如何提升中考英语作文.ppt

如何提升中考英语作文,命题人是怎么想的？,试题的设置一般都提供一定的情景内容，内容多与学生日常生活实际相联系。提供情景内容的形式有材料、提纲、图表或图画等。试题也注重考查考生表达个人思想、再现生活经历、描述周边任务以及发表相关观点的能力。,见初中毕业生学业考试复习用书p76,准备中考英语作文（24个热点话题）,my dream low-carbon life my feelings when leaving school happiness school safety how to behave well my teacher / my friends / parents/family my school day / life my hobby my favourite animal,准备中考英语作文热点话题,my childhood my hero a holiday journey in the past my school life / my dream school how to keep healthy the spring festival my hometown how to learn english,writing about animals in danger how to protect our environment save water mobile phones homework / study /pressure communication,准备中考英语作文热点话题,阅卷人是怎么想的？,谁是阅卷人？,他们工作时心情如何？,一半高中老师，一半初中老师。,不太好！,评分依据是什么？,第五档：（18-20分）内容完整，表达清楚；语言基本无误；行文连贯，能使用修饰词或表示顺序、逻辑关系的连接词。鼓励使用高级词汇与丰富的句子结构。 第四档：（14-17分）内容较完整，表达较清晰；行文基本连贯；语言有少量错误。 第三档：（10-13分）内容基本完整，表达基本清晰；语言虽有较多错误，尚能达意。 第二档：（6-9分）语言错误多，影响意思表达；错误百出，不知所云。 第一档：（0-5分）白卷或文不对题，只抄写了提示词。,评分标准：,好文章的明显特征（解读评分标准）,2、分段，条理清晰,3、有过渡词，过渡句,5、开头要点题，结尾要归题。,1、书写工整、优美,4、有高级词汇、优美句子如：谚语、倒装句、感叹句、后置定语从句、复合句、强调句、比喻等修辞方式，富有文采。,怎么提升？,有高级词汇、优美句子如：谚语、倒装句、感叹句、后置定语从句、复合句、强调句、比喻等修辞方式，富有文采。,不同表达：钟爱/热爱/着迷/,如何提升词汇？,例如：喜欢,1.when i talk with my classmates after class, i feel happy.第三档,whenever i talk with my classmates after class, i feel relaxed and pleased.,from 普通句式to优美句式,how pleased i am when i talk with my classmates after class!,第四档,第五档,如何提升句子？,2.when i get a good mark in my exam, i feel happy.,when getting a good mark in my exam, i feel cheerful and proud.,getting a good mark in my exam, i feel cheerful and proud.,to my joy, i usually get good marks in the exams.,3.when i have a lot of homework, i feel bored.,i have so much homework to do that i feel bored.,i have so much homework to do, which makes me bored.,4. when i do badly in the exam, i feel bored.,to my sadness, i sometimes do badly in the exam.,because of my poor study, i feel sad and bored.,doing badly in the exam makes me bored.,一句多译，彰显扎实的语言功底,mike is fond of /is interested in reading. mike shows great interest in reading. reading is his favorite/ mikes hobby. reading plays an important part in mikes life. mike is a fan of reading. mike is crazy about/is keen on reading. mike is addicted to reading. mike feels like/ enjoys/ loves reading.,1. 迈克喜欢阅读。,its great fun for mike to read different kinds of books. mike cant help reading if he is free. mike spends a lot of time reading in his free time. it takes mike a lot of time to read when he is free. nothing is more important than reading for mike . mike fell in love with reading when he was young.,1. 迈克喜欢阅读。,方法一：旧文重写,hi, li li! im lucy. i think english is easy and fun. here is my advice on how to improve your english. firstly, you should always speak english in class and after class. secondly, read some english books and read english newspapers like 21st century teens and the times. thirdly, do more listening practice if you are free. last but not least, in your spare time, what about making some foreign pen friends and writing email messages in english to each other. well, if you do these every day, i think your english will be better .,how to learn english(无错误但非高分作文）,如何对句子进行修饰与提升：,1.firstly, you should always speak english in class and after class，,just as the saying goes, “practice makes perfect.”,2.secondly, read some english books and read english newspapers like 21st century teens and the times.,it can not only improve your reading skill but also help you widen your sights.,the more you read, the better your reading skill will be.,3.thirdly, do more listening practice if you are free.,nothing is difficult, if you put your heart into it.,hi, li li! im lucy. i think english is easy and fun. here is my advice on how to improve