从具体案例谈读后续写.ppt

,从具体案例谈读后续写,高一英语组吕娜,读后续写:提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续写一篇150词左右的短文。（满分25分）,新高考考试说明,第五档：21-25第四档：16-20第三档：11-15第二档：6-10第一档：1-5,评分原则,力争第5档,一、记叙文阅读理解能力二、由读到写的思维能力三、记叙文书面表达能力,提高学生的能力,一、提高记叙文阅读理解能力,1.浅层的信息定位能力:,2.深层的文本分析能力：,what,when,where,who,why,how,1)理清故事的发展线索2)明确文本的中心思想3)分析人物的性格特点,二、由读到写的思维能力,细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节.,三、提高书面表达能力,1.语言的丰富性,2.语篇的连贯性,1.词汇、句式、语法的多样性2.情感表达的多样性3.动词使用的丰富性,1.内容连贯：故事大意一致，写作意图一致2.语句连贯：关联词的正确使用,如何写读后续写？,Astory,when,where,who,what,how,why,Step1.Readforbasicinformation,Step2.Readforplotdevelopmentclues(情节发展线索),Tips:1.关注人物的性格、动作的描写2.关注文章的主题中心,Step3.Predictpossibleplotdevelopment,Tips:1.阅读每段中的首句，进行布局。布局第一段时，要兼顾两段的首句：第二段的居首决定着第一段的走向。2.判断划线的关键词与主题内容的关联程度，确定要选用的词，以及所在的段落位置(p1foronething,foranother;not.but.对比关系:while,onthecontrary递进关系:even,whatsmore,besides,whatsworse,tomakethingsworse,worsestill转折关系:but,however,or,otherwise,orelse因果关系:as,because,since,thanksto,asaresult(of)让步关系:though,evenif/though,nomatterwh-,whether,1.词汇、句式、语法的多样性,简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。,主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。,常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。,句式结构：语法结构：词汇选择：,Curious,sheaskedthedriver(形容词做伴随状语),“Whydoyousaythatyouenvyme?”Thedrivermadeapositiveremarkon/thoughthighlyofMarkandsaidclearly,“whatimpressesmemostisthatagentlemaninamilitaryuniformaccompaniesyoutogetonandgetoffthebussecretly(名词性从句).Hemakessureyouhaveenteredyourofficebuildingsafelybeforewalkingaway.YouaresuchaluckyladythatIenvyyou.(结果状语从句)”Hearinghiswords,Susanwasoverwhelminglymoved.（分词做状语）,Sharemyessay,TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusanscheeks.Shewasfullofhappinesswhenthinkingaboutherhusbandscompany(状语从句省略).Forher,nothingismoredelightfulthanhavingsuchacaringhusband.(高级句式)Whenshereturnedhomefromwork,Susanhuggedherhusband.Tearsfillinghereyes(独立主格),sheexpressedherheartfeltgratitudetohim.Fromthenon,shewouldntbeafraidofwalkinginthedarkness.Thatsbecauseitisherhusbandslovethatlitherlifeandmadeherfullofconfidence.（表语从句、强调句式）,2.情感表达的多样性,在读后续写中，我们会经常需要表达我们的情感。1.高兴、开心2.伤心3.愤怒4.感动5.害怕6.担忧7.注意力集中8.宽容9.高度评价10.后悔、遗憾11.表达情感变化的句子,3.动词使用的丰富性,可以用一些高级词汇来修饰动词,常用动词搭配：1说得明白深刻saysthclearlyandimpressively2.步态优雅的走walkgracefully3.极为感动beoverwhelminglymoved4.就某事发表评论makearemarkuponsb5.严厉训斥某人givesbasharpscolding,stare/glareat/lookherintheeyewithhereyesshining/filledwithtearsHiseyessparklewithexcitement/gratitude.,pathimontheshoulder/headgrasp/holdoneshandspointtosb/sthwavehishands,nod/shakehisheadviolentlyHethoughtforamoment,表达感动：1.Toucheddeeply/immensely,we2.Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfeltgratitude（独立主格）.3.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she.（with复合结构）4.beoverwhelmingly(巨大地)moved,表达注意力集中1.Withhiseyesgluedtotheballoon,hedidntpayattentiontoanything.2.Hewaswalkingonthestreetwhenhewasknockedoverbyapersonandlosthisbalance.表达担忧：Whatifitdoesntwork?Whatifshedoesntlikethering?,表达害怕：1.Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullofhorror.2.Shewasstruckwithhorrorwhen.3.Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodtheretongue-tied（说不出话）.4.Afloodoffearwelledupinhim./Fearfloodedoverhim.5.Herheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearlysuffocated（窒息）.6.Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.（非谓语结构）,表达开心的句子：1.Davidwalkedonthestreet,confidentandpleased.2.Nothingcandelighthimasmuchasseeinghisgirlfriendssmile.Nothingismoredelightfulthan.3.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.4.Iwaswildwithjoy.5.Iwaspleasedbeyonddescription.6.