8.Sentence Variety in paragraph writing 段落写作中句型结构的变化.ppt

1、PracticalEnglishWriting,SarahApril,2008,Thelifeofastudentishard.Itishardbecausethereistoomuchworkandnotenoughtime.Manypeople,however,thinkjusttheoppositetrue.Theythinkstudentsspendmostoftheirtimeprotesting,carousing,(carouse狂欢作乐)andgettingintoallsortsoftrouble.Imustadmitthatthesepeoplearenotentirely

2、mistaken,fortherearestudentswhocometouniversitysolelytohaveagoodtime.ButIhardlythinkthischaracterizesmoststudents.Itcertainlydoesntcharacterizethosewhotaketheirstudiesseriously.Itdoesntcharacterizeme.,Appreciation,SentenceVariety句子的多样性,ThomasJeffersonwasbornin1743.HediedatMonticello,Virginia,onJuly4

3、,1826.Heaccomplishedanumberofthingsduringhiseighty-fouryears.HewasknownforhisdraftofTheDeclarationofIndependence.Jeffersonwasamanofmanytalents.Hehadawideintellectualrange.Hewasapatriot,andhewasoneoftherevolutionaryfoundersoftheUnitedStates.,ThomasJeffersonwasbornin1743anddiedatMonticello,Virginia,on

4、July4,1826.Duringhiseighty-fouryearsheaccomplishedanumberofthings.AlthoughbestknownforhisdraftofTheDeclarationofIndependence,Jeffersonwasamanofmanytalentswhohadawideintellectualrange.HewasapatriotwhowasoneoftherevolutionaryfoundersoftheUnitedStates.,VariousSentenceBeginnings句子开头多样化,Forbetterorworse,

5、creditcardsarenowreadilyavailabletocollegestudents.Lookingupatthesky,Isawthesunwentunderacloud.Furthermore,footballisalsoadangeroussporttoplay.WhenforeignstudentscometotheUnitedStates,theysufferfromcultureshock.,Thewayfootballandbasketballareplayedisasinterestingastheplayers.Becausefootballisagameof

6、precision,eachplayisdiagrammedtoaccomplishacertaingoal.Basketball,however,isagameofendurance.Infact,abasketballgamelookslikeatrackmeet;theteamthatdropsofexhaustionfirstloses.Basketballplayersareoftencomparedtoartists,theirmovesandslamdunksaretheirmasterpieces.,VariousSentenceBeginnings,Thewayfootbal

7、landbasketballareplayedisasinterestingastheplayers.Becausefootballisagameofprecision,eachplayisdiagrammedtoaccomplishacertaingoal.Basketball,however,isagameofendurance.Infact,abasketballgamelookslikeatrackmeet;theteamthatdropsofexhaustionfirstloses.Basketballplayersareoftencomparedtoartists.Theirmov

8、esandslamdunksaretheirmasterpieces.,SentenceBeginnings,Anythingwrongwiththisparagraph?,WehadaverygoodeveningonFriday.AfteramealataverygoodItalianrestaurantwewenttoseeagoodfilm.Ilikeditbecausetheactorswereallsogoodandtheplotwasagoodoneaswell.Afterwardswewereinsuchagoodmoodthatwedecidedtovisitsomegood

9、friendsofoursandtellthemallaboutourevening.,WehadaverygoodeveningonFriday.AfteramealataverygoodItalianrestaurantwewenttoseeagoodfilm.Ilikeditbecausetheactorswereallsogoodandtheplotwasagoodoneaswell.Afterwardswewereinsuchagoodmoodthatwedecidedtovisitsomegoodfriendsofoursandtellthemallaboutourevening.

10、,Anythingwrongwiththisparagraph?,WehadaverygoodeveningonFriday.AfteramealataverygoodItalianrestaurantwewenttoseeagoodfilm.Ilikeditbecausetheactorswereallsogoodandtheplotwasagoodoneaswell.Afterwardswewereinsuchagoodmoodthatwedecidedtovisitsomegoodfriendsofoursandtellthemallaboutourevening.,BoringWord

11、s,WehadaveryenjoyableeveningonFriday.AfteramealataromanticItalianrestaurantwewenttoseeanexcitingfilm.Ilikeditbecausetheactorswereallsosensitiveandtheplotwasanoriginaloneaswell.Afterwardswefeltsoexhilarated高兴的thatwedecidedtovisitsomeclosefriendsofoursandtellthemallaboutourevening.,Exercise1:Changethe

12、word“nice”intosomeotherwords,Ihadaverynicechildhood.IwenttoaveryniceschoolinScotlandwheretheteacherswereallnicetothechildrenandthelessonswerealwaysnice.Itwasinaverynicepartofthecountryanditseemstomenowthattheweatherwasalwaysnice.Ithoughtitwasespeciallyniceinwinterwhenitwasnicetoplayinthesnow.Ourscho