your english. firstly, you should always speak english in class and after class. just as the saying goes, “practice makes perfect.”secondly, read some english books and read english newspapers like 21st century teens and the times. it can not only improve your reading skills but also help you widen your sights. thirdly, do more listening practice if you are free. nothing is difficult, if you put your heart into it. last but not least, in your spare time, what about making some foreign pen friends and writing emails in english to each other. well, if you do these every day, i think your english will be better .,经修改提升的好文章,如：描写人物外貌、性格特征的词汇,kind, helpful, outgoing, humorous, easy-going, hardworking, brave, clever, bright, polite, honest, friendly, smart, naughty, warm- hearted,be popular with, be kind to, be interested in, be fond of, with the help of, be proud of, take pride in,neither tall nor short ,short dark hair , small eyes, strong, thin, short fair hair， a pair of glasses,方法二：帮助学生整理并扩充词汇,如：描写人物可用的一些句型,not only but also he is not only strong, but also very tall. he is not only my best teacher, but also my best friend. he not only makes his class lively and interesting, but also gives us his deep love. li hua is not only an excellent student but also a helpful and kind person.,方法三：帮助学生整理并扩充句子,2. so that she is so humorous and knowledgeable that we are all her fans. she is so kind that she is always ready to help others. im so lucky that i have such a good mother. my english teacher helps me so much that i make much progress in my study. im so thankful to miss wang that i will study harder and repay her.,3.感叹句. how lucky i am to be your friend! what a kind and helpful girl she is! what a great mother she is! how moved i feel to know what she has done for me!,4. 定语从句 in my life, therere lots of people i want to thank, but the person who i want to thank most is my mother. she is the most hardworking girl that i have ever seen. he is willing to help others who are in trouble. im outgoing and easygoing, which helps me to make a few friends.,5. 同位语 my sister, a lovely girl, works very hard and often smiles at others. lao she, a great writer, is famous for his play teahouse. my maths teacher, a middle-aged man, is full of humor and energy. mike, my best friend, dreams of being a scientist when he grows up.,6. 强调句 it was miss wang who gave me a hand in time. it was you who taught me patiently. it was in the park that i met my deskmate in the primary school last sunday.,7. 其它句子 you will be in my heart forever. she always share her happiness and sadness with me. we get along well with each other in our life. i really thank her for what she did for me. she gave me much help in many ways.,knowing what i thought, my mother encouraged me to have a try. i want to thank my mum from the bottom of my heart. i have many kinds of hobbies, such as reading english novels, playing basketball, travelling and making friends. reading english novels is one of my hobbies.,方法四：范文品读,写作训练（1）-描写人物 试题： 在即将过去的初中三年里，那些 陪你共同经历成长的挫折与成功， 与你分享欢乐与忧愁的正是你的同 班同学。请你通过一件事的记述， 让我们认识一下你的某位同学吧！,范文品读,my classmate,mary is my classmate, she is a really kind girl who never fails to make others happy. she often helps us with our lessons. at first, i wasnt very happy to be her classmate because she was so excellent. however, something changed my opinion and we became close friends. it was a cold winter morning, and i had a bad cold. nobody but mary noticed that i was sick and she ran to the school clinic and bought some medicine for me. then she gave me some fruit and poured hot water for me. watching her doing these things, i was moved. thanks to her help, i spent the terrible day happily. that is my classmate. she gave me help and warmth. i feel lucky that i have such a good classmate. she is the sunshine of my world.,写作训练（2）-描写人物,假如你的笔友（来自美国的mike) 下个月 将到你校学习，请你把他的情况提前介绍给 同学们。