高考英语作文专题读后续写一课件2.13(共22张)

读后续写专题一浙江新高考·英语ContinuationWriting读后续写提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。--《考试说明》01读后续写高考评分标准一.评分原则：

1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。

2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性；

4.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。

5.如书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。

6.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。第五档（21－25）·与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。·内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。·所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。·有效使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。二.评分标准内容（丰富合理）语言（准确生动）思维（严密连贯）02续写体裁：记叙文记叙文怎么读一.读记叙文要素5W和1H“who,what,where,when,why,how”Whoisitabout?Whathappens?Wheredoesithappen?Whendoesithappen?Whydoesithappen?Howdoesithappen?案例1：2019期末考读后续写5W和1HAlightdrizzle(毛毛雨)wasfallingasmysisterJillandIranoutoftheChurch,eagertogethomeandplaywiththepresentsthatSantaClaushadleftforusandourbabysister,Sharon.Acrossthestreetwasagasstationwherethebuswouldstop.ItwasclosedforChristmas,butInoticedafamilystandingintherain,huddled(挤)together.Iwonderedbrieflywhytheywerethere,butsoonforgotaboutthem.Whenwegothome,therewashardlytimetoenjoyourpresentsbecausewehadtogoofftoourgrandparent’shouseforourbigdinner.Aswedrovebytheclosedgasstation,Inoticedthefamilywerestillthere.Myfatherwasdrivingveryslowly.Suddenly,heU-turnedinthemiddleoftheroadandsaid,“Thosepeopleatthegasstationhavegotchildren.It'sChristmas!Ican'tstandit!”Whenmyfatherpulledintothegasstation,Isawtherewerefiveofthem:theparentsandthreechildren-twogirlsandasmallboy.Jill,Sharon,andIstaredatthechildren.andtheystaredbackatus.“Youwaitingforthebus?”myfatherasked.ThemansaidthattheyweregoingtoBirmingham,wherehehadabrotherandprospects(希望)ofajob.“Well,you'regettingwet.Thereisacoverandsomebenches(长凳)inthenextbusstopinWinborn,”myfathersaid,“I’lldriveyouupthere.”Theyclimbedintothecar.Theyhadnoluggage,onlytheclothestheywerewearing.MyfatheraskedthechildrenifSantaClaushadfoundthemyet.Threesadfacesgavehimtheanswer.“Well,”myfathersaid,winking(眨眼)atmymother,“whenIsawSantathismorning,hetoldmehewashavingtroublefindingallkidsandheaskedmeifhecouldleaveyourpresentsatmyhouse.We’lljustgoandgetthembeforeItakeyoutoWinborn.”WhoWhenWhereWhatWhyHow案例1：2019期末考读后续写5W和1HWe&afamily--Myfather&themanChristmasatthegasstation;atourhouse;inthecarstoppedtohelpthefamilyParagraph1:Whenwestoppedatourhouse,thethreechildrenranthroughthefrontdoor.Paragraph2:Backinthecar,onthewaytoWinborn,myfatheraskedthemanifhehadmoneyforthebustoBirmingham.theme?02续写体裁：记叙文二.读情节BeginningClimaxEndingDevelopmentIncitingincident：引起故事矛盾或冲突(conflict)的事件;Risingaction：围绕冲突故事主人公采取一系列的行动;Fallingaction：冲突向得以解决的方向发展;Resolution：冲突得到了解决;Development:案例2：Duringabullfight,adrunksuddenlywanderedintothemiddleofthering.Thecrowdbegantoshout,butthedrunkwasunawareofthedanger.Thebullwasbusywiththematadoratthetime,butitsuddenlycaughtsightofthedrunkwhowasshoutingruderemarksandwavingaredcap.Apparentlysensitivetocriticism,thebullforgotallaboutthematadorandchargedatthedrunk.Thecrowdsuddenlygrewquiet.Thedrunk,however,seemedquitesureofhimself.Whenthebullgotclosetohim,heclumsilysteppedasidetoletitpass.Thecrowdbrokeintocheersandthedrunkbowed.Bythistime,however,threemenhadcomeintotheringandtheyquicklydraggedthedrunktosafety.Eventhebullseemedtofeelsorryforhim,foritlookedonsympatheticallyuntilthedrunkwasoutofthewaybeforeoncemoreturningitsattentiontothematador.Duringabullfight,adrunksuddenlywanderedintothemiddleofthering.Thecrowdbegantoshout,butthedrunkwasunawareofthedanger.Thebullwasbusywiththematadoratthetime,butitsuddenlycaughtsightofthedrunkwhowasshoutingruderemarksandwavingaredcap.Apparentlysensitivetocriticism,thebullforgotallaboutthematadorandchargedatthedrunk.Thecrowdsuddenlygrewquiet.Thedrunk,however,seemedquitesureofhimself.Whenthebullgotclosetohim,heclumsilysteppedasidetoletitpass.Thecrowdbrokeintocheersandthedrunkbowed.Bythistime,however,threemenhadcomeintotheringandtheyquicklydraggedthedrunktosafety.Eventhebullseemedtofeelsorryforhim,foritlookedonsympatheticallyuntilthedrunkwasoutofthewaybeforeoncemoreturningitsattentiontothematador.BeginningDuringabullfight,adrunksuddenlywanderedintothemiddleofthering.Thecrowdbegantoshout,butthedrunkwasunawareofthedanger.Thebullwasbusywiththematadoratthetime,butitsuddenlycaughtsightofthedrunkwhowasshoutingruderemarksandwavingaredcap.Apparentlysensitivetocriticism,thebullforgotallaboutthematadorandchargedatthedrunk.Thecrowdsuddenlygrewquiet.Thedrunk,however,seemedquitesureofhimself.Whenthebullgotclosetohim,heclumsilysteppedasidetoletitpass.Thecrowdbrokeintocheersandthedrunkbowed.Bythistime,however,threemenhadcomeintotheringandtheyquicklydraggedthedrunktosafety.Eventhebullseemedtofeelsorryforhim,foritlookedonsympatheticallyuntilthedrunkwasoutofthewaybeforeoncemoreturningitsattentiontothematador.developmentDuringabullfight,adrunksuddenlywanderedintothemiddleofthering.Thecrowdbegantoshout,butthedrunkwasunawareofthedanger.Thebullwasbusywiththematadoratthetime,butitsuddenlycaughtsightofthedrunkwhowasshoutingruderemarksandwavingaredcap.Apparentlysensitivetocriticism,thebullforgotallaboutthematadorandchargedatthedrunk.Thecrowdsuddenlygrewquiet.Thedrunk,however,seemedquitesureofhimself.Whenthebullgotclosetohim,heclumsilysteppedasidetoletitpass.Thecrowdbrokeintocheersandthedrunkbowed.Bythistime,however,threemenhadcomeintotheringandtheyquicklydraggedthedrunktosafety.Eventhebullseemedtofeelsorryforhim,foritlookedonsympatheticallyuntilthedrunkwasoutofthewaybeforeoncemoreturningitsattentiontothematador.climaxDuringabullfight,adrunksuddenlywanderedintothemiddleofthering.Thecrowdbegantoshout,butthedrunkwasunawareofthedanger.Thebullwasbusywiththematadoratthetime,butitsuddenlycaughtsightofthedrunkwhowasshoutingruderemarksandwavingaredcap.Apparentlysensitivetocriticism,thebullforgotallaboutthematadorandchargedatthedrunk.Thecrowdsuddenlygrewquiet.Thedrunk,however,seemedquitesureofhimself.Whenthebullgotclosetohim,heclumsilysteppedasidetoletitpass.Thecrowdbrokeintocheersandthedrunkbowed.Bythistime,however,threemenhadcomeintotheringandtheyquicklydraggedthedrunktosafety.Eventhebullseemedtofeelsorryforhim,foritlookedonsympatheticallyuntilthedrunkwasoutofthewaybeforeoncemoreturningitsattentiontothematador.ending03情节的构思一.根据记叙文要素二.根据故事线索三.根据中心矛盾案例三：

