读后续写之三大主题续写探索+讲义-2023届高三英语写作专项VIP

三大主题语境下的续写模式探索第一节人与自然在“人与自然”的主题语境下，一般来说“矛盾”来自外界，“转折”也源自外力，多采取“灵光一闪”的方法来解决矛盾，当然也会有例外。本章列举了三大主题语境下的几个例题，通过分析我们之前在遣词造句与谋篇布局中讲到的续写技巧在这些例题中的实际应用,来探索续写中潜在的合理写作模式。例1“荒野求生”[2016•浙江卷】OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTomJTmgoingtofindabetterspotfbrustocampJandwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!"shecried."Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewherestadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.负]【转转】【正正】Paragraph2:I'mstillgoingtoschool.“正向结局''当我向别人承认我的秘密的那一刻，人们就会露出难以置信的表情。ThemomentIadmittedmysecrettoothers,peoplewouldshowexpressionsofdisbelief.【喜出望外】我这辈子从未有过这样的自信。NeverinmylifehadIfeltsoconfidentbefore.“收尾点睛”【寄情于景】看到桌上的字母表，我觉得它就像一把钥匙，为我打开了通向新世界的大门。Seeingthealphabetlyingthereonmydesk,Ifeltasifithadbeenakeywhichopenedthedoortoanewworldtome.【喃喃自语】“不要停止学习，否则你会后悔的。”我对自己说。“Don'tstoplearning,oryou'llregretit,“Isaidtomyself.整合全文：Paragraph1:TheyoungmandrovemetotheschoolwhichIhadbeendreamingofforyears.Thoughthepeoplesittingintheclassroomwereallwhite-haired,theyseemedsoyoungtomewhentheywerereadingloud.Thatmoment,allthoseoldmemoriescrowdedintomymind,andIfeltashamed.Imadeupmymindandsignedupfortheadulteducationclasseswithouttheslightesthesitation.Insteadofbeingacowardagain,Iredoubledmyefforts.Finally,Imadeit.Paragraph2:Ifmstillgoingtoschool.ThemomentIadmittedmysecrettoothers,peoplewouldshowexpressionsofdisbelief.NeverinmylifehadIfeltsoconfidentbefore.Seeingthealphabetlyingthereonmydesk,Ifeltasifithadbeenakeywhichopenedthedoortoanewworldtome.“Don'tstoplearning,oryou'llregretitJIsaidtomyself.负一转T正+Jane迷失在丛林里Jane醒来了Jane获救了Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditgettingdarkagain.【负】“激化矛盾”：【愈演愈烈】随着夜幕笼罩森林，Jane快要崩溃了，完全不知道该怎么办。Asthenightswepttheforest,Janewasontheedgeofbreakingdown,totallyatalosswhattodo.【悔不当初】意识到她的处境是如此令人绝望，jane心想：“如果我没有跟Tom吵架还自行离开就好了。”Realizingwhatadesperatesituationshewasin,Janethoughttoherself,“IfonlyIhadnotquarreledwithTomandwalkedaway.”【度日如年】接下来的几个小时感觉像是几年，但她一直告诉自己一切都会好起来的。Thefollowinghoursfeltlikeyears,butshekepttellingherselfthateverythingwouldbeallright.【衔接下段段首】她筋疲力尽，睡着了。Extremelyexhausted,shefellasleep.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.【转】“解决矛盾”【灵光一闪】突然，她看见远处有一个湖。她突然想到，湖边也许是发出求救信号的最佳地点。她毫不犹豫地以最快的速度向湖边赶去。Suddenly,shecaughtsightofalakeatadistance.Itflashedthroughhermindthatthelakesidemightbeaperfectspottosendoutsignalsforhelp.Withouttheslightesthesitation,shesetoutforthelakeatthefastestpace.【正】“正向结局”幸运的是/使她高兴的是，当她到达那里时，一架直升机飞过，看到了那件挥舞着的黄色上衣，并径直向这位绝望的女士飞去。她侥幸脱险。Luckily/Tohergreatjoy,uponherarrivalthere,ahelicopterflewby,sawthewavingyellowblouseandheadedstraightforthedesperatelady.Shehadanarrowescape.【死里逃生】尽管她又冷又饿，心里却充满了喜悦/感激。Coldandhungrythoughshewas,herheartwasfilledwithnothingelsebutjoy/gratitude.“收尾点睛”【喃喃自语】“谢谢！谢谢！"她一直说着同样的话。“Thankyou!Thankyou!”shekeptsayingthesamewords.整合全文：Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Asthenightswepttheforest,Janewasontheedgeofbreakingdown,totallyatalosswhattodo.Realizingwhatadesperatesituationshewasin,Janethoughttoherself,"IfonlyIhadnotquarreledwithTomandwalkedaway."Thefollowinghoursfeltlikeyears,butshekepttellingherselfthateverythingwouldbeallright.Extremelyexhausted,shefellasleep.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Suddenly,shecaughtsightofalakeatadistance.Itflashedthroughhermindthatthelakesidemightbeaperfectspottosendoutsignalsforhelp.Withouttheslightesthesitation,shesetoutforthelakeatthefastestpace.Tohergreatjoy,uponherarrivalthere,ahelicopterflewby,sawthewavingyellowblouseandheadedstraightforthedesperatelady.Shehadanarrowescape.Coldandhungrythoughshewas,herheartwasfilledwithnothingelsebutgratitude."Thankyou!Thankyou!”shekeptsayingthesamewords.