高考英语一轮复习读后续写脱险类续写讲义

读后续写专题1脱险类（讲义）读后续写中会遇到描写森林迷路、地震、水灾、火灾等内容的故事，如果涉及到对生命造成一定威胁的情节，我们就把这类文章归为“脱险型”。在近年高考真题中，如2023年浙江卷1月蜂鸟脱困；2020年浙江卷1月遇到北极熊；2018年浙江卷6月森林遇险。如何续写好此类文章呢？清代袁枚《随园诗话》中说过，“文似看山不喜平”，就提出过写文章好比观赏山峰那样，不喜欢平坦，喜欢起伏。而读后续写中，情节的跌宕起伏就是一种极好的提升文章整体水平的手法。这种转折即由“负”变“正”；或由“正”变“负”。最终体现正能量的结局，就是由“正”变“负”。【写作步骤】一恶劣环境来铺垫Thewaterwasdeepandrunningfastfromabigrainstormthenightbefore.前天晚上下了一场大暴雨，水又深又急。Thewatertwistedandturnedhim,scrapinghimagainsttherocksashewascarriedalong.Watergushedintohismouthanduphisnose.水流不停地扭动着他，旋转着他，把他蹭在岩石上。水灌进他的嘴里，没过了他的鼻子。3.What'sworse,hedidn'thaveanyfoodorwaterwithhim,letalonehiscellphoneorothersupplies.更糟糕的是，他没有任何食物和水，更不要说他的和其他日用品。4.Theskyisovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds.天空阴沉，乌云密布。5.Theicywindstartedhowling,stingingmyface.寒风开始咆哮，刺痛了我的脸。6.Thewindwashowlingandthewavessmackedrepeatedlyagainstherface.风在呼啸着，海浪不停地拍打着她的脸。7.Butthen,asIlookedinthedistance,Idiscoveredaseriesofthreeorfourbigwavesheadingtowardstheshore.但后来，当我往远处看时，我发现有三四个大浪正在冲向海岸。8.Itswayedviolentlyinastrongwind.Itsroadwaywasdamagedbyvehicles.Itsaccesswasblockedbymanypeople.它在强风中剧烈摇晃。车辆损坏了道路。许多人堵住了通道。9.Theangrywavescrashedagainstthesideoftheboat,withwatersplashinghereandthere.愤怒的海浪拍打向船的一侧，水到处飞溅。二心理感受来烘托Anominousthoughtcrossedhismind:I’mgoingtodieuphere.一个不祥的念头掠过他的脑海：我要死在这了。Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywholebody.看着浩瀚的大海，我感到一种恐惧感掠过我的全身。Saltstingingmyeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.盐刺痛了我的眼睛，我几乎不知道我能坚持多久。4.Grief

esinwaves.悲伤如潮水一般涌来。5.Withapoundingheartandcold,moistpalms,Ifeltfaint.最后一句话像一颗子弹击中了我的心。6.Afraidandmerelydesperate,sherushedtowardshim.她害怕而绝望，向他冲去。三外貌神态来烘托Hearingthebadnews,Mary

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myface.我痛苦地抽泣着，尝到脸上流下泪水咸咸的味道。4.Shecalmeddowntokeeptherhymeofbreathingsothatshecouldbreatheevenly.她平静下来，保持呼吸的韵律，以便能够均匀地呼吸。5.I

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我回头瞟了一眼以确保没有人跟踪我。四谋篇布局有起伏Ultimately,wewereback,safeandsound.最终，我们又回来了，安然无恙。Wejumpedintothewarmvehicleandtheforesterdroveustotherangerstation,whereweweregivenclothesandwereabletocallourparents.我们跳上了温暖的车，森林管理员开车把我们送到护林员站，在那里我们得到了衣服，并可以打给我们的父母。Suddenlyitoccurredtousthatwecouldkeeptothetracktoguideusback.Butitwasgettingdarkeranddarker,thusmakingitincreasinglydifficultforustomakeouttheroad.突然我们想到我们可以坚持小路引导我们回去。但天色越来越暗，使我们走道路越来越困难。五万能升华来点睛脱险类的文章有一个万能的表达“这是一次难忘的经历”。万能升华1：Thatdaywassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemoryforever.句意：那天是如此难忘，它将永远留在我的记忆。遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历，想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。本句中使用了so...that的句式结构：如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词，表示“无法忘记的”。万能升华2：Itwasthisuniqueexperiencethatmademeunderstandwhateverdifficultywearefacedwith,wemustn’tgiveupourhope.句意：正是这种独特的经历让我明白了我们所面临的任何困难，我们都不能放弃希望。本句为复合句，运用强调句itwas...that...、定语从句that...、宾语从句whatever...，属于高级句式。万能升华3：Aslongaswedon’tgiveuphopeandmakeeveryefforttoovereallthedifficulties,wewillsurelymakeasuccesssoonerorlater.句意：只要我们不放弃希望，不尽一切努力克服一切困难，我们迟早一定会取得成功的。本句是复合句。Aslongas引导状语从句，且句子运用较多短语如makeasuccess,soonorlater等。万能升华4：OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatcanconquerwhateverdifficultycameintheway.句意：直到那时，我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。【真题感悟】（2020年浙江卷6月）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbearslikeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthoughhejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。【答案】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp,thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn’tlongbeforeheeatupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.“Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescenewewererobbedbyapolarbear.【分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为“北极熊之都”的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊跟着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料它“不破篱笆誓不归”。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，不料这使熊变得更加暴躁，在千钧一发之际直升机及时赶到，他们得救了的故事。【详解】1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“几分钟后，熊返回了我们的营地。”可知，第一段可描写作者夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在此过程中的紧张害怕。由第二段首句内容“就在那时，直升机赶到了。”可知，第二段可描写作者夫妻二人获救时的心情。续写线索：熊返回营地——紧张害怕——用面包攻击——直升机赶到——快速登上飞机——熊把篱笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的画面词汇激活行为类①激怒：anger/provoke/enrage②抓起：grab/snatchup③拿出：takeout/fetchout情绪类①疯狂的：mad/crazy②兴奋的：excited/thrilled【点睛】[高分句型1]thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly.（for引导的原因状语从句）[高分句型2]Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.（现在分词作状语）[高分句型3]

Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.(once引导时间状语从句和形容词作状语)脱险类读后续写素材积累思路：求助帮助感激升华自救：Itookadeepbreathandstayedcalm,thinkinghowtosavemyselfoutofthedanger.Later,Icallanemergencyphone.Atthesametime,Isparednoeffortstoyellsoastoattractothers’attentiontoofferhelp.包扎伤口：dress/bindupawoundStaycalm.Shoutforhelp.Callanemergencynumber.Placeburnsundercoolrunningwater.Drytheburntareagentlywithacleancloth.Covertheburntareawithaloosecleancloth.他救:Heimmediately

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last.包扎伤口：dress/bindupawound:ThepoorchildnevercriedorprotestedwhenIwasdressingherwounds.施救者和被救者：Rescuersfoundvictimstrappedseveralfeetunderground.

营救人员发现有受难者