2011-2012福州市高三毕业班质检英语作文分析.ppt

2012年福州市高三毕业班质量检 查英语作文各个档次例卷 第六部分： 书面表达(满分25分) 请根据下列两幅图用英语写一篇短文，短 文内容须包括以下几个要点： 妈妈阻止儿子去扶摔倒的女孩； 儿子对于倒了的油瓶置之不理。 写作时要有适当发挥，语言连贯，要写 出妈妈的惊诧，还要写出你对此幅漫画的 感受和想法。 as can be seen in this cartoon. one day, a mother and her son were taking a walk when they saw a little girl fall over. the boy wanted to help her up but his mother stopped him and said, “dont do that, otherwise others will think it was you who knocked her down.” a few days later, when she got home, the mother was shocked at seeing her son just leave the fallen oil bottle lying on the ground. she asked him why he didnt put it in place, but the boy talked back, “if i had straightened the bottle up, you would have thought that i did it.” i disagree with what the mother did in the story. i think parents should not only care for their childrens health, but their minds. they should let their children know its a pleasure to help others who are in trouble. 范文一 as can be seen from the cartoon, it is a story about a bad example of family education. in the first picture, a boy was trying to help a girl who fell over on the ground while his mom persuaded him not to do so, saying “dont do that, otherwise others would think it was you who knocked her down”. in the second picture, the boy was seen sitting leisurely with an oil bottle lying on the ground besides his feet. mom was greatly shocked by the explanation from the boy: “if i had lifted the oil bottle, you would have thought it was me who brought it down.” i disagree with what the mother did in the story. as we all know, parents are the first teachers. i think parents should not only care for their childrens health, but their minds. they should set a good example to their children and let their children know its a pleasure to help others who are in trouble. 月考英语书面表达范文二 不得分：（0分） 未能传达给读者仟何信息：内容太少， 无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关 或所写内容无法看清。 注：2012年考纲新精神-抄录无关内容不给 同情分。 例一： 例二： 第一档(差)：(1-5分) 1. 未完成试题规定的任务。 2. 明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容， 原因可能是未理解试题要求。 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对 写作内容的理解。 5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。 6. 信息未能传达给读者。 例三：（4分，语法错误多，内容遗漏） 例四：（3分，内容遗漏明显） 第二档(较差)：(6-10分) 1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。 2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关 内容。 3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写 作内容的理解。 5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。 6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。 例五：只写了“原因”，遗漏了“措施”，10分 例六：未完成写作任务，遗漏内容，8分 第三档(适当)：(11-15分) 1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 。 4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不 影响理解。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内 容连贯。 6. 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。 例七：（13分，语法错误） 例八：内容遗漏 第四档(好)：(16-20分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主 要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 。 6. 达到了预期的写作目的。 例九： 例十： 第五档(很好)；(21-25分) 1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 2. 覆盖所有内容要点。 3. 应用了