例2“野狼追击”【2017•浙江卷】Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（骑行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasnotadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he'dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf'steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidnotthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.负］【转转】【正正】负一转T正+Mac骑行时被野狼追击碰到了一辆路过的汽车Mac（和两名伙伴）获救了Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.【负】【衔接上文】Mac像子弹一样冲向汽车，钻进了车里。“请稍等！我的朋友们还在危险中！”他用颤抖的声音恳求Paul。Macdashedtothecarlikeabulletandgotintoit."Pleasewaitforamoment!Myfriendswerestillindanger!hebeggedPaulinashakingvoice.“激化矛盾”【愈演愈烈】当狼在车外等待猎物时，Mac几乎崩溃了，完全不知所措。Asthewolfwaswaitingforitspreyoutsidethecar,Macwasontheedgeofbreakingdown,totallyatalosswhattodo.【悔不当初】意识到自己处于多么绝望的境地，他心想：“我做了什么，要遭这罪？要是我待在家就好了！”Beingawareofwhatadesperatesituationhewasin,hethoughttohimself,“WhatdidIdotodeservethis?IfonlyIstayedathome!”【度日如年】接下来的几分钟感觉像是几年，但他一直告诉自己一切都会好起来的。Thefollowingminutesfeltlikeyears,buthekepttellinghimselfthateverythingwouldbeallright.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.【转】“解决矛盾”【灵光一闪】突然，其中一个骑手摸了摸他的包，发现里面有一袋牛肉。他突然想到，也许他能用牛肉把狼引开。他毫不犹豫地掏出袋子，直接扔给那只凶猛的动物。Suddenly,oneofthecycliststouchedhisbagandrealizedthattherewasabagofbeef.Itflashedthroughhismindthatmaybehecouldleadthewolfawaywiththebeef.Withoutanyhesitation,hepulledthebagoutandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.【正】，，正向结局”幸运的是，狼立刻闻到了包（里面肉）的味道，跳上去，开始享用食物。这俩人见状，立刻跳下自行车，钻进汽车。Fortunately,thewolfinstantlycaughtthesmellofthebag,jumpedtoitandbeganenjoyingitsmeal.Seeingthis,theyimmediatelyjumpedofftheirbicyclesandclimbedintothecar.【死里逃生】他们虽然筋疲力尽，吓得要死，心里却充满了感激之情。Exhaustedandscaredtodeaththoughtheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithgratitude.“收尾点睛”【喃喃自语】“感谢上帝!”他们异口同声地说出了这些话。“ThankGod!^^theyutteredthewordsinthesamebreath.整合全文：Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macdashedtothecarlikeabulletandgotintoit“Pleasewaitfbramoment!Myfriendswerestillindanger!^^hebeggedPaulinashakingvoice.Asthewolfwaswaitingforitspreyoutsidethecar,Macwasontheedgeofbreakingdown,totallyatalosswhattodo.Beingawareofwhatadesperatesituationhewasin,hethoughttohimself,"WhatdidIdotodeservethis?IfonlyIstayedathome!”Thefollowingminutesfeltlikeyears,buthekepttellinghimselfthateverythingwouldbeallright.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Suddenly,oneofthecycliststouchedhisbagandrealizedthattherewasabagofbeef.Itflashedthroughhismindthatmaybehecouldleadthewolfawaywiththebeef.Withoutanyhesitation,hepulledthebagoutandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.Fortunately,thewolfinstantlycaughtthesmellofthebag,jumpedtoitandbeganenjoyingilsmeal.Seeingthis,theyinnnedialelyjunipedofftheirbicyclesandclimbedintothecar.Exhaustedandscaredtodeaththoughtheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithgratitude."ThankGod!”theyutteredthewordsinthesamebreath.第二节人与社会例“爆米花”[2020.全国新高考卷1（山东卷）】TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.［Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“IwishyoucouldseehimJshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard."Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,"saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^“SodoIJsaidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.,,负］【转Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."ItellyouwhatwecandoJsaidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”Paragraph1:WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.转］Paragraph2:［Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.正］负_转T正+Meredith一家想帮助Bernard为家里赚钱John想到卖爆米花的点子Bernard赚到了钱Onepossibleversion:【转】“解决矛盾”Paragraph1:WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.【按部就班】【动作链】三个孩子确定了他们的计划，从橱柜里拿出那盒玉米，交给他们的母亲，在方寸用OHavingdeterminedtheirplan,thethreekidsfetchedtheboxofcomfromthecupboard,gaveittotheirmotherandwaitedaside.【环境比喻】爆米花的香味弥漫了整个房子，仿佛变魔术似的，这个房子变成了面包房。Thesmellofthepopcornfilledthehouse,which,asifbymagic,hadturnedintoabakery.【动作面】没过多久，爆米花就做好并打包起来了，他们匆匆赶向Bernard的家里，一路兴高采烈地聊着天。Beforelong,withthepopcornreadyandpacked,theyhurriedtoBernard'shouse,chattingallthewayinhighspirits.【衔接下段段首】他们一到，就向Bernard解释了这个计划。然后，他们选了一个人流量很大的街角。Upontheirarrival,theyexplainedtheplantoBernard.Then,theyselectedastreetcornerwhichenjoyedagoodflowofpeople.【正】Paragraph2:Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.“正向结局”不久，他的第一个顾客来了，这个顾客工作了一整天肚子饿了。之后，越来越多的人在气味的指引下找到了Bernard的摊位。结果爆米花非常畅销。Beforelong,therecamehisfirstcustomer,whowashungryafterawholeday'swork.Afterthat,moreandmorepeoplefoundBernard'sstallundertheguidanceofthesmell.Thepopcornturnedouttobeabestseller.【喜出望外】看到这么多人挤在Bernard的摊位上，孩子们兴奋地跳了起来。Meredith太太从未料到一切会那么容易和顺利，她对自己说道：“我们该早点开始的。”SeeingsomanypeoplecrowdingaroundBernard,thekidsjumpedwithexcitementandjoy.UndernocircumstanceshadMrs.Meredithexpectedeverythingtobesoeasyandsmooth."Weshoulddothisearlier,shesaidtoherself.“收尾点睛”【主题议论】如果没有这次经历，孩子们就没有机会学到这样一课：他们真的能有所作为。Haditnotbeenforthisexperience,thechildrenwouldnothavegotthechancetolearnthelessonthattheycanreallymakeadifference.整合全文：Paragraph1:WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnsidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Havingdeterminedtheirplan,thethreekidsfetchedtheboxofcornfromthecupboard,gaveittotheirmotherandwaitedaside.Thesmellofthepopcornfilledthehouse,which,asifbymagic,hadturnedintoabakery.Beforelong,withthepopcornreadyandpacked,theyhurriedtoBernard'shouse,chattingallthewayinhighspirits.Upontheirarrival,theyexplainedtheplantoBernard.Then,theyselectedastreetcornerwhichenjoyedagoodflowofpeople.Paragraph2:Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Beforelong,therecamehisfirstcustomer,whowashungryafterawholeday'swork.Afterthat,moreandmorepeoplefoundBernard'sstallundertheguidanceofthesmell.Thepopcornturnedouttobeabestseller.SeeingsomanypeoplecrowdingaroundBernard,thekidsjumpedwithexcitementandjoy.UndernocircumstanceshadMrs.Meredithexpectedeverythingtobesoeasyandsmooth.“Weshoulddothisearlier/5shesaidtoherself.Haditnotbeenforthisexperience,thechildrenwouldnothavegotthechancetolearnthelessonthattheycanreallymakeadifference.第三节人与自我“人与自我”和“人与自然”“人与社会”相比，在高考续写中暂未出现。但是作为三大主题语境之一，也不排除其在将来的考试中出现的可能。例“高龄老人学读写”IworkedfromthetimeIwasfourandraisedsevenchildren,allofthemcollegegraduates.ItseemedI'ddoneeverythingI'deverwantedtodoinmylife,butIhadoneregret.Iwasbornin1898,theoldestoffivekids.Papacouldn'tsparemetogotoschool,soIworkedinthefieldwithhimuntilIwas21yearsold.EverywhereIwent,Ilearnedsomehardlessonsaboutwhathappenstoamanwhocan'treadthealphabetPeoplecheatyououtofwages.Theysellyouatickettoonecity,takeyourmoneyandhandyouatickettosomewhereelse.By1928,rdbeenwanderingfornineyears.ImetawomannamedElzenia.Wefellinlove,marriedandmovedtoDallas,whereIgotworkfixingroadsforthecity.When