Dyfuqc雅思教父刘洪波：儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评

生活需要游戏，但不能游戏人生；生活需要歌舞，但不需醉生梦死；生活需要艺术，但不能投机取巧；生活需要勇气，但不能鲁莽蛮干；生活需要重复，但不能重蹈覆辙。-----无名儿童类雅思作文高分范文及点评——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》Somepeoplebelievethattimespentontelevision,videoandcomputergamescanbebeneficialtochildren.Othersbelievethishasnegativeeffectsonachild.Discussbothviewsandgiveyourownopinion.InrecentyearsparentshavehadtomaketoughdecisionsabouthowmuchtimetheirkidsshouldspendwatchingTVandplayingcomputerorvideogames.Somehavearguedthattheyarenotonlyawasteoftime,butpotentiallyharmful.Others,however,claimthatkidsshouldbekidsanddeservesomeentertainment.Personally,Ifeelthatthebestapproachismoderation.Ontheonehand,toomuchTVandgamingcanhaveanegativeinfluence.Physically,hoursinfrontofamonitorareharmfulontheeyes.Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Moreover,seeingtoomuchviolenceandquestionablecontentcouldinfluenceyoungpeople’sbehavior,astheyareimpressionable.Ontheotherhand,allchildrenneedtohavefunandplay.Ifstudentsonlystudy,theywillsurelysufferfrommentalandemotionalpressureandstress.Also,notallcontentonTVoronlineisunhealthy;therearelotsofeducationalshowsandcontentthatispositive.Speakingfrompersonalexperience,Ithinktherightapproachistohaveahealthybalance.Inthisregard,parentshavearesponsibilitytosetboundariesandmakesurethatthecontenttheirkidsareviewingisappropriate.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,soparentsshouldencouragetheirkidstointeractandplaywithotherkidsinpersontoo.Intheend,weshouldfollowourcommonsense.ParentsshouldbefirmbutfairwithlettingtheirkidsplayonlineorinfrontofaTVscreen.Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,andTVandvideogamesarenodifferent.(289words)

刘洪波点评：写作线索：观点中立，适度即可。第二段ontheonehand，讲负面；第三段ontheotherhand，讲正面；最后讲家长要重视和起作用。经典的中立型文章。可学习的点很多：首先，首段最后一句中Thebestapproachismoderation.（最好的办法是适度）moderation一词可以理解为中文的“（把握）火候”，是中立文章的点睛大词，不可不学。其次，第二段中分别用physically和mentally拓展了写作思路；最后，文章末句提升至哲学高度：Mostthingsinmoderationarehealthy,TVandvideogamesarenodifferent.（大多数事情适度都是好的，电视和视频游戏也不例外）是啊，适度饮酒对身体好；打打小麻将，买买彩票还怡情呢。但最难把握的就是这个moderation“度”啊！先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用点睛词汇deserve[]vt.应受，值得moderation[]n.适度socialize[]社会交往virtual[]adj.虚拟的questionable[]adj.有问题的interact[]vi.互相作用，互相影响firm[]adj.严格的必备短语makedecision作出决定spendsometime(in)doingsth./spendsometimeonsth.花时间在（做）某事上haveanegativeinfluence有不良影响beharmfulto/onsth.对……有伤害makefriends交朋友sufferfrom遭受inthisregard在这点上havearesponsibilitytodosth.有责任去做某事setboundaries限制inperson亲自三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子Andmentallyifkidsspendtoomuchtimelivinginavirtualworld,theymaylosetheabilitytomakefriendsandsocializeinanormalway.Aswell,TVandvideogamesarenottheonlywaystohavefun,sopare