Dxgmis雅思 分析比较5分和7分作文

1、dxgmis雅思 分析比较5分和7分作文 202108119399827 生活需要嬉戏，但不能嬉戏人生；生活需要歌舞，但不需醉生梦死；生活需要艺术，但不能投机取巧；生活需要士气，但不能鲁莽蛮干；生活需要重复，但不能重蹈覆辙。 -无名 分析比较5分和7分作文 topic international tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. at the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. do t

2、he disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? a poor essay - the following is a band 5 essay. international tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. at the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. do the disadvantages

3、of international tourism outweigh the advantages? in my opinion advantages outweight the disadvantages. firstly, many countries like egypt or live from tourism lots of people work there as a or tourist guides. these countries without support of tourists wouldnt be able to secondly, in countries visi

4、ted by tourists are plenty of places where people just cant pass because of rare animals or plants. another thing is that people like traveling and seeing new exotic places. they like lie on the beach or swim in ocean. furthermore, tourism is now more growing industry highering tousands of people. t

5、here are but on the other hand, people often forget that they arent the only beings on the planet. many tourists are living garbage just anywhere. some of them want an exotic souvenir so to sum up i think international traveling is a good thing but people must realise that there is something else be

6、sides them. they need to know that flora and fauna needs to be protected. people have to enjoy their holidays but also protect environment. below is an analysis of this essay. task response. the essay question has been copied and used as the introduction (paragraph 1). once these 34 words are taken

7、off the word count, the response is under length at 194 words and so loses marks. nevertheless, the topic is addressed and a relevant position is expressed, although there are patches - as in the third paragraph - where the development is unclear. other ideas are more relevant but are sometimes insu

8、fficiently developed. coherence and cohesion. the candidates ideas are clearly organised, and there is an overall progression within the response. there is some effective use of a range of cohesive devices (e.g. connectives like 202108119399827 “secondly” and “furthermore”). referencing is also some

9、times used effectively (e.g. in paragraph 4, the use of “they” in the second sentence to refer to “people” in the first sentence). however, there is also some mechanical over-use of linkers in places (e.g. “but on the other hand,” paragraph 6). as well, paragraphs are sometimes rather too short and

10、inappropriate. lexical resource. a range of vocabulary is attempted, and this is adequate for a good response to the task. however, control of the vocabulary is weak, and there are frequent spelling errors which can cause some difficulties for the reader (e.g. “seilsmens” instead of “salesmen,”parag

11、raph 2). this lowers the mark. grammatical range and accuracy. the candidate uses a mix of simple and complex structures with frequent subordinate clauses. control of complex structures is variable, and although errors are noticeable, they only rarely make it difficult to understand the message. a g

12、ood essay - the following is a band 7 essay. tourism is a very big industry in the modern time and is growing quite rapidly. thousands of people travel everywhere to various destinations every year. arguments have come up regarding the benefits and negative impacts of tourism in places and on its lo

13、cal inhabitants and environment; however, i believe there are more advantages than disadvantages of international tourism. people travel for various reasons; we travel for business purposes, holidays, visit friends and relatives etc. travelling is mostly seen as a recreational activity. tourism has

14、many advantages. tourism can play a tremendous part in a countrys economy, the more tourists visit a country and spend money there, the better it is for the country; that way more money is circulated within the country and even the stability of their currencys rate of exchange persists if not improv

15、e. vendors and shops get to sell more goods and make an income. tourism also has its non-monetary advantages; it brings cultures and people closer. people from all around the world get to share their culture with each other and even learn more. this is a good opportunity in education. tourism seems

16、to have some disadvantages too; however, i believe the problems caused by tourism are not something that cannot be solved or prevented. a lot of people believe that tourism can destroy or deviate culture and causes quite an impact on visited locations, such as pollution and littering. people can adh

17、ere to their own beliefs and way of life if they want to; no one can really forcefully influence someone to change from their morals and ethics. pollution can be avoided by increasing usage of environmental friendly vehicles used for tours and rents, warnings and visual education on littering and sm

18、oking, specific times can be allocated for tours to certain areas, such as peak times where local inhabitants feel uncomfortable due to too many foreigners. where there are problems there can always be solutions. tourism brings great amount of advantages for any place in many ways and is a “win-win”

19、 exchange process. the very few problems caused can always be avoided or taken care of. i believe tourism should be highly promoted, specially in traditional and poor countries with natural beauty such as thailand. below is an analysis of this essay. task response. the candidate addresses both aspec

20、ts of the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. main ideas are generally clear and relevant,although some supporting ideas lack focus, as in the opening of paragraph 2. 202108119399827 coherence and cohesion. ideas are generally wellorganised, and there is a clear overall progr

21、ession with only minor lapses where points are not well-integrated into the argument. a range of cohesive devices is used effectively, although there is some under-use of connectives and substitution, and some lapses in the use of referencing. lexical resource. a good range of vocabulary is used wit

22、h some flexibility and precision. the candidate has a good awareness of style and collocation, although occasional awkward expressions or incorrect word choices and word form lower the mark. grammatical range and accuracy. a good range of sentence structures is used with a high level of accuracy res

23、ulting in frequent error-free sentences. minor systematic errors persist, however, and punctuation is unhelpful at times. 2021年3月1日 most countries spend much money on education, because they realize the importance of education. among the following courses, which two in your opinion are the most impo

24、rtant and which one is the least important? literature, sports, mathematics, economy, physics, music, history, geography, philosophy, foreign language. 分析：命题是分析事物利弊的，考生自由选择，无论考生选择什么，分数都不会受到影响，重要的是考生选择后，对自己选择的理由进行符合规律地，令人信服地陈述。这个题目所列举的课程本身并没有优劣之别，只是考生自己的推断来打算优劣。陈述社会生活和学习中某些现象或者事物的利弊，是雅思索试的一个基本技能。 要陈述

25、一个事物的利弊，首先必需有对象，就是考生需要假定“观看者”的角色。这是考生应当做的第一步。至于考生确定谁作为观看者，是没有限定，没有制约的，考生可以假定自己是同学，是老师，或者是雇主，或者是家长，或者是其它社会成员。 当你确定了一个观看者之后，你必需具备一个有条理的，系统的分析利弊的思路。就是你分析对这个观看者的利弊，是从哪些方面进行分析。有些事物对一个人的身体有好处的，未必对一个人的事业或者职业有好处，反之亦然。那么怎样建立一个适应多个命题的利弊分析的体系呢？这个问题并不困难，只要问一问每一个人最关怀的问题是什么。把这些不同人的观点归纳起来，就是你分析不同命题对不同人的利弊的思路。 对于利弊

26、分析，两个步骤： 1) 确定观看者角色 2) 思索作为观看者的个体，利弊分析的详细方面 202108119399827 01. 身体健康physical health 02. 职业进展潜势 potential career opportunities 03. 学术胜利的促进因素 contribute to academic success 04. 心理的综合平衡 comprehensive psychological balance 05. 伦理和道德以及审美情操的培育 ethic and moral cultivation and aesthetic value construction 你选择任何两个课程，作为最重要的，可以从以上五个方面来分析，这些课程为什么重要。所以利弊分析转变到了缘由陈述。这是雅思作文考试命题测试的其次个语言技能。/比如，假如选择文学比较重要，那么可以说文学课程对同学或者“我”重要是由于这个课程培育了我的道德伦理，借着文学，我可以更加深刻地理解任何社会，从而使自己的生命更有价值和意义。文学还可以间接地促进我的职业进展，尽管我的职业和文学表面上每有直接的相关性，正是由于如此，我把文学当作业余的爱好