专四作文评分细则及样卷分析.ppt

1、Topic,Recently some banks extend their business to university campus and offer credit cards to students. A lot of people worry that credit cards may bring harm to students, while others dont think so. What is your opinion? Write on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words on the following

2、 topic: Will Credit Cards Bring Harm to the Students?,Instructions,You are to write in three parts. In the first part, state specifically what your opinion is. In the second part, support your opinion with appropriate details. In the last part bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a

3、 summary. Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.,Will Credit Cards Bring Harm to the Students?,Recently, in order to extend business to university campus, some banks offer credit cards to college

4、 students. Many people worry that credit cards may do harm to students, while others dont think so. In my opinion, credit cards are good for students if they are used appropriately. First, when a student uses credit cards, he neednt bring much cash with him every day. And the less cash he brings, th

5、e less he needs to worry about being stolen. Second, using credit cards can minimize the chances of receiving forged notes. Students are not quite good at distinguishing forged notes, and thus often become victims of coiners. If they use credit cards, it will be very possible for them to avoid recei

6、ving forged notes because they dont need to get the changes. Third, using credit cards can help students to know more about credit. If they dont repay their credit account in time, they will have to pay more interests and whats worse, they will get a bad credit record which will bring inconvenience

7、to them in the future. Therefore, I believe that credit cards will not bring harm to students if used reasonably.,评分标准,满分15分，分五个等级，14分、11分、8分、5分和2分，可以酌情加一或减一分，但不得加或减半分。 具体标准为： 14分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本无语言错误。 11分：切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。 8分：基本切题。表达思想比较清楚，文字上连贯，但语言错误较多，其中有少量严重错误。 5分：基本切题。表达思想不够清楚，文字

8、连贯性差，有较严重的语言错误。 2分：条理不清，思想紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 交白卷，或作文与题目毫不相干，或只写几个单词，以0分计算。 评分对于字数的要求：累计字数在150-170之间，扣1分；130-150之间，扣2分；110-130之间，扣3分；90-110之间，扣4分；90以下，至多给5分。若照抄提示中原句，均不得计入所写字数。,14-15分 内容切题, 完整, 条理清楚, 文章结构严谨, 语法正确, 语言通顺恰当, 句式用词富有变化,基本无语言错误。 11-13分 内容切题, 完整, 条理较清楚, 文章结构较严谨, 语言比较通顺恰当, 少量语法，拼写

9、错误。 8-10分 内容基本切题, 完整, 条理基本清楚, 文章结构基本严谨, 语言基本通顺恰当，少量严重错误, 一些词使用不当。 5-7分 内容基本切题, 完整, 条理不够清楚, 较明显的母语痕迹，较多语言错误, 许多词使用不当。 2-4分 内容偏题, 不完整, 思路混乱, 语句不完整, 只有少数句子可以理解, 词汇拼写错误严重。,TEM-4作文试题及样卷评分 2006年,Topic,Recently a Beijing information company did a survey of student life among more than 700 students in Beiji

10、ng, Guangzhou, Xian, Chengdu, Shanghai, Wuhan, Nanjing and Shengyang. The results have shown that 67 percent of students think that saving money is a good habit while the rest believe that using tomorrows money today is better. What do you think?,Instructions,Write a composition of about 200 words.

11、You are to write in three parts. In the first part, state specifically what your opinion is. In the second part, support your opinion with appropriate details. In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary. You should supply an appropriate title for your composit

12、ion.,Sample 1 The Good Habit,Nowadays, more and more young people think that it is better that using tomorrows money today than saving money, while in my opinion, I think its right. For the first, our contrair has to develop. So it calls us to use more money to let the nation develop. And then, that

13、 may make our life more comfortable. For example, I heard a story. There are two man. A use tomorrows money to buy a new houseas he has to pay money to the bank every months while B start keeping money.,Twenty years later, B finally keeping enough money to buy a new house, but A has been lived in it

14、 for twenty years and pay enough money to the bank. At the end, if we have the abilile to pay the list, why we dont use tomorrows money to let our life more wonderful? So, thats what I think.,5-6分。结构基本符合，但语言过于简单，语法错误多，内容模糊不清，题目不正确，字数少于170。 举例不可信。举例应该真实可信，比如亲身经历、朋友体验或者名人轶事等。 文章结尾太简单。,Sample 2：Saving

15、Money is a Good Habit,I think saving money is a good habit. Because saving money can make you learn how to use less money to buy more things. Saving money can make you become a rich man. If some thing happen one day, you must use some money to solve the problem, but nobody can lend to you the money.

