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读后续写讲评教育、亲子互动类(thealbum)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasalazySundaymorning,thetypeofdaythatgettingoutofbedrequiresaneffort.WhenMarilynandIenteredthekitchen,Loriwasalreadyatthetabledoingherhomework.Seeingusing,she,suddenly,stoodandfacedme,"WhyaretheremorepicturesofLisathanthereareofme?"sheasked.Lisaisourolderdaughter.Istaredback,notunderstandingthequestion.Loriturnedandlefttheroom.Caughtoffguardbythequestion,IlookedatMarilyn."AretheremorepicturesofLisathanofLori?"Marilynshruggedandraisedhereyebrowsinamotionofpuzzlement."AreyouawarethattherearemorepicturesofLisathanLori?"Iadded.Marilynsaid,"I’venevercountedthem.Idon'tknow."Marilyn'sanswerwasthesameasmythoughts,"Ihadn'trealizedthattherewasanysignificantdifference.NowwhywouldLoriasksuchaquestion?"Iasked.Marilynjustshookherheadandstaredbackatme.Afterafewminutesofthoughtshesaid,"WhenLisawasborn,youweretakingphotographs.Youhardlywentanywherewithoutacamera.WhenLoriwasborn,youwereinvolvedincoloredslides(幻灯片).TheremustbehundredsofslidesofLorisomewhereinthehousethatLorihasneverseenordoesn’tremember."AfterdigestingMarilyn’sremarks,Iagreed."AfterLorileaves,we'lllookforthoseslides.Whoknows,wemayfindmoreslidesofLorithanpicturesofLisa,"Ijoked.Laterthatafternoon,whenwewerealone,wewentintothebasementwherewehadstoredtheboxesthatwehadbroughtfromourprevioushome.Itwasn'tlongbeforewediscoveredthetraysofslides,andfortherestoftheafternoonwelookedateachtray,pointingoutthoseslidesthathighlightedLori."Whatareyougoingtodo?"Marilynasked."It’sherbirthdayinafewweeks,"Isaid,"We'llselectaboutonehundredslideswithLoriandconvertthemintopictures,putthemintoanalbumandgivetoherasagift.Idon'tknowifthealbumwillanswerherquestion,butatleastshe'llknowthatwecareenoughtofindherananswer."注意:1.续写字数应为150左右。2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Overthenextfewdays,wesecretlywentthroughallourslides._________________________OnNovember24,beforeleavingforwork,Iopenedherdoorandslippedthealbuminside.___________________________________________________________________________Learningobjectives:Bytheendofthisperiod,studentsareexpectedto1.developagoodhabitofimprovingtheirworksafterwritingandhavetheabilitytodoit.2.haveabetterunderstandingofthegivenmaterialbyexploringthestory,thetheme,andthepossibleending.3.buildamorereasonableplotbyfocusingonthekeyinformationandclues.4.developtheabilitytogiveanobjectiveassessmentoftheirwritingbygettingsomeinformationaboutgradingcriteria5.Knowhowtoreviseandpolishuptheirwritingbygraspingsomepracticalskills.LeadinQ1.Howmuchtimedoyouspendoncontinuationwritingintheexam?Q2.Whatdoyouusuallydoafterwriting?Q3.Whatexactlyshouldwedoafterwriting?Firstdraft__________________________________________FinaldraftStep1Reread(Tip1圈划关键信息和重要情节,预测结局)ReadforthestoryReadforthethemeReadfortheending/echoWhoWhenWhereWhatThemeEnding/EchoStep2Rethink(Tip2根据提示句的关键词确定续写主要情节,使用正推+反推法列出简纲)Thinkabouttheplot(所见、所闻、所说、所做)Thinkabouttheemotion(所思所想)Para1:Overthenextfewdays,wesecretlywentthroughallofourslides.时间,地点,人物,人称情节(正推+反推)情感Para2:OnNovember24,beforeleavingforwork,Iopenedherdoorandslippedthealbuminside.