高考英语二轮复习 读后续写之提分秘籍素材

读后续写之提分秘籍一一细节描写《考试说明》中评分原则部分规定，读后续写阅卷时按5个档次给分。参考最高档次第五档（21-25分）的描述并考虑写作部分评分的其它因素，可以认为一篇优秀的读后续写具备以下特征：.内容丰富充实，与所给短文融洽连贯；.连接成分应用得当，行文结构紧凑一体，与所提供各段落开头语的衔接紧密合理；,使用并用下划线标示5个以上短文中标出的关键词语；.词汇丰富高级，语法准确多变（主被动句式、各类从句'特殊句式、非谓语动词等的使用情况灵活恰当、不拘一格、游刃有余）；.词数充分，150词左右。评分细则规定少于130词的，从总分中减去2分；.拼写准确，英式或美式拼法皆可；.标点合理，使用得当。读后续写基本是以记叙文为主，而记叙文是以记人叙事为主要内容，以叙述为主要表达方式来反映丰富多彩的现实生活的一种文体。一般来说，完成一篇完整的记叙文写作，需要选取合适的角度、按照一定的顺序组织素材进行叙述，其中包括六个基本要素：时间、地点、人物，事情的起因、经过和结果，即我们通常所说的五个（what,who,when,where.why）和一个"H"（how）。除此之外，鲜明的主题和生动的语言，也是一篇优秀的记叙文所不可或缺的。描写作为记叙文的一种辅助的表达方式对加强文章的表现力发挥着重要的作用，它要求我们善于捕捉细节、刻画细节，有时还可以用上比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法。一篇好的作文往往因为一两处细节描写而出彩。同样地，议论、抒情的表达方式对记叙文主题的展现也发挥着重要的作用。一、情感心理描写在写作中，对人物情感的描写常常能使人物的形象显得生动鲜活。人的情感可以分很多种，如喜悦、满意'失望'悲伤'憎恨'愤怒、惊讶、恐惧、赞赏等等。在英语中有很多不同的词和句式来表达这些不同的情感。♦喜悦Heisveryhappyandsweet.他又高兴又甜蜜。Theydidn5tknowwhattodowiththemseIvesforjoy.他们高兴得不知道怎么办好。Hejumpedforfun.他高兴得跳了起来。Herfacebrightenedup.她喜形于色。MoreexampIes:ThesmileonherfaceshoneIikeadiamond.HiseyestwinkIedwithpIeasure.IwaswiIdwithjoy.IwaspIeasedbeyonddescription.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.HersmileIitupthewhoIeroom.Sheshedtearsofjoy.Shewasoverflowingwithhappiness.HerfIushedfacewasshiningwithexcitement.Iwasfloatingonair.Theresultissatisfactory.结果令人满意。ItisdifficulttopIeaseeverybody.众口难调。ThereisaIwaysasmileofcontentmentonherface,她脸上总是挂着心满意足的微笑。Shebelongstothosewhoareverydifficulttosatisfy.她属于那种极难讨好的人。Seeingtheirtaskfinishedgivesthemasenseofsatisfaction.看至lj任务完成了，他们感到很满意。♦惊讶15msurprisedtofindyouhere.在这里看到你我很奇怪。It'snothingtobesurprisedabout.这不值得大惊小怪。Tomysurprise,hedidn'tcomeyesterday.令我吃惊的是他昨天没有来。Shelookedatmeinamazement.她惊奇的看着我。Herappearancefairlytookmybreathaway.她的美貌令我神魂颠倒。Everyonelookedatherinastonishment.大家都惊讶地看着她。♦悲伤Helookssosad.他看起来很悲伤。Heisnostrangertosorrow.他生活在悲伤中。HissadstorymakesherfeeIpity.他的悲惨经历使她深表同情。Hiswife'sdiseasetookawayhisappetite.妻子的病令他茶饭不思。Thenewsdepressesher.这个消息让她愁苦。MoreexampIes:HestoodsiIentIy,tearsrollingdownhischeeks.IfeeIIikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathedrownedsadnessinwine.Sheburstintotearsandranoutoftheroom.Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands.Itriedtofightbacktears.Myeyeswerefilledwithtears.Afrown（皱眉）nowstoodonhisface.ThesedayshewasinIowspirits.♦愤怒Shewasburningwithanger.她怒火中烧。HeeasiIyIoseshistemper.他很容易发脾气。Hewasinarage.他大发雷霆。Shewasredwithanger.她因为发怒脸涨得通红。