16、 Your saving money can help solve the problem.,Nowdays, some students use their parents money to buy a lot of unnessary things. Such as, Some students change their mobil phone every month. Its not a good habit. Although their parents have a lot of money, they cant use money in that way. Its waste of

17、 money. If you save money as a habit. You can think carefully before you buy everything. “This thing is necessary for me? Can I buy the cheaper one?” All those questions can be asked by yourself.,If you want to buy a very useful thing, but you dont have enough money, you can save money for it. After

18、 some time, you can buy it for your-self. Saving money is a good habit. It make you become rich. It make you learn how to use less money to buy more things.,本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切题，结构基本正确。但语言简单，重复动词，语法错误多。 开始段没有引入主题，而是直接提出作者观点，太突然。而且有许多非完整句。 文章没有深度，思考肤浅。,Sample 3: Saving money is a good habit,The other day,

19、 I heard a conversation between a boy and a girl. “Why are you always lack of money? As far I know, your parents give you ample money for your daily life”. said the girl. “Yes, I always use tomorrows money today”. Said the boy. “Its a bad habit, and you should your money!” the girl shouted. This is

20、a very common phenomenon among the university students. Owing to their argument, certainly, I am in favor of the girls view.,What possibly contributes to the preference can be listed as follow. In the first place, money is very important for us. We use money buy food, buy clothes and so on. But, mon

21、ey is very precious, because its very hard to make money. So money should be used when its necessary. In the second place, there are so many poor children who quit school for lack of money in poor religion. So its very significant to save our money to help those poor children. And they are look forw

22、ard to your help! The last but the least important is that if you always use tomorrows money today, you will form a bad habit. But your money is limited. So you may rob others of money.,In short, I hold a firm belief that saving money is a good habit and we should keep it forever. Its the high time

23、that we took some measures to save money!,9-10分。文章切题，结构正确，有内容，有句式变化。但语法错误多，随意，粗心漏词。 说理缺乏逻辑。比如很多小孩失学不是我们需要节约用钱的理由，再比如钱不够用就会去抢别人的钱吗？ 文章的入题不错，但故事交代很马虎，语言也很平凡，且不够简练。 文章结尾主题被简单重复，思想没有升华。,Sample 4,There is no concensus among the people on the issue of the choice between saving money and using tomorrows mo

24、ney today. The attitudes toward this problem vary from person to person. And in my humble opinion, it is essential for us to save more money today instead of using tomorrows money. There are many reasons that may account for my point, and the following are the most conspicuous aspects.,To start with

25、, we Chinese people boast a good tradition of being economical. The traditional Chinese culture regards waste as a poor moral standard. As a university student, we need to keep on carrying forward our nations fine moral standard, i.e. saving. And saving money is conducive not only to the cultivation

26、 of a good moral, but also to release the heavy burden resulting from some accidents in the future. In other words, saving todays money could meet our urgent need of it in the future.,Last but not least, the fierce competition well face after we graduate is full of uncertainties. Once we could not f

27、ind a job which offers high salaries, it will be impossible for us to return the money to the creditors. To put it into a nutshell, I am a great believer that saving money is a good habit because it really exerts positive impacts on both the present and the future.,本卷得分12分。语言通畅，词汇丰富，观点明确，条理清楚，结构正确。但

28、有少量语法错误和拼写错误。没写题目（如果有题目可给13分）。,TEM4便条评分标准及样卷 2007,Note Writing,Write a note of about 50-60 words based on the following situation： Your classmate, Jimmy, is head of the universitys swimming club. He has invited you to join the club, but you like some other sport. Write a note, declining his invitati

29、on and explaining why. Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness.,Sample1: (8分),April 22, 2007 Dear Jimmy, I received your short message, and Im glad to learn that you have been promoted as head of our universitys swimming club. Congratulations! You deserve that. A

30、s to your invitation for me to join your club, Im afraid I cant make it. As you know, I am unable to swim and staying in water makes me uneasy. Funny, right? Whats more, I joined our schools basketball team two weeks ago. And I guess well exercise a lot for the competition held next month. So there

31、is probably no time for me to learn swimming. Well, maybe you could drop in and watch our competition next month. Yours, Sherry,Sample 2: (9分),April 22, 2007 Dear Jimmy, Thank you so much for inviting me to join the swimming club. Id like to but Im afraid I cannot. To learn tennis has long been my d

32、ream and the best tennis teacher will be leaving next year. So this is the last chance for me and I would like very much to seize it. Best wishes. Yours, Tom,Section B Note-Writing (10 points),April 28, Dr Smith, An English speech contest in honor of the 70th anniversary of the university will take place on the evening of May 12 (Saturday). The organizing comm