时间,地点,人物,人称情节(正推)情感Step3Reflect(Tip3checklist自评/互评)评分要点:1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度2)内容、语法结构、词汇的丰富性和准确性3)上下文和语句间的连贯性考查:阅读(读懂原文)、逻辑思维(情节设计)、写作能力(词汇句式)学生初稿Para1.Overthenextfewdays,wesecretlywentthroughallourslides.Wechosemanypiecesofslidesandconvertedthemintoalotsofdelicatepictures.InordertopreventusfrombeingfoundbyLori,wedidthemwhileLoriwassleeping.Ihopedthatitcanbeabigsurprise.Icautiouslyputthesedelicatepicturesintoanalbumandmakepreparationsforherbirthdayparty.Iinvitedherfriendsandtheywerealsowillingtohelpus.Everythingwasalready.Assessment:1)________________2)_________________3)___________________Para2.OnNovember24,beforeleavingforwork,Iopenedherdoorandslippedthealbuminside.Loriwasstillsleeping.ThenIsilentlyleftherroomandexceptedhowshewouldthink.WhenIcamehome,LorirantomeandgavemeIbighugandsaidtomehappily.“Mum,nowIhavemorepicturesandevenoverLisa.Iamveryhappy.Thanksmum.”Iwasalsoveryhappyandsaidtoher“Now,wecanstartyourbirthdaypartyandeatcakes.”Loriwasexcitedandjumpedaroundme.Assessment:1)________________2)_________________3)___________________Step4ReviseTips1.词汇和句型尽量不重复2.增加形容词和副词3.加入一些连词,增强连贯性4.使用定语从句和非谓语动词5.增加细节描写(所见、所闻、所说、所做、所想)微技能:1.心理描写我开心Iamhappy.(换主语)Asenseofdelight/happinessseizedme.(加并列)Asenseofdelightandexcitementseizedme.(加形容词/副词)Instantly,astrongsenseofdelightandexcitementseizedme.2.动作描写hugsb/givesbahug/throwone’sarmsaroundsbpatsbontheback/shoulder/headgently3.由“看/听/想”到动作/情绪/思绪看到面前可爱的小狗,男孩的脸上立刻焕发光彩。Seeingthecutedoginfront,theman’sfacelitupimmediately.听到我的话,他兴奋地跳了起来,点头同意。Atmywords,hejumpedtohisfeetwithexcitement.听到久违的笑声,我感到一股暖流涌上心头。Hearingthefamiliarlaughter,Ifeltasurgeofwarmthwellingupinmyheart.一想到这里,他决定改邪归正,把归还给失主。Atthethoughtofthis,hewasdeterminedtomendhiswaysandreturnittotheowner.修改润色Para1.Overthenextfewdays,wesecretlywentthroughallourslides.Wechosemanypiecesofslidesandconvertedthemintodelicatepictures,__________remindedusofthe__________dayswithour______daughter(定从,形容词).Atthatmoment,__________________________________________________.(心理描写)InordertoavoidbeingdiscoveredbyLori,wedidthesewhileLoriwassleeping,________thatitcanbeabigsurpriseforher(非谓语).________(连词)allthepictures_________cautiously_________intothealbum,everythingwasready.(被动)Para2.OnNovember24,beforeleavingforwork,Iopenedherdoorandslippedthealbuminside.Ileftherroomsilently,______________howshewouldreactafterfindingthealbum(非谓语).WhenIcamehomeafterwork,Loriran__________(副词)tomeandgavemeabighug,_______________inadelightedtone,“Dad,Iloveyou!Thankyousomuchforeverythingyouhavedoneforme!”Upon__________________whatshesaid,I________________________________(动作描写)andletoutasighofrelief.Thenweopenedthethickalbumwhileenjoyingthedeliciouscake,laughter_________________thewholeroom.佳作赏析para1.Overthenextfewdays,wesecretlywentthroughallofourslides.WhilepickingouttheonesofLori,thesweetmemoriesfloodedback,remindingusofthehappylifewithourlovelydaughter.Atthatmoment,awaveofhappinessrippledovermyheart,tearsstreamingdownmyface.AfterthecarefulselectionMarilynhadthenconvertedintophotos.Itwasnotlongbeforethephotoswerereturnedandthenweplacedthemintoanalbum.Inaddition,Iattachedabirthdaycardtoitwiththeintentionoftellingherhowimportantsheistous.WithLori’sbirthdayapproaching,MarilynandIdecidedtohideituntilherbirthdayandgiveherabigsurprise.para2.OnNovember24,beforeleavingforwork,Iopenedherdoorandslippedthealbuminside.Afteraday’stiringwork,Idraggedmyfeetbackhome.Uponseeingmeback,Lorirushedstraighttowardsmeandthrewherarmsaroundme,sobbing.Then,atinyvoicecamefromher,“Iloveyou,Daddy.I’msorrytohavemisunderstoodyou.”Ihuggedhertightlyandpattedherontheback,sayinginafortingtone,“It’sOK,sweetheart.YouknowMommyandIloveyoutoo.”ItwasthenthatIrealizedIhadgottheanswerandourmessageoflovehadbeenreceived.
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