书面表达专题4.ppt

1、书面表达专题(四),学生习作点评 (一) 实现有效的沟通，建立良好的人际关系，不仅要善于言表、更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息，写一篇题为“Being a Good Listener”的英文演讲稿。,注意：1.对所给要点，逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。 2词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。 3演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。 Good afternoon，everyone! The topic of my speech today is“Being a Good Listener” _ Thank you for your listening!,学生习作 G

2、ood afternoon，everyone! The topic of my speech today is“Being a Good Listener” Good listening can always show respect，promote understanding，and improve interpersonal relationship.,Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children，so they will understand them better，and find it ea

3、sy to narrow the generation gap；teachers should listen more to their students，then they can meet their needs better，and place themselves in a good relationship with their students；students should listen more to their classmates，thus they will help and learn from each other，and a friendship is likely

4、 to be formed.,What I want to stress is that each of us should listen more to others.Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk；show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile；be openminded to different opinions even though you dont like them.In a word，goo

5、d listening can really enable us to get closer to each other. Thank you for your listening!,教师点评 文章开门见山，点明“为何倾听”，并且运用了并列谓语动词来表达。 在“谁来倾听”一部分，作者运用并列的“parents should listen.；teachers should listen.；students should listen.”，使文章读来琅琅上口，很有气势。,在“怎样倾听”这一部分，作者提出了三点建议。本段首先运用what引导的主语从句；其次用了三个并列的祈使句，符合演讲稿的语言特点；

6、最后，以in a word 作出总结。 总之，文章不管是从结构上，还是从语言上，都不愧为一篇佳作。,(二) Directions：Write an English composition in about 100 to 120 words according to the points given in Chinese. 1我最难忘的一课。 2具体说明为什么难忘。 3感想。 _,学生习作 On my study way，a English class makes a deep impression on me and is remian in my memory.At that time，Im

7、 not interested in English and always do other something in English classes.However，this English class makes me change my mind about English.The English teachers lecture attracts me deeply.She opens a door for me，make me realize English is very important and interesting.She gives me enough confidence learn English well.In a word，this class changes my life in some way.Therefore，I swear I must learn English well and I can.,教师点评 本文汉语式英语较多，出现了许多时态错误。既然是记叙“难忘的一课”，应以一般过去时为主。本文除最后一句外，其他各句的时态均应改为过去时态。 此处为汉语式表达，应改为In my study life/career。 冠词使用错误，a应改为an。 remain 为系动