MoreexampIes:Iwasseizedbyanger.Hisangerboiledover.HecouIdhardIy/scarceIycontainhisrage.HisvoicetrembIedwithanger.HegavemeaIookofburninganger.Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.HisfacecIoudedwithanger.♦感动Toucheddeeply/immensely,we---Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfe11gratitude.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she...♦害怕①Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfuIIofhorror.③Shewasstruckwithhorrorwhen...④Shewaschokedbyfear.⑤HerfaceturnedpaIeandstoodtheretongue-tied.⑥FearfIoodedoverhim.⑦HerheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearIysuffocated（窒息）.⑧SheshookaIIover,feeIingIikesittingonpinsandneedIes.二、动作描写动作描写也是描写人的重要一点。利用适当的词语对表达人们的心理和性格有很大的帮助。♦表达说话的动词：speak:说，讲，说话，演说。着重开口发音。say:说，说话。意义非常广泛，是一般用语。着重内容，指连贯的说话。talk:讲，说话。着重说话的动作，而不着重所说的话。它多指两个人或多个人在一起讲话。tell:说，告诉，讲。指把一件事情传达给别人或讲述一个故事等。有连续叙述的意思。chat:闲谈，聊天。多指非正式的，轻松的，愉快的，没有中心地、没有特殊目的地谈话或聊天。含有亲热的意味。gossip:只在后面说人是非，闲谈他人的事情。Canyouchildspeakyet?你的孩子会说话了吗？Hesaidhewantedtogototown.他说他想去城里。IwanttotaIktoyouaboutanurgentmatter.我想和你谈一件紧急的事。TelImewhathappened.告诉我发生了什么事。TheydroppedinforachatIastnight.他们昨晚顺便来闲聊了一会儿。YoushouIdn,tIistemtogossip.你不应该听流言蜚语。♦表示笑的动词：smile:“微笑”。通常指好意的微笑，无声的微笑，如表示亲切'愉快等。laugh:“笑”，“发笑”。指一般的笑。beam:“笑”。指面露喜色，带有笑容的意思。Shesmiledwhenshesawme.她看见我时露出微笑。WeaIIIaughedIoudIywhenshemadeajoke.她说了个笑话,我们都大声笑起来。Hebeamedonhisvisitors.他对着客人们微笑。♦表示哭我们可以说：cry:“哭泣”、“流泪、意义及用法最广泛。多强调声音，指呼号和叫喊地哭，一般由于痛苦，悲哀，恐惧，也可能是欢呼引起的。weep:“哭泣，"流泪，指不出声的哭，着重在由于悲伤而流泪。sob:“哽咽呜咽”，“啜泣二指尽力抑制自己的感情时发出抽泣的声音。也可以指哭诉。Shestartedtocrywhensheheardthesadnews.当她听到这个悲痛的消息时，她开始哭了。SheweptthedeathofthechiId.她哀悼孩子的死亡。ThechildsobbedIoudIy.这个孩子大声地哭泣。♦表示走的动词：g。：“走、意义范围较广，是一般用语。表示向一定的地点运动。walk:“步行”，“走表示有目的或无目的的步行'散步、游玩。pace:“走过二“踱步二尤指以普通的步子走。wander:“徘徊”，“到处走”，“漫游”。侧重无确定路线。Wewentbyplane.我们是乘飞机去的。Ican5twalkaboutinthisheat.在这种大热天我简直无法走动。ThefenceisonIytenpacesfromthehouse.围t啬离屋子只有十步远。ThechiIdrenwanderedinthewoods.孩子们在森林里漫步。动作描写美句欣赏ThefirstactorwasdraggingthroughthesnowwhenthesecondbeganwalkingtowardshimtrembIingwithcold.第一位演员在雪地里拖着脚步艰难移动，这时候第二位演员朝他走去，身子在寒气中不仅颤抖。IstillremembertheshockthatrootedmefIatagainstthewall.我仍然记得当时惊呆了，靠在墙上，一动不动。Thepoundinginmyearsdrownedouttherestofthewords,onIyawordhereandtherefiIteredthrough.我的耳朵里嗡嗡作响，听不见他们后来讲的话，只是东一点西一点渗入的只言片语。IstaredathiminshockandasmaIIsoundofdismayescapedmythroat.我惊愕地盯着他，不禁发出轻轻的沮丧声。StandingwithaIIthedignityIcouIdmuster,Isaidnothing.带着所有的尊严，我站在那里一句话都没说。IcIaspedmyhandsbehindmybacksohewouIdn5tseethemshaking.我紧握着双手藏在背后，这样他就看不见我的手在发抖。