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.7.Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.8.Sheshed（流出）tearsofjoy.9.Awildgaietygeti（快乐）tookholdofher10.Shewasoverflowingwith(fullof)happiness.,表达伤心的句子：1.withtearswellingupinhereyes2.withtearsintheireyes3.Istoodtheredumbfounded.目瞪口呆的4.Nothingismorefrustratingthanlosingtheringbeforetheproposal.5.Hewalkedonthestreet,frustratedandexhausted.6.Afrown（皱眉）nowstoodonhisface.7.Hearingthenews,sodesperatewasshethathethathedrownedsadnessinwine.8.Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands.9.IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.,表达愤怒的句子：1.Iwasseizedbyanger.2.Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage(狂怒).3.Hewasbreathingfireandfury.(愤怒)4.Hisvoicetrembledwithanger.5.Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.6.Hegavemealookofburninganger.7.stharouseonesdispleasure8.sbgetirritatedat.9.stamponesfootonanger愤怒地跺脚,表达后悔、遗憾的句子：1.IfIhadbeenaman,IwouldneverhavetoldmyDadIwastoooldforagoodbyekiss.2.IfIhadntcovereduphermistakesfromthebeginning,shewouldnthavegonethatfar.,情感变化的句子：1.Allthefrustrationandstressthathadbeenbuildingupinsideofmecametoacompletestop.2.Dayswhenyoufeelsmallandinsignificanthavegoneaway.3.Withthesunshinningaround,Imreallyfeelhapinessfromthebottomofmyheart.4.Overcomewithastrangefeelingthattheuniversewassortoflookingafterher,Shesmiled,closedhereyes,saidasmallthankyoutoGODandpromisedtolookmorecarefullyforthetinybrightspotineverygloom.,宽容的情绪：1.宽容的精神aforgivingspirit2.以和蔼可亲的态度withakindlyandgood-humoredspirit表达人物个性品格：1.光明的前途promisingfuture2.对教学过程有着敏锐的洞察力armed/equippedwithakeeninsightintoteachingprocess3.高素质，有经验的老师highlyqualified,well-experiencedteachingstaff.4.有前途的青年apromisingyoungman,Readforbasicinformation,Whocharacters,Susan,Mark,driver,what,Susanwas_.,Mark_her.,howdidthestorydevelop?,where,onthebus,blind,accompanied,Basicinformation:1.Who2.thecharacteristicofthemaincharacters3.Howdidthestorydevelop?,anoldman;theteacher;thestoreowner,Theoldman:couldntreadorwrite/eagertoreadTheteacher:wearingglasses/readsomethingwiththemreadnothingwithoutthem,Theoldmanunabletoreaddreamedofreading,Hefoundtheteacherwearingglassescanread.,Howdidthestorydevelop?,Hethoughttheglassesweremagical.(神奇的),Hewenttothestore,hopingtobuythiskindofglasses,Howdidthestorydevelop?,Susanscharacteristic(性格特点):frustrated&hopeless,Markscharacteristic:fullofloveandpatience.,Theme:Herhusbandsloveismorepowerfulthansight.,Susanlostsight,Markdrovehertowork,Markaccompaniedhertotakethebus,Susantookthebus,?,Thinkfurther：,Ifyouwereherhusband,wouldyouletSusantakethebusalone?Ifnot,whatwouldyoudo?,MarkalsoaccompaniedSusansecretly.,TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusanscheeks.,Maybethisisthereasonwhythedriverenviedher.,Para1,Para2,IfyouwereSusan,whatwouldyouthinkandwhatwouldyoudo?,Thinkfurther：,1.LookatthefollowingsentencePara.1“HowtalldoyouthinkIam?”askedtheP.E.teacher.Para.2Alicewasencouragedwhensheheardthat.2.Thinkabouttheconnectionbetweenthetwosentences.,总结：Para1.体育老师通过自己的经历鼓励Alice要点：1）老师描述自己的身高2）老师描述自己虽然身高矮但是仍然坚持锻炼，最终取得成功。Para.2Alice受到鼓舞，努力坚持锻炼。最终获得奖学金，进入梦想大学。实现梦想。,Thinkfurther：,1.LookatthefollowingsentencePara.1Aftertheoldmanenteredthestore,thestoreownergreetedhim.Para.2Thestoreowner,thinkingtheoldmandidntlikethatpair,pickedanotherpairforhim.2.Thinkabouttheconnectionbetweenthetwosentences.,总结：Para1.老人不满意眼镜要点：1）店主给老人推荐眼镜2）老人试戴仍然不认识字不满意Para.2老人说明对眼镜要求，店主告知无此类眼镜，老人失望离开。,清单二故事叙述佳句一、天气场景1.Theclearskyisasblueasthecalmsea.晴空万里,天蓝得像平静的大海。2.Todayitisfine.Theskyiscloudlesslyblue.今天是个碧空如洗的好天气。3.Itisastormynightwhentheywentout.他们出去的时候是一个暴风雪的晚上。4.Itwasfreezingcoldand