书面表达强化训练.ppt

1、书面表达强化训练,段落练笔（将下列一段话翻译成英语）：小鹏一家有五个人。他们都有自己的爱好。他的父母喜欢打羽毛球。爷爷奶奶喜欢晚饭后散步。小鹏喜欢集邮。几乎每天晚上小鹏的爷爷奶奶都给他讲故事。他们过着幸福的生活。,一般表达,Xiaopengsfamilyhasfivepeople.Theyallhavetheirhobbies.Hisparentslikebadminton(羽毛球).Hisgrandparentsliketohaveawalkaftersupper.Xiaopenglikescollectingstamps.Hisgrandparentstellhimastoryalmost

2、everyevening.Theyliveahappylife.,高级表达,TherearefivepeopleinXiaopengsfamily,includinghimself.Allofthemhavetheirownhobbies.Forexample,hisparentslikebadmintonandhisgrandparentsenjoywalkingaftersupper.CollectingstampsisXiaopengsfavouritehobbyandtohisgreatjoy,hisparentstellhimastoryalmosteveryevening.What

3、ahappylifetheylead!,教师点评,以上两段都是使用简单句进行表述，但是读起来效果大不一样。一般表达中存在两大问题：(1)是主语的表达过于单调，从头到尾使用主语加谓语的单一模式，平铺直叙，让人读起来平淡无味；(2)是谓语的使用过于简单，三句中的“喜欢”均使用like一词，不能不使读者感到作者的词汇量的贫乏。以上两个问题导致整个段落表达单调、语句呆板、档次低下。,而看完一般表到后再读高级表达，给人的感觉是耳目一新，越读越有味。主语的表达新颖别致，谓语的使用灵活多变，使整个段落活了起来，美了起来！假如你是阅卷老师，难道你不给这样的表达以高分吗？综观以上高级表达，它有三大亮点：1.主语

4、的表达要多样化。如高级表达中的allofthem,还有bothhisfatherandmother,bothofthem,theyeachlike,eachofthem等。2.谓语的表达灵活。如喜欢一词的表达用了like,enjoy,befondof,goinfor,becrazyabout等。3.简单句的句型变换多样。如therebe句型，动名词做主语，感叹句、倒装句、强调句型等。,书面表达原题：,假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭戈动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一

5、封信：1.自我介绍；2.祝贺苏琳生日；3.感谢工作人员；4.索取苏琳三岁生日照。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。,优秀范文欣赏、研读：,DearSir/Madam,GreetingsfromChina!ImLiHua,astudentinSichuan.IvebeenapandaloversinceIwasachild.AboutthreeyearsagoIwasdelightedtolearnthatBaiyungavebirthtoherdaughterSulinandIhavebeenwatchinghergrowonyourwebsi

6、te.Nowshesgoingtobethree.Idliketowishherahappybirthdayandtoexpressmythankstoyouforyourhardwork,becauseofwhichSulinandherparentsarelivingahappyandhealthylifeintheUSA.,Bytheway,couldIhaveaphotoofSulintakenonherthirdbirthday?Thankyouverymuchinadvance.Yourstruly,LiHua(共110words),书面表达中常用的使句子增色的连接词,1.表示补充

7、：whatsmorebesidesinadditionmoreoverfurthermore2.表示列举：suchasforexamplelikeincludingincluded3.表示并列andbothandnotonlybut(also)aswellas,4.表示时间的承接：then(shortly)afterthatafterwards5.表示方式：inthiswaybythismeansbydoingthis(so)thatwayifyoudothis6.表示原因、结果：because/as/since/forbecauseof(asaresultof)thanksto7.表示情感、

8、心情、感受：toonessurprise/sadness/shock/sadness/excitement/joy/worry/satisfaction/pride,8.表示转折、让步：buthoweveralthoughthougheventhoughevenifinspiteof(介词短语)despite(介词)9.表示顺序、总结、引起话题：firstlysecondlyfirstofalltobeginwithinawordallinallinconclusionasweallknowitiswell-knownthat10.表示观点、看法:inmyopinionIthink/belie

9、ve/agreethatPersonally,Ithink11.表示目的：withthepurposeof+V-ingto/inorderto/soasto(不放于句首)+原形sothat/inorderthat+句子,12.其他方面：actually/infact/asamatteroffactmeanwhilenotuntilnotunlessatthesametimeononehand,ontheotherhand，theformerthelatterthus(这样)luckily/unluckilysimilarlyinstead/insteadofonthecontrary(恰恰相反

10、)inshort/ingeneralonthewholewithoutdelay(毫不耽搁地)surelycertainlyofcoursefromnowonforonething,foranotherthing,13.常用的句型结构：(1).TherebeTherehavebeengreatchangesinourvillagesince1990.Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinourvillagesince1990.Ourvillagehasgreatlychangedsince1990.(2).the+比较级，the+比较级Theharderyoustudy,th

11、egreaterprogressyouwillmake.,3.nomatterNomatterhow(=however)difficulttheworkis,Illnevergiveitup.Nomatterwhereyougo,youcanalwaysfindtimetostudy.Anyonewho(=Whoever)breakstheruleswillsurelybepunished.4.ThereisnodoubtthatThereisnoneedforsomebodytodoWefinditourdutytodoItisnowonderthat（怪不得）,精选短文改错练习：,做题技巧

12、指导：1.做题务必规范，以避免不必要的扣分;2.做题务必足够细心，特别是单词拼写；3.最好先用1-2分钟通篇快速浏览一下掌握其大意，然后逐句改错，即所谓“题按行出，错从句改”。4.如时间比较充裕，最好快速检查一遍，看看自己改出来的短文是否通畅；四种错误类型是否齐全、分布合理。,实战演练（1）,DearAlice,Ihavejustgotsomegoodnewstotelltoyou.(1)Iwinanationalprizeforpaintinglastweek.My(2)fatherwassopleasingthathesuggestedIgoto(3)Englandforaholiday.

13、Iwouldliketostaying(4)thereforhalfamonth,visitingplaceofinterest(5)orpracticingmyEnglishaswell.Wevebeen(6)writingtoeachfornearlyayearnow.Ihave(7)oftendreamedoftalkfacetofacewithyou.(8)Iimagineyoullbeatvacationyourselfbythat(9)time.Perhapswecouldgoouttodosome(10)sightseeingtogether.,实战演练（2）,TheStorya

14、boutGrowthismyfavoriteAmerican(1)TVplaybecauseitisveryinterested.Theplay(2)tellshumorousstoriesthathappenintheGreens(3)family.Withsuchstoriesitmakepeoplethink(4)aboutlife,butthereforeattractstheaudience.Itis(5)alsoawindowwhichwecanlearnaboutAmerica(6)society.Andthereweremanymeaningfulthings(7)thatar

15、eworththinkof,suchastherelationship(8)betweenparentsandchildreninalotofAmerican(9)family.ItisquitedifferentfromthoseinChina.Theplayisverypopular.Wedbetternottomiss(10)thechancetoenjoyit.,第四次双周练书面表达参考范文：,DearAlex,Imverygladtoseethenewsfromthe21stCenturythatyouwouldliketofindaChinesehighschoolstudentasyourpenpal.PerhapsImtherightoneyouarelookingfor.Iama16-year-oldseniorhighschoolstudent.Ofallmylessons,Englishismyfavoritesubject.Imalsofondoftravel(l)ing.Inmysparetime,IoftensurftheInternet.Imwillingtohelpothers,whentheyareintrouble.That