Itwasoneofthehottestdaysofthedryseason.Wehadnotseenraininalmostamonth.Thecropsweredying.Cowshadstoppedgivingmilk.Thestreamswerelonggonebackintotheearth.Ifwedidn'tseesomerainsoon,wewouldloseeverything.ItwasonthisdaythatIlearnedthetruelessonofsharingandwitnessedtheonlymiracle(奇迹)Ihaveeverseeninmylife.IwasmakinglunchforthefamilyinthekitchenwhenIsawmysix-yearoldson,Billy,walkingtowardthewoods.Icouldonlyseehisback.Hewasn'twalkinginhisusualway.Hewasobviouslywalkingwithagreateffort,tryingtobeasstillaspossible.Minutesafterhedisappearedintothewoods,hecamerunningoutagaintowardthehouse.Iwentbacktomakingsandwiches,thinkingthatwhateverhehadbeendoingwascompleted.Momentslater,however,hewasonceagainwalking

inthatunusualwaytowardthewoods.Thisactivitywentonforanhour.Finally,mycuriositygotthebestofme.Icreptoutofthehouseandfollowedhimonhisjourney.Hewascuppingbothhandsinfrontofhimashewalked,beingverycarefulnottospillthewaterhecarried.Ifollowedhimsecretlyashewentintothewoods.Branchesslapped(拍打)hislittlefacebuthedidnottrytoavoidthem.Hemighthaveamuchhigherpurpose,Ithought.AsIcamecloser,Isawthemostamazingsight.Severallargedeerstoodinfrontofhim.Billywalkedrightuptothem,atthesightofwhichIalmostscreamedforhimtogetaway.Ahugebuck(雄鹿)wasdangerouslyclose.Butthebuckdidn'tthreatenhimnorevenmoveasBillykneltdown.AndthenIsawatinybabydeerlyingontheground,obviouslysufferingfromthirstandheat,liftitsheadwithgreatefforttodrinkthewaterinmyboy'shands.Para.1Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse._____________________________________________________Para.2Insteadoflecturinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.___________________________________________________________注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键短语;3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4.请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Continuethestorywiththebeginningofthefirstsentenceofthefollowingparagraphs.When&WhereWhoWhat/howWhyPara.4Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse._________Para.5Insteadoflecturinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.__________________IBillyhotdaywithoutrainforalongtimekitchenwoodsmakelunch,seeBilly…followhimcuriouswalktowards…cuppedwaterfeedbabydeersufferingfromthirstandheat一.要素分析PlotStorybeginningdevelopmentclimax(Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpeduptorunbacktothehouse.)ending(Insteadoflecturinghimlikehisfather,Idecidedtohelphim.

)Oneofthehottestdaysofthedryseason，IsawBillywalktowardsthewoods.IfollowedBillyandsawhowBillyovercomedifficultytofeedwatertobabydeer.二.情节分析WhatdidBillyrunbacktothehouse?Whathappenednext?Howdidhisfatherlecturehim?HowdidBillyfeel?CentralconflictHowdidIcomfortandhelpBilly?What'sthefinalending?Diditrainintheend?Why?Para.When&WhereWhoWhat/howWhyPara4Para.4Whenthewaterwasgone,Billyjumpe