TheIastwordscameoutinaneagerrush.最后几个字是急切地蹦出来的。HewentbacktohoeingtheweedsthatsprangupbetweenthedeIicateIittIebeanpIants.他又去锄生在在青嫩的豆苗间的杂草了。Thenextday,itwasaverysadandwithdrawngirIwhodraggedintotheprincipal'soffice.第二天，我沉默不语，一副十分伤心的小女孩的模样，拖着脚步走近校长办公室。HeIookedoutofthewindow,bitinghisIips,asifthinking.他一边看着窗外，一边咬着嘴唇，仿佛在思考。三、练一练：找找下面的励志美文中动作、神态、心理描写IftheDreamIsBigEnough,theFactsDon5tCountIusedtowatchherfrommykitchenwindow,sheseemedsosmaIIasshemuseIedherwaythroughthecrowdofboysonthepIayground.TheschooIwasacrossthestreetfromourhomeandIwouIdoftenwatchthekidsastheypIayedduringrecess.AseaofchiIdren,andyettome,shestoodoutfromthemall.IrememberedthefirstdayIsawherplayingbasketbaII.Iwatchedinwonderassherancirclesaroundtheotherkids.Shemanagedtoshootjumpshotsjustovertheirheadsandintothenet.TheboysaIwaystriedtostopherbutnoonecouId.Ibegantonoticeheratothertimes,basketbaIIinhand,playingaIone.ShewouIdpracticedribbIingandshootingoverandoveragain,sometimesuntiIdark.OnedayI askedher whyshepracticed somuch. SheIookeddirectIyinmyeyesandwithouta momentof hesitation.Shesaid,“I wanttogotocoIIege.TheonIywayIcangoi sifIgetaschoIarship.II ikebasketbaII.IdecidedthatifIweregoodenough,I wouIdget aschoIarship.I amgoing topIaycollegebasketbaII.Iwanttobethebest.MyDaddytoldmeifthedreamisbigenough,thefactsdon5tcount.5,Ihadseenoverandoveragain.Well,Ihadtogiveittoher一shewasdetermined.IwatchedherthroughthosejuniorhighyearsandintohighschooI.Everyweek,sheIedhervarsityteamtovictory.Onedayinhersenioryear,Isawhersittinginthegrass,headcradIedinherarms.IwaIkedacrossthestreetandsatdowninthecooIgrassbesideher.QuietlyIaskedwhatwaswrong."Oh,nothing,“cameasoftrepIy."Iamjusttooshort.ThecoachtoIdherthatat5J5"shewouIdprobabIynevergettopIayforatoprankedteam-muchIessofferedascholarship—sosheshouIdstopdreamingaboutcollege.ShewasheartbrokenandIfeltmyownthroattightenasIsensedherdisappointment.IaskedherifshehadtaIkedtoherdadaboutityet.SheIiftedherheadfromherhandsandtoIdmethatherfathersaidthosecoacheswerewrong.Theyjustdidnotunderstandthepowerofadream.HetoIdherthatifshereaIIywantedtopIayforagoodcoIIege,ifshetruIywantedaschoIarship,thatnothingcouIdstopherexceptonething—herownattitude.HetoIdheragain,“Ifthedreamisbigenough,thefactsdon5tcount.55Thenextyear,assheandherteamwenttotheNorthernCaIiforniaChampionshipgame,shewasseenbyacollegerecruiter.Shewasindeedofferedascholarship,afuIIride,toaDivisionI,NCAAwomen5sbasketbaIIteam.Shewasgoingtogettheco