高二英语communication workshop课件2

The Day When Everything Went Wrong,Period 1,In this lesson you will be able to1. Learn to polish by comparing two writings2. Write a story;3. Use linking words,Objectives:,Lead-in,Do you love stories?What factors should be included in a story?,Story,Who,When,Where,What,Lead-in,What will you write about when you see the title A Day When Everything Went Wrong?,Sample: tell what happened in the pictures,Last Monday, my alarm clock didnt ring, so I got up one hour late . When I hurriedly ran to the bus stop, the bus had left. As a result, I was late for school.,Write three or four sentences on one bad event that you have experienced, including who, when, where and what.,Stage One,Read Draft A of a students composition on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong. Question: How many events are mentioned in the story?,Events in Draft A,I Walked to school;I came last in the poetry reading competition;I spilled water on my pillow,Write two or three events on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong. You can write about every bad thing you have experienced, such as losing something important, hurting your leg, being late for school, failing an examShare your writing with your partner.,Stage Two,What other factors should be included in a story?,Story,Who,When,Where,What,Why,How,How to end,How you feel,Why:Feelings:,No school bus; not prepared the competitionTiresome; awkward,Read Draft A and find the other factors of the story,Put why and feelings in your writings.Share your writing with your partner.,Stage Three,Read Draft B and tell which one is better. What does the writer add in Draft B?In Draft B, the writer uses linking words and adds some details and specific information to attract the attention of the reader. Besides, the order of events is clearer and the language is more vivid.,Stage Four,Order of events:,A: 1.Because the school bus did not 2.At school, Mr. fan 3.When I got into bed that night, I ,B: 1.First, I had to wait 30 minutes for the school bus 2. The next problem happened when I arrived at school. 3. The last problem of this terrible day happened when I got into,First, next, lastWhen,Vivid language :,A: 1. It was hot and tiresome. 2. Mr. fan, the English teacher reminded me of the This surprised me 3. I came last in the competition.,B: 1. The day was hot and tiring.2. Mr. Fan, the English teacher, a large but friendly man, gave me a nasty surprise. He reminded me in his loud voice that 3. I was not surprised when I came last in the competition.,Adjectives are used.,Use linking words and adjectives in your writing, referring to information on page97.,Linking words,并列 转折 3. 因果4. 其他,and, bothand,but, however,so, because,when, suddenly, as soon as , unfortunately, sothat , first, in the end, as a result,Writing,一般过去时,第一人称,描述过去个人经历,Write your story A Day When Everything Went Wrong, using colourful language. (referring to Writing Help1 on P9