高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达评卷简析

1、2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达评卷简析武大附中 刘 伟评卷简析内容1. 2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达完成句子2. 7180题考查内容及评分要求3. 2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达 短文写作 4. 短文写作评分标准5. 五档作文范文 第四部分：书面表达(共两节，满分50分）第一节：完成句子（共10小题；每小题2分，满分20分）阅读下列各小题，根据汉语提示，用句末括号内的英语单词完成句子，并将答案写在答题卡的相应题号后。 71. Knowing reduces the risks of failure and it works like an insurance policy

2、for your own ability, (do)知道你正在干什么，能降低失败的风险，这就像给自己的能力买了份保险。72. Not my parents, I failed to go to a drama school, where my interest lay. (persuade)由于没有说服我父母，我没能上戏剧学校，而那才是我的兴趣所在。73.The chief engineer together with his colleagues new scientific methods of farming since five years ago. (look) 五年以来，总工程师和

3、他的同事们一起一直在寻找新的科学农耕方法。 74.When I work on the farmland in the daytime, I always to a tree on the river bank. (keep)白天干农活的时候，我总是把羊拴在河边的树上。 75. As time is pressing, I think is the best way to get from here to the conference centre. (take) 由于时间紧迫，我认为从这里去会议中心最好的办法是乘出租车。76.So fast that we can hardly imagin

4、e its speed, (travel) 光传播的速度快到我们难以想象。 77.Through the course of my schooling, I met many teachers, two me greatly. (influence) 学习时我遇到过很多老师，其中两位对我影响很大。78.I dont often lose things, so I was quite surprised my wallet and found it wasnt there, (reach)我不常丢东西，所以当我拿钱包却发现钱包不在时，大吃一惊。79.It is reported in the n

5、ewspaper that several new subway lines in Wuhan.(build) 据报纸报道，武汉正在建设几条新的地铁线路。80.Most believe he for England last week, but for a serious injury which put him out of football, (play)多数人认为，要不是受了重伤而告别足球，上周他本会为英格兰踢球的。 2013年书面表达完成句子考核内容题号考核内容71名词结构72现在分词作状语73主谓一致性74动词过去分词作宾补75非谓动词作主语76倒装句77非限制性定语从句78状语从句

6、79现在进行时态的被动语态80虚拟语气评分原则所考语法结构正确、用给定的英语单词正确完整表达所给的汉语信息，给满分;未用给定单词不给分；所考语法结构不正确不给分；所考语法结构正确，信息完整，但有拼写错误扣分（不累计扣分）；所考语法结构正确，但信息有误（添加、遗漏信息等）扣分；所考语法结构正确，但有其它个别语法错误扣分。完成句子考查内容及评分要求71. Knowing reduces the risks of failure and it works like an insurance policy for your own ability, (do)知道你正在干什么，能降低失败的风险，这就像给

7、自己的能力买了份保险。考查：名词结构 what you are doing （2分） the things which/that you are doing（2分） what you did /do /are you doing(个别语法错误扣分) what to do(个别语法错误扣分) all the things which/that you are doing (信息有误 -添加all扣分)完成句子考查内容及评分要求72. Not my parents, I failed to go to a drama school, where my interest lay.(persuade)

8、由于没有说服我父母，我没能上戏剧学校，而那才是我的兴趣所在。考查：现在分词作状语 having persuaded （2分） persuading （信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分） persuaded/having been persuaded (语法结构不正确0分) 完成句子考查内容及评分要求73.The chief engineer together with his colleagues new scientific methods of farming since five years ago. (look) 五年以来，总工程师和他的同事们一起一直在寻找新的科学农耕方法。考查：主谓一致

9、性 has been looking for （2分） has looked for （2分） is looking for (个别语法错误扣分) looks for(个别语法错误扣分) have been looking for(个别语法错误扣分)完成句子考查内容及评分要求74.When I work on the farmland in the daytime, I always to a tree on the riverbank. (keep)白天干农活的时候，我总是把羊拴在河边的树上。 考查：动词过去分词作宾补 keep the/my sheep tied （2分） keep the

10、/my sheep being tied （信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分） keep the/my sheeps tieed (拼写错误扣分, sheeps和 tieed均为拼写错误，但不累计扣分)完成句子考查内容及评分要求 75.As time is pressing, I think is the best way to get from here to the conference centre, (take) 由于时间紧迫，我认为从这里去会议中心最好的办法是乘出租车。考查：非谓动词作主语 to take a taxi /cab （2分） taking a taxi / cab （2分）

11、 (for)you take a taxi （信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分） taking taxi/to take taxi(信息有误-遗漏a或the扣分)完成句子考查内容及评分要求76.So fast that we can hardly imagine its speed, (travel) 光传播的速度快到我们难以想象。考查：倒装句 does light travel （2分） did light travel (个别语法错误扣 分) does a/the light travel (信息有误-添加a或the扣分） 完成句子考查内容及评分要求77.Through the course

12、of my schooling, I met many teachers, two me greatly. (influence) 学习时我遇到过很多老师，其中两位对我影响很大。考查：非限制性定语从句 of them having influenced （2分） of whom influenced （2分） of whom have influenced （2分） 用who扣分 two having influenced 扣分(?) of them influenced (结构不正确扣2分）完成句子考查内容及评分要求78.I dont often lose things, so I was