内容包括：1.mike的家庭情况。 2. mike的性格特点和兴趣爱好。 3. mike的父母和同学对他的评价。 4. mike来中国的原因。 字数：80-100词。文中不得出现你的真实 姓名校名和地名。,范文品读,friendly and humorous, mike is my pen friend. he will visit china. let me introduce him to you. mike, a lively boy, is 14 years old. he is my best pen friend. football and basketball play an important part in his life. he is such a brave and clever boy that his parents take pride in him a lot. he is not only an excellent student but also a good friend. you can make friends with him because he is very easy-going. to learn from each other and know more about chinese culture. mike will come to our school next month. lets give him a warm welcome.,写作训练（3）-学校生活,假如你是李红，下学期你的一位新加坡笔友anna想来中国上学。请你给她写封信，邀请她到你们学校来就读。 信的内容包括1. 学校概况。 2. 学校生活具体内容。 3. 谈谈你本人三年来在学 校学习和生活的感受。,dear anna, ill be so glad if you choose our school as your new place to study. im sure youll gain not only knowledge but also friendship and joy from it. our school has a wonderful campus. seeing the trees and flowers waving gently in the wind, you will feel happy and satisfied. furthermore, though there are some strict rules, yet we are given enough freedom. instead of studying all the day, we can play and take exercise to,take a break. moreover, our school is famous for its experienced teachers and friendly students as well. youll soon find it is a small society filled with love. i bet itll be easy for you to get on well with others, and you can experience an unforgettable time with us all. excitedly and happily, im waiting for your coming. your friend, li hong.,dear anna, i hear that youre going to china to study. my school must be your first choice. the school, old but beautiful, has three buildings, a playground and ,of course, lots of trees. whenever you wander in the school, youll be attracted by the green trees and vivid flowers. just think! how exciting it is to read a book in the sea of trees and flowers. anyway, the school is just like a big park.,talking of my study in school, i would say its really busy but exciting .every month we have five tests-thats the worst thing in the world. but we also have some time to have a rest, talk with others and enjoy our teachers classes .as for me, the science class is the best of all. join us! youll fall in love with it soon!,你班新转入一位来自澳大利亚的同学，名字叫sophia，请根据表格提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍sophia及班级情况，并对sophia的到来表示欢迎。,2015金华市中考英语作文题,方法五：订正错误,my school life,dear anna, im glad to hear you want to study in china. let me introduce my school for you. my school is beautiful that im sure you will fall in love with it. walk in the school, you will attracted by green trees and bright flower. besides, my teachers are friendly to every student, but they always strict with our work,to,be,flowers,are,walking,so,in,with their help, we have made many progress. my school life is full of happiness. my classmates and i always play together happily. when study, we always face difficulties together, i enjoyed all the time in the school because it can bring us a lot of things i never get at home. such is my school life, wonderful and fantastic, im really hope you can study with me.,much,studying,i,enjoy,方法六：教审题,书面表达 1大明在校园网英语留言板中留言说他在英语学习中遇到了许多困难。请你以sally的名义用英语回复他的问题。词数80100。文中不得出现真实的人名和地名。提示： （1）告诉他学好英语并不难，但学习方法很重要； （2）根据你自己的体会给他提几条建议（不少于3条）； （3）激励他坚持下去，并祝愿他取得进步。,同一话题，不同角度，学会审题,2总结是有效学习的重要组成部分，每个同学都应重视和培养这方面的能力。今天的英语考试已经接近尾声了，经过近两个小时的答题体验，请总结一下自己在英语学习中取得的进步和存在的不足，并对今后的英语学习拟定一些计划。下面的提示句可以帮助你更好地完成写作。(2011甘肃兰州卷) 要求：1. 紧扣主题，观点正确，行文连贯、流畅； 2. 提示句需在文中出现； 3. 字数80100左右。 i have just had a ve