高考英语书面表达-how to polish your writing.ppt

Topolishyourwriting让你的作文起来,XiamenYingcaiSchoolXieJianchun,书面表达评讲之:,“亮”,高级词汇与高级句式的润色升级,一、使用高级词汇写作时，“高级词汇”如能运用贴切自然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一两个，也会为你的作文增添色彩。,1标新立异写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，别人有可能想不到的词汇，恰当地求新求异。Weallhavethesamechance.Weallpossessthesamechance(opportunity)Wehavealotofhomeworktodoattheweekend.Wehaveendlesshomeworktodoattheweekend.,2短语优先多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。Icannolongerbearthewayhespeakstous.Icannolongerputupwiththewayhespeakstous.Theboyrealizedthedangerandbegantorunaway.Theboywasawareofthedangerandbegantorunaway.,3避免重复尽量避免过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用其他恰当的同义词或词组来代替。Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherlikeswatchingfootballmatches.Ilikereadingwhilemybrotherenjoyswatchingfootballmatches.二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来1恰当使用被动语态Aboveall,wemustdosomethingtostoppollution.Aboveall,somethingmustbedonetostoppollution.,2使用强调句Theaccidenthappenedtheotherday.Theaccidentdidhappentheotherday.Hedidntcometothepartybecausehewasverybusy.Itwasbecausehewasverybusythathedidntcometotheparty.,3使用倒装句WecanonlyimproveourEnglishinthisway.OnlyinthiswaycanweimproveourEnglish.Wedontknowitsvalueuntilwelosehealth.Notuntilwelosehealthdoweknowitsvalue.4使用省略句Althoughtheywerefacedwithmanyproblems,theydidntloseheart.Althoughfacedwithmanyproblems,theydidntloseheart.,5使用感叹句Wehadaverygoodtimewiththepeasantsthatday.Whatagoodtimewehadwiththepeasantsthatday!6使用with复合结构Becausetherewastoomuchnoise,Icouldntgoonstudying.Withthenoisegoingon,Icouldntgoonstudying.,7使用虚拟语气Ididnttakehisadvice,soIfailedintheexam.IfIhadtakenhisadvice,Iwouldnthavefailedintheexam.Itstimeforustotakemeasurestoprotectthewildanimals.Itshightimethatwetookmeasurestoprotectthewildanimals.,2016年福建省质检书面表达国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。,Threepiecesofastudentswork(学生作品）,13分,13分,16分,23分,Whatmakesagoodpieceofwriting?,1.neatwriting书写,2.content内容,3.structure结构,4.language语言,Goodfirstimpression,Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped,Everythingrequiredincluded,NoChinglishNoGrammaticalmistakesexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns,应用文写作五部曲,step1Topicexploring审题,step2Wording构词,step3Sentencemaking成句,step4Essaywriting成篇,step5Improving修订,Step1Topicexploring审题,1审体裁,2审人称,3审时态,4审要点,(定文章结构),高考书面表达（重庆卷）国外某网站举办新的一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学的学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包括:自我介绍写信目的话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由预祝活动成功注意：1.词数100左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。,Paragraph1:purposeoftheletter,Paragraph2:keypoints,Paragraph3：Properending（towishhimasuccess),三段式,总,分,总,自我介绍写信目的,话题（我们应该感恩）列举理由,预祝活动成功,inbrief,indetail,inbrief,Step2Wording构词,拼写词性近义词同音词单复数冠词大小写,Simplemistakesleaveabadimpression!,MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarefindingthemesfromstudentsallovertheworld.Now,IwritethisletterbecauseIwanttorecommandatheme.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtopic.Ourfatherandmotherthrowthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthanktothem.asaChinese,weshouldbethankful,becausewherethereisthankful,thererehopestomaketheworldbetter,andwithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveansuccessfulend.,be,a,As,lookingfortopics,recommend,topic,topic,throughthickandthin,thankfulness,17分,Letsworkonpolishingyourwritingtogether!Diversetopic-relatedchunksVarioussentencepatternsHOW?From17/18to21,HOW?1.改变词性来丰富表达,2.添加句型/高级词汇（短语，高中阶段词汇）,3.简单句复合句/长短句,step3Sentencing成句,1简单句,2并列句,3复合句,4非谓语形式,5特殊结构,时态，语态,别忘了并列连词,NoChinglish!,连词的选择,主语一致,避生就熟！,强调句型；倒装；独立主格结构,1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.,2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.,IamLihua,astudentfromXinHuaMiddleschool.,Improveyoursentences.,Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthenewsthatyourelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.,1.MynameisLiHua.IamastudentandIstudyinXinHuaMiddleSchool.,2.Ioftenvisityourweb,andfromitIknowyouarelookingfortopicsfromstudentsallovertheworld.,1.Weshouldthankfulisagoodtheme.2.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.3.Ourteacherteachesushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead,weshouldthanktothem.4.Onlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.5.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytheme.6.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveasuccessfulend.,Haveatry!,1.Weshouldbethankfulisagoodtopic.,Thatweshouldbegratefulisagoodidea.,2.Ourfatherandmotherthroughthickandthinraiseus,weshouldbethankfultothem.,Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.,3.Ourteachersteachushowtostudy,leadingalotofknowledgeintoourhead.weshouldthankthem.,Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldntbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.,4.AsaChinese,weshouldbethankful,andonlywithathankfulheart,wecanrealizehowbeautifullifeis.,ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.,Onlywithathankfulheartcanwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.,5.Ireallyhopeyoucanchoosemytopic.,Iwouldreallyappreciateitifmytopicischosen.Hopefully,mytopicwillbechosen.,6.Iwishtheactivitywillhaveansuccessfulend.,Wishtheactivityagreatsuccess.Mayyouractivitysucceed.,Step4essaywriting成篇Thatweshouldbethankfulisagoodidea.Itisourparentswhobroughtusupthroughthickandthin,soweshouldthankthem.Weoweourteachersthanks,forwecouldntbewhowearenowwithouttheirhardwork.ThankfulnessisalsoourtraditionalChinesevirtue.Wherethereisthankfulness,therearehopestomaketheworldbetter.Onlywithathankfulheart,canwefullyrealizehowbeautifullifeis.,Inmyopinion,Firstly,Besides,Whatsmore,Necessaryconjunctionsmakeapiecesawritingmoresmoothlydeveloped.,应用文写作五部曲,step1Topicexploring审题,step2Wording构词,step3Sentencemaking成句,step4Essaywriting成篇,step5Improving修订,draft(草稿）,1.Collectgodwords/phrases/sentences;2.Readmore;3.Practicemakesperfect;4.Beconfidentanytime.,Now,Letscheckwhetherourwritinghasbeenimprovedincontent,structureandlanguage?我们的文章亮起来了么？,ImLihua,astudentfromXinHuaMiddleSchool.Ioftenvisityourwebsite,whereIgotthewonderfulnewsthatyourelookingfortopicsfromstudentsalloverthew