写成：Thepictureshowsusatouchingmomentwhenalittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily.Realizinghermommustbeverytiredafteradayswork,thelittlegirlhelpstoremovethebagfromhershoulder.Inresponse,themomkneelsdowntoshowhowthankfulanddelightedshefeels.,2.“联系生活”段落中，可以写两方面。何种人;怎么做.以“感恩”为主题的作文，学生可以结合自身实际，说一下自己有没有做到给父母减负：何人：mymomandI该人的做法（一般是贬义）:Totallyengagedinmystudy,Iseldompayattentiontowhatmotherneedsandfeels,andalwaysthinkstudyingwellistheonlythingIcoulddoinreturn.,3.“个人见解”:给出相应的解决方式。说一下自己将来准备怎么给父母“减负”参考：Iwillsparenoefforttohelpwiththeeverydaywashing,andbedroomcleaning.Inaddition,Illtrymybesttopreparebreakfastmyself,soastosharemothersdailyburden.最后来一个升华句：“Beingagooddaughteroutweighsbeingagoodstudent.”,（二）遣词三原则复杂原则、多变原则和温暖原则。复杂原则:“牛词”来代替一些“土词“忙于做某事”bebusydoingsthbeengagedindoingsth.；beabsorbedinsth;beburiedinsth等多变原则:相同意思，不同的词或者词组代换最后一段，“努力”:“sparenoeffort”和“tryonesbest”。温暖原则:任何一个名词用形容词/定语从句/同位语从句来修饰.如workingmum任何一个动词/形容词由一个副词来修饰，如：“alittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily”,（3）造句三套路适当拉长，定语从句、并列结构、插入语等使得句子更丰满。“Inresponse,themomkneelsdowntoshowhowthankfulanddelightedshefeels.”英式思维，不是一直以人作为主语，宁否定不肯定;宁被动不主动。如“Beingagooddaughteroutweighsbeingagoodstudent.”闪光句式出彩句，如“Totallyengagedinmystudy,Iseldompayattentiontowhatmotherneedsandfeels”。,（四）逻辑-八联系好的文章除了合理的篇章，出彩的字词，还离不开好的逻辑，善用逻辑连接词。让步:but,yet,however；转折although,though,despite,inspiteof；并列:bothand,aswellas,neithernor；递进：inaddition,besides,moreover；因果：becauseof,dueto,owingto,thanksto,onaccountof等。,宁波卷2012适应性考试,单项选择：DBBDCCAAACBABCCDBACD完形：BCBAADBDABBDCBACBACD阅读A篇：BCDAB,书面表达中常用连词分类举例,举例:forexample,forinstance,takeforexample,suchas,like，andsoon，soonandsoforth,andsoonandonandon,etc.等。,说明:thatstosay，inotherwords，namely,等。,因果：so，for，therefore，asaresult，thus，because，becauseof,thanksto，owingto,dueto等。,递进:then，besides，inaddition,furthermore，moreover,whatsmore等。,顺序:firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally；inthefirstplace,inthesecondplace,inthethirdplace,lastlytobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally；tostartwith,next,inaddition,finally；firstandforemost,besides,lastbutnotleast；mostimportantofall,moreover,finally（以上为时间顺序）inthefrontof，infrontof，before,behind,atthebackof,ontheright/left(of)，totheright/leftof，ontheothersideof，inthecenterof，inthemiddleof，atthebeginningof,attheendof，bythesideof，onthetopof，atthefootof，onthebottomof,inside，outside,upstairs,downstairs（以上为空间顺序）,转折:nevertheless,however,although,though,but，onthecountry，afterall,oppositely等。,总结:inshort,inaword,ingeneral,generallyspeaking,finally，atlast，asfarasIknow，inbrief，brieflyspeaking,intheend,asamatteroffact,inreality,infact,onthewhole,inconclusion,onaccountofthis,therefore等。,强调:really,indeed，certainly，surely，forsure,aboveall等。,对比:inthesameway，justas，incommonwith,comparedwith,ontheonehandontheotherhand,foronethingforanother，similarly等。,平行：and，bothand，aswellas