圣诞礼物读后续写

第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Severalyearsago,IwaslivinginNewYorkandworkingforanairline,soInevergotbackhomeforChristmas.MyChristmaswashappytoowithsomeothercolleaguesaround.ButinmyheartIwassadbecauseIcouldn’tstaywithmyfamily.SometimesmycolleagueswouldsayourChristmaswasfilledwithtears.ButthisChristmaswasdifferent.Iwaslucky.Ihadthewholedayoff,whichmeantIcouldstaywithmyfamilyonChristmasEve.

WhenChristmasmorningcame,Iawoketoasmallhandrubbingmyface.“Dad!MerryChristmas!”wasallmyyoungersonhadtimetosay.Heseemedtoberacingagainsttime【比喻】.Iknewhewashuntingfor【动作细节】giftswithhisbrothereagerly.Igotdownstairsjusttoseethetwolittleboys’facesastheylookedatthepocketsSantaClaushadleftthem.IrealizedthattherealChristmaswasforthechildrenwhohaddeepbeliefintheamazingpowerofSantaClaus.Atfirst,theirfingerswentalmostshyly【动作细节】overtheirtoys.Whentheirinspection(检查)hadbeencompleted,thetwoboysensuredthatthegiftswerereallydeliveredbySantaClausandtheydragged【动作细节】everythingintothecentreofthelivingroom.

Delightfloodedtheroom【渲染氛围】.Astheirmotherbegangivingoutgifts,Ismiledtomyself,wonderinghowmyunexpectedgiftsthisyearwouldbereceived.WithsomanyChristmasspentoutside,IhadpreparedsomanygiftsformychildrenandtogetherwithmywifeIhidtheminseveralsecretplaces.Butthechildrenwereexcellentdetectives【比喻】andtheyfoundallofthem.TheywerehappilyopeningpackagesconstantlythankingconsiderateSantaClausforhiskindnessandabilitytoknowtheirdesires.ButIhadnotreceivedasingleone.IknewtheyhadforgottenmyexistencewithmyabsencefromtheirChristmastheseyears.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好；注意：1.续写词数应为150左石：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。审题：Theme(what):familybond–loveandconsiderationConflict-WasIreallyforgottenbythefamilyonChristmas?Writingpurpose(why)–torecordanunforgettableandpreciousChristmasspentwithhisfamily//toshowfamilyattachmentwritingstyle(how)–vivid,sensitiveandlivelyDetails:1.setting--whenandwhere(时空线)onChristmasmorning//athomefromupstairs(bedroom)todownstairs(livingroom)who:afamilyconsistingoftwosons,awifeandme(thehusbandwhoworkedforanairline)2.plot(情节线)IhadadayoffonChristmas→awoketoobservechildrenhuntingforgifts→thefamilyreceivedgiftsandopenedpackages→Ihadnotreceivedasingleone3.feelings(情感线)excited→delighted&amazed→alittledisappointedPredictthepossibleplotIhadtoadmitthatmydisappointmentwasgrowingsteadily._______________________________[Showhisdisappointment–whatdidhedo/say?howdidhefeel?][Bycontrast,whatwerethechildrenandwifedoing?]Suddenlymywifewalkeduptome.__________________________________________________[Whatwouldshedo?Would“I”receiveaChristmasgift?][HowdidIfeeltheloveandaffectionofthefamily?]细节呼应：tears/detective/knowtheirdesires/airline/…学生跑偏了的思路1.自责版Itwasmyfaultbeingabsentforyears.IrealizedIdidn'tshouldermydutyofaccompanyingmyfamily.Iwasn’tagoodhusbandandfather.Mydisappointmentgraduallyturnedintoself-accusation.Ifeltashamedandwantedtoquitmyjob.2.争风吃醋，指责孩子Myboysdidn’tknowhowtoshowgratitudetotheirfather,therealSanta.Iwastheonetosendthemgifts,notSanta.Ineedtouncoverthetruth—therewasnoSantaClause!TherealChristmaswasnotonlyforthechildrenbutalsoforme.3.生气恼怒，顾影自怜，需要妻子开导Maybeeveryonehadforgottenmyexistenceanddidn’tpreparedinadvance.Myeyesgrowingmisty,Imustbethemostpitifuldadandhusband.4.逃离家庭，借工作消愁Iwantedtosaysth.but…Iwenttomyofficetosolvethedifficultiesinmyjob.ItseemedthatI’llbesurroundedbyabademotionwhenIstayedathome.IthoughtIwouldnevercomebackforChristmasagain.5.受委屈了想回家找妈妈Ihadn’treceivedanypresentsinceIleftmyparents.IrangupmyparentsandtoldthemhowmuchIlovedthem.语言错误一、动词时态随机播放，不规则动词乱写一气standed,understanded,shaked,stricken,bursted…二、非谓语动词的误用1.Itmustbethemostdisappointedandlongesttime.Icouldn’thelpcry.Beingforgottenwasanembarrassedthing.Myexistencewasembarrassed.2.I’dliketotellyouanexcitednewsthat…3.Staringatthefamiliarfaces,tearsrollingdownmycheeks.…Thoughsorrowpainfillingmyheart,Ifeltgrateful.4.Withallemotionssurgedintomymind,Idecidedtohaveawalk…5.Lookingattheboys’faceslitup…,I…6.Asworkingforanairline,beingoutisthethingshappeningrapidly.7.Feltmyeyesbecomingmisty,Iliftedmyhead.三、介词错误1.in/atChristmas2.lookmyboyscheering/theirhappyface/yourgift3.Yourcomingworthtocelebrate.4.Theyexpressedgratitudetomydevotion四、词不达意，词性不管1.缺席ItwasmethathadabsentedtheirChristmas.MaybethatistheendingofbeingabsencefromChristmas.2.陪伴Ihadn’taccompanywiththem.TheyhavesufferedtoomanyChristmaswithou