13、oluniformwasveryniceandschooldinnerswerealwaysnice.IwonderifitwasreallyasniceasIthinknoworifIamjustbecomingold.,Ihadaveryhappychildhood.IwenttoaverypleasantschoolinScotlandwheretheteacherswereallkindtothechildrenandthelessonswerealwaysinteresting.Itwasinaverybeautifulpartofthecountryanditseemstomeno

14、wthattheweatherwasalwaysfine.Ithoughtitwasespeciallyenjoyableinwinterwhenitwasexcitingtoplayinthesnow.Ourschooluniformwasveryattractiveandschooldinnerswerealwaysdelicious.IwonderifitwasreallyaswonderfulasIthinknoworifIamjustbecomingold.,NoBoringWords,ExampleStringyThefameofmydogsspreadalloverourpart

15、oftheOzarks,andtheywerethebestinthecountry,sothatnocoon浣熊huntercameintomygrandfathersstorewithasmanypeltsasIdid.,StringySentences粘连句,StringySentences-sentencewithtoomanyclausesusuallyconnectedwithand,but,so,andbecause,formingoneverylongsentence.Stringysentencesaresolongthereaderforgetsthebeginningof

16、thesentencebeforereachingtheend.Stringysentenceisill-unifiedbecauseitcontainsideaslooselyrelatedbythecarelessuseofand,so,andbut.,StringySentences粘连句,ExampleStringyThefameofmydogsspreadalloverourpartoftheOzarks,andtheywerethebestinthecountry,sothatnocoon浣熊huntercameintomygrandfathersstorewithasmanype

17、ltsasIdid.CorrectedThefameofmydogsspreadalloverourpartoftheOzarks.Theywerethebestinthecountry.NocoonhuntercameintomygrandfathersstorewithasmanypeltsasIdid.,StringySentences粘连句,Letsrevisestringysentences,Stringysentence:WearegoingtomeetJamesNewcomb,andheisaprofessorofEnglishliterature.Revised:Wearego

18、ingtomeetJamesNewcomb,whoisaprofessorofEnglishliterature.Stringysentence:Thismountainissixthousandfeethigh,anditisonlyfourmilesfromtheairport,andthefieldisnotaverylargeone,butnoplanehasevercrashedonit.Revised:Althoughthismountainissixthousandfeethighandonlyfourmilesfromthesmallairport,noplanehasever

19、crashedonit.,StringySentences,Theriveris60mileslong,anditaverages50yardsinwidth,anditsdepthaverage8feet.,NoStringySentences,Theriver,whichis60mileslongandaverages50yardsinwidth,hasanaveragedepthof8feet.Theriveris60mileslong.Itaverages50yardsinwidth,and8feetindepth.,StringySentences,Manystudentsatten

20、dclassesallmorningandtheyworkallafternoonandthentheyhavetostudyatnightsotheyareusuallyexhaustedbytheweekend.,NoStringySentences,Manystudents,whoattendclassesallmorning,workallafternoon,andstudyatnight,areusuallyexhaustedbytheweekend.Manystudents,aftertheyattendclassesallmorning,alsoworkintheafternoo

21、n.Becausetheyalsohavetostudyatnight,theyareusuallyexhaustedbytheweekend.Afterattendingclassesallmorning,workingallafternoon,andstudyingatnight,manystudentsareexhaustedbytheweekend.Manystudentsattendclassesallmorningandworkallafternoon.They,theyhavetostudyatnight.Asaresult,theyareusuallyexhaustedbyth

22、eweekend.,ChoppySentences,Choppysentencesaresentencesthataretooshort.Whenseveralshortsentencescometogethertheyforcethereadertogoslowly.Thismakesthewritingseemmoreelementarythanittrulyis.,Ourhomewasinabeautifulvalley.Itwasfarback.ItwasintheruggedOzarks.OurhomewasinabeautifulvalleyfarbackintheruggedOz

23、arks.,ChoppySentences割裂句,Thehousewasmadeoflogs.Itwasnestledattheedgeofthefoothills.Itwasinthemouthofasmallcanyon.Itwassurroundedbyagroveoftrees.Theywerehugeredoaks.Theloghousewasnestledattheedgeofthefoothillsinthemouthofasmallcanyon,andwassurroundedbyagroveofhugeredoaks.,ChoppySentences割裂句,ChoppySen

24、tences割裂句,JohnPeterwasanewspapereditor.HewagedandwonanimportantbattleforfreedomofthepressinAmerica.HecriticizedthepoliciesoftheBritishgovernor.Hewaschargedwithcriminallibelasaresult.Peterslawyersweredisbarredbythegovernor.AndrewHamiltondefendedhim.HamiltonconvincedthejurythatPeterscriticismweretrue.Therefore,thestatementswerenotlibelous.,NoChoppySente