高考英语作文范文应聘家教

高考英语作文范文：应聘家教题目：Youhaveseenanadvertisementfromacouple,wholiveinAustralia,for

someonetoteachtheirtwochildrenyourlanguageforayear.

Writealettertothecouple.Inyourletter.explainwhyyouthinkyouwouldbesuitableforthejob.

.

saywhatelseyoucoulddoforthefamily.giveyourreasonsforwantingthejob范文：221words，7分，保留了所有错误，阅读时请注意识别。DearSirandMadam,IamalongstandingIndiancitizenwhoworksasaprofessorintheGiujaratUniversity,Guijarat,India.IamwritingthistoapplyforajobatHindilanguageteacher,whatyouarelookingfor

yourchids.TheforemostreasonofapplyingforajobisIhavedonePHDinHindaliteraturesuccessfullyfromthereputedGiujaratUniverityofIndia.BesidesthisIamteachingtheHindilanguageprofessionally

sincelast15years.Ihaveawideexperienceofteachingamongdifferentinstitutionsandfromthechildrentoyoungerone.ConsideringallthesefactorsIfeelthatIamasuitablecandidatefor

this

job.Moreover,IcanalsoteachtheHindilanguagetootherfamilymemberifrequiredsoIcanmakeyouallawareaboutIndiancultureanditstraditions,asIhaveavastknowledgeofallthattoo.AsIalreadyhaveso

manyyearsinmyhomecountryIndia,nowIwanttomigratetodifferent

nationsoftheworldsoIcanlearnaboutthepeople,theircultureandtraditions.Iwillalsoprovidemetheopportunitytogainknowledgeandsomeinvaluableexperiences.IstronglyfeelthatcomingtoAustraliacouldbegreatopportunityforme.Inanticipationwaitingforyourpositiveresponseatearliest.Yoursfaithfull,Vipal这篇为什么有7分？有些错误你是否没看出来？修订后的简洁版本？

↓↓↓考官评语：这是正式的申请信，考生全文语气一致，充分回应了三个写作任务。信息组织逻辑清晰，行文流畅。连接词使用恰当，分段合理。使用了非常用词，如longstanding,citizen,invaluable,以及词汇搭配如wideexperience,suitablecandidate,vastknowledge,greatopportunity，但存在拼写错误，如Giujarat应为Gujarat,第一段第二句的forajobat应为forajobas,

chids应为children或kids,Hinda应为Hindu,第三段第一句的familymember应为复数，第四段第二句的Iwill应为Itwill，落款faithfull应为faithfully.考生展示了多种复杂语法结构，多数句子准确无误，除了少数冠词和时态错误。组长解析：（1）字数过多，考场上会占用时间，应练习写精炼的句子；（2）题中提到了acouple发布的招聘广告，所以范文的称呼恰当，也可以是DearMr.andMrs.Smith（广告中通常会标记联系方式和姓名），范文署名不妥当，应署全名；（3）172words语言简洁准确修改版如下：DearSirandMadam,Iamwritingtoapplyforthe

jobasa

Hindilanguageteacherthat

youarelooking

for

yourchildren.I

believethatIamqualifiedforthisposition

becauseIhave

aPhDdegreeinHindiliterature

fromGujaratUniversity,

the

mostprestigiousuniversityinIndia.Moreover,

Ihave15years'experienceofteaching

Hindi

toyoungsters,whichexactly

suitsyourneed.Inadditiontoteachingyourkids,

Icanalsohelpanyofyour

familymemberswithHindilearningaslongastheyareinterested.Besides,itwouldbe

mypleasuretoshareknowledgeof

Indianculture,customs

andtraditionswithyouall.

SinceIamapplyingforAustralian

permanentresidency,Ireallyneedthisjobtolearnmoreaboutlocalpeopleandlife.It

isangreatopportunityformetogainpracticalknowledgeandinvaluableexperience

thatwillbe