13、quite surprised my wallet and found it wasnt there, (reach) 我不常丢东西，所以当我拿钱包却发现钱包不在时，大吃一惊。考查：状语从句 when I reached for （2分） the moment I reached for （2分） at the time when I reached for （2分） 用as或 while（信息有误扣分） at the time (that)I reached for （结构错误0分）完成句子考查内容及评分要求79.It is reported in the newspaper that se

14、veral new subway lines in Wuhan.(build) 据报纸报道，武汉正在建设几条新的地铁线路。考查：现在进行时态的被动语态 are being built （2分） is being built （个别语法错误扣分） are being builded （个别语法错误扣分） are being build （结构错误0分）完成句子考查内容及评分要求80.Most believe he for England last week, but for a serious injury which put him out of football, (play) 多数人认为，

15、要不是受了重伤而告别足球，上周他本会为英格兰踢球的。考查：虚拟语气 would/could have played （2分） should have played （个别语法错误扣分） would/could play （结构不正确0分）第二节：短文写作（共1题：满分30分） 请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。 We all know that sticks and stones may break our bones, but we should also be aware that words can hurt people, too.注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提语； 除诗

16、歌外，文体不限； 文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称； 词数为120左右。短文写作评分原则第一档-第五档赋分要求评卷定档参考 档位 评阅印象 感觉第五档漂漂亮亮cool爽第四档清清楚楚（2/3语言没问题，有个别小问题）clear顺第三档马马虎虎（半对半错，很纠结）coy行第二档糊里糊涂（1/3有英文， 2/3 看不懂）cloudy差第一档一塌糊涂（基本无英文或无法读懂）chaotic晕 0分内容太少，无法评判（谨慎）One Possible Version My deskmate admires my fluent English very much and I usually feel enco

17、uraged by his compliments. One day, when we learned the new word “ eccentric in class, we were asked to make a sentence with it. I volunteered to do it by saying “ My deskmate is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him. “ Hearing this, the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmates face t

18、urned red. After class, I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadnt been helped by others. My mindless words must have hurt him deeply. Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways. We should avoid hurtine others

19、 if we can t always be encouraging when we speak.Range Finders 第五档：25-30 (27/28) Its known to all that “Sticks and stones may break our bones，but it just hurts us physically. What we should know is that words can hurt people too and it hurts people mentally, which is hard to recover. When it comes t

20、o this, memories come flood in to my mind. When I was in middle school, my friend Lily did very poorly in written English. What she wrote sometimes was hard to recognize. She knew that it was her weakness and I didnt say anything. But one day 1 laughed at her, saying that her written English was so

21、poorly. She cried and ran away. I was shocked and felt very guilty. I was just joking and thought that she wouldnt blame me. But she didnt. I apologized to her over and over because I realized that what 1 said did hurt her. So from my own experience, I can draw a conclusion that it is words that can

22、 hurt people most sometimes. So do mind your mouth, dont let what you say hurt someone or you will regret for it!Range Finders第四档：19-24 (21/22) As far as I am concerned, good words can make people be good friends. But sometimes words can hurt people, too. For example, 1 have a good friend. We know e

23、ach other when we were in middle school. We always talked many things, like friendship, love, family and so on. We have no words that cant tell to each other. We are brother. But one day, some words changed our life. He made jokes on me in class. All classmates laughed. 1 knew that he was kidding. B

24、ut I couldnt accepted it. And I got annoyed. I doubted our friendship and very sad. Now, things have passed on. I wont forget it. So when we speak, we should care the style, as words can hurt people, too.Range Finders 第三档：13-18(15/16) With time going by, we have all growing up. So, we must learn how

25、 could we use words cannot hurt others. Its very impertant. I still remember, when I was young, I often said some not good words, and always made my parents amazied. Oneday, ny sister a new dress and visit my parents. My mother talk my sister: you look so beauiifui. But in in eye, my sister is more

26、fat. So, I shout to my mother: you are wrong, she is very ugly. And then, my mother in a dilemma, and my sister was very upset. Too many years ago, I realize I was so foolish that I use words hurl my sister. In fact, I should have talk my mother the truth when my sister gone. Or I should say: sister

27、, the dress is suitable for you if you loose wight. We all should be aware that words can hurt people, please use words carefully.Range Finders 第二档：7-12(9/10) It is said that your helping can be fongotten just seven days, but the words you have said can inflence ones all life, expecialy the bad word

28、s. I always remembering the day I quarred with my friend Li. I thought she took away my book but not returned to me. I said she was a thief. The moment I said that words I hesited for a while. But I saw Lis face was got white and ran away. I feld pity for what I had said. Later, I found my book in m

29、y school bag. I knew 1 had hurt Lis heart, just because the words. So, I realized that I should thought what I will say again and again, and try my best not hurt others. I havent said a words to Li since I was qurred with Li. I find the importance of words and make my mind that dont make the same mi

30、stakes again.Range Finders 第一档：1-6(3/4) Hurt is a not good things, usually, we need to get along with anybody, like we all know the words, setencese also hurt people. In my class, has a classmate lose ten RMB, he was surperised and angry, he said: he thought near his people must know I have money, s

31、o . near people express that not see, the classmate finally thought his parents stolen his money, the classmate tell me the teacher, too, and to said his was not hones，the partner was angry, and thought he was bad. Finally, the money found out by desk, the classmate also so sorry, but, them had matter with this, to be stronger anymore, I was uncertain. Sometimes, the angry attitude, or other, you said anymore could hurt your friends or partner, it word like a kill