2012届高考英语 书面表达(文字提纲式作文)练习讲评一课件

2012届高考英语书面表达（文字提纲式作文）练习讲评一,注意：1.词数不少于100；2.可是当加入细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯；3.信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总次数。参考词汇：海河theHaiheRiverDearMr.Smith,IamLiHua,chairmanoftheStudentUnion,fromChenguangHighSchool._YourssincerelyLiHua,假设你是晨光中学学生会主席李华。你校将于6月26日接待来自于美国某中学的学生访问团。你受学校委托，负责安排在津的一日活动。请根据以下提示，用英语给该团的领队Smith先生写一封电子邮件，介绍活动计划并简要说明理由，最后征求对方意见。上午与我校学生座谈（话题如校园生活、文化差异等）；中午与我校学生共同进餐（午餐包括饺子、面条等）；下午与我校学生游览海河。,讲评,一、认真审题，确立话题，归纳要点,通过审题，确定本文的话题为“给对方介绍活动安排并征求对方意见”。围绕这个话题，将题目中叙述的文字转换成以下要点：,你们6月26日来访我们学校；我受学校委托，负责安排你们在津的一日活动；我给你们做一下简单介绍；上午与我校学生座谈（话题如校园生活、文化差异等）；中午与我校学生共同进餐（午餐包括饺子、面条等）；下午与我校学生游览海河；征求对方意见。,二、理顺要点，增加细节，连贯表达,本篇书面表达的文字提纲实际上就是按照表达顺序提供的，所以不存在理顺要点的环节。但为了表达的连贯，还需要增加要点：,得知（你们6月26日来访我们学校），我非常高兴。（我受学校委托，负责安排你们在津的一日活动），我非常荣幸；根据“上午与我校学生座谈（话题如校园生活、文化差异等）”这一要点结合常识应该增加：带你们参观校园等；座谈目的是什么？增加相互之间的理解简要说明一下吃饺子、面条的理由：中国特色的食品，让客人了解中国传统习俗和文化；海河是著名的风景名胜；访问到此结束；,在征求对方意见时要增加一些客套话。如：您认为我的这个活动计划如何？如果您对这个活动计划安排不满意的话，我们会按照您的建议改进。我盼望您的回复。,三、化解难点，灵活表达，句能达意,本篇所给要点和增加的细节比较多，有些要点和细节表达起来还比较棘手。,1.化解难点受学校委托beappointedbytheschoolbeaskedbytheschool共进午餐havelunchtogetherhaveaget-togetherinourschoolsdininghall饺子、面条：中国特色的食品ChinesetypicalfoodsuchasdumplingsandnoodlessuchChinesetypicalfoodasdumplingsandnoodleseatChinesetypicalfoodsuchasdumplingsandnoodles,增加相互之间的理解promoteunderstandingeachotherhelpunderstandeachothermoreimprovemutualunderstanding海河：著名的风景名胜HaiheRiver：afamousplaceofinterest.visittheHaiheRiverandenjoythemostbeautifulscenerythere,2.变点为句ImgladtoknowyoullpayavisittoourschoolonJune26.ImgladtoknowyoullcometoourschoolonJune26.Ifeel/amhonoredtohavebeenappointedtotakechargeofarrangingalltheactivitiesonthatday.Ifeel/amhonoredtohavebeenaskedtoinchargeofyourscheduleonthatday.Nowwouldyoulikemetointroduceittoyoubriefly/inbrief?Inthemorning,wewillshowyouaroundourschoolcampus.,Inthemorning,youllhaveatalkwith/communicatewithusstudents.Thetopicincludesschoollife,theculturaldifferencesinordertopromoteunderstandingeachother.Inthemorning,adiscussionwillbeheld,whichmaycoversuchtopicsasschoollife,culturaldifferences,aimingtoimprovemutualunderstanding.Wellhavelunchtogether.YouwillbeabletoeatChinesetypicalfoodsuchasdumplingsandnoodles,helpingyouknowmoreaboutourtraditionalcustomsandculture.Toletyouknowmoreaboutourtraditionalcustomsandculture,wewillpreparedumplingsandnoodlesasmainfood.,HaiheRiverisafamousplaceofinterestinTianjin.Sointheafternoon,youllvisitittogether(along)with/aswellasus.Intheafternoon,youtogetherwithsomeofourstudentrepresentativesaregoingtovisittheHaiheRiverandenjoythebeautifulscenerythere.Youwillendyourvisittoourschool.,Whatdoyouthinkoftheplan?Ifyouarenotsatisfiedwiththeplan,wellimproveitaccordingtoyoursuggestions.Ilookforwardtoyourreply.Whatdoyouthinkoftheplan?Canyougivemesomeadviceonhowtomakeyourvisittoourschoolmoreinterestingandimpressive?Ilookforwardtoyourreply.Thisistheplan(which/that)Ihavemadeforyourvisit.Iwonderifyouaresatisfiedwithit.Ifnot,pleasedoletmeknow.WelltryourbesttomeetyourdemandsWelldoall(that)wecan(do)tomeetyourdemands/Welldowhatwecantomeetyourdemands.,四、错落有致，连接恰当，发挥有度,连接恰当，整理成文DearMr.Smith,IamLiHua,chairmanoftheStudentUnion,fromChenguangHighSchool.ImgladtoknowyoullpayavisittoourschoolonJune26.Ifeel/amhonoredtohavebeenappointedtotakechargeofarrangingalltheactivitiesonthatday.Nowwouldyoulikemetointroduceittoyoubriefly/inbrief?Inthemorning,wewillshowyouaroundourschoolcampus.Thenadiscussionwillbeheld,whichmaycoversuchtopicsasschoollife,culturaldifferencesinordertopromoteunderstandingeachother.Atnoon,wellhavelunchtogetherandyouwillbeabletoeatChinesetypicalfoodsuchasdumplingsandnoodles,helpingyouknowmoreaboutourtraditionalcustomsandculture.HaiheRiverisafamousplaceofinterestinTianjin.Sointheafternoon,youllvisitittogether(along)withus.Afterthat,youwillendyourvisittoourschool.Whatdoyouthinkoftheplan?Ifyouarenotsatisfiedwiththeplan,wellimproveitaccordingtoyoursuggestions.Ilookforwardtoyourreply.Yourssincerely,LiHua,参考范文,DearMr.Smith,IamLiHua,chairmanoftheStudentUnion,fromChen-guangHighSchool.AstudentsvisitinggroupcomingfromtheUSwillpayavisittoourschoolonJune26andIwasappointedtotakechargeofarrangingalltheactivitiesonthatday.Myplanabouttheseactivitiesisasfollows.Inthemorningonyourarrival,wewillshowyouaroundourschoolandintroduceourmostadvancedsciencelabtoyou.Thenadiscussionwillbeheld,whichmaycoversuchtopicsasschoollife,culturaldifferencesandsoon,aimingtoimprovemutualunderstanding.Atnoon,wewillhaveaget-togetherinourschoolsdininghall.Toletourguestsknowmoreaboutourtraditionalcustomsandculture,wewillpreparedumplingsandnoodlesasmainfood.Intheafternoon,ourgueststogetherwithsomeofourstudentrepresentativesaregoingtovisittheHaiheRiverandenjoythebeautifulscenerythere.Afterthat,youwillendyourvisittoourschool.Whatdoyouthinkoftheplan?Canyougivemesomeadviceonhowtomakeyourvisittoourschoolmoreinterestingandimpressive?Ilookforwardtoyourreply.Yourssincerely,LiHua,同步练习,【网络资源2011届高考预测】假设你是李华，星期天你要和你的同班同学李明一起去敬老院参加义务劳动，你去找他，但他不在家，你给他留言说明要求，内容如下：（1）9：30在学校门口集合；（2）带劳动工具（洗衣粉、理发工具、除草工具等）；（3）自带午饭，骑自行车前往。注意：（1）词数120左右（留言条格式已给出，不计入总词数）；（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。DearLiMing,LiHua,参考范文,DearLiMing,ThisSundaywellgotothenursinghomeanddosomevoluntarylabor.YouwereoutwhenIdroppedinonyou.Therefore,Ihadtoleaveamessagetoyou.Accordingtowhatmonitorsaid,wellmeetatthegateofourschoolat9:30tomorrowmorningandstartouttogetherbybike.Soyoushouldtakeyourbikeandd