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苏教版三年级语文上册,习作3,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,鼠小弟总是不打招呼就搬走了刚采来的草莓，啃坏了可爱的布娃娃，还把家里新买的皮鞋咬出个洞来所以，猫先生一直想找它谈一谈。 这一天，它们相遇了,习作内容,观察图片，看看它们是怎样遇见的。想一想，它们会谈些什么呢？接下来又会发生什么故事呢？试着动笔 写下来。写好了跟同学 交换着读一读，看谁的 故事更精彩。,写法指导,第一步：审题 写一个关于猫与鼠的故事。 第二步：立意 警告那些违法犯罪的人（鼠小弟），并用德才兼备的人（猫先生）来改造他们。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,第三步：选材 根据题目给出的材料进行联想。 第四步：思路（以范文为例）,猫先生和鼠小弟,开头：罗列鼠小弟的“罪行”。,中间：二者的相遇、对话，猫先生两抓两放鼠小弟。,结尾：阐述道理，要做自食其力、知错就改的人。,第五步：方法 对话描写、动作描写、心理描写。,猫先生和鼠小弟,鼠小弟总是不打招呼就搬走了刚采来的草莓，啃坏了可爱的布娃娃，还把家里新买的皮鞋咬出个洞来所以，猫先生一直想找它谈一谈。 这一天，它们相遇了“吱吱，吱吱”鼠小弟又跑到桌子上吃草莓，“啊！好香甜的草莓！又大又,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,红的草莓。”它咂咂嘴，正要咬第二口的时候，突然发现一只猫蹲在沙发的靠背上，两只碧绿的眼睛紧紧地盯着它，一动也不动。“这只老猫，干嘛这样盯着我？又老又笨的猫。”鼠小弟想着，又自顾自地吃草莓了，理都不理猫先生。,语言、动作、心理描写，写猫和鼠相遇的情景。,“喵！鼠小弟，你不能偷吃主人,的草莓！你还咬坏他们的布娃娃和皮鞋。你犯罪了，你最好停止这种违法的行为，主人和我都会原谅你的。否则，我会把你处死，把你吃掉！”猫先生严厉地说。,猫警告鼠不要干坏事。,“你下来，咱们比一比跑步吧。”鼠小弟轻蔑地说。,猫和鼠比赛跑步（动作描写）。,“好！一、二、三，开始！”猫先生话音刚落，鼠小弟就先一步跳到地上，迅速地跑出了门外。猫先生在后面拼命追赶。“喵！”追了一会，猫先生就赶上了鼠小弟，往前一扑，就把它抓住了。“放了我吧，我再也不敢了，”鼠小弟眼泪汪汪的，吓得浑身发抖，“求求猫大哥了。”,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,猫中计，放了鼠。,“好，放了你，你再也不能干坏事了。”于是猫先生松开了爪子。鼠小弟一看，马上跑掉了。“这只猫真笨，”它偷偷笑了，“回去搬点草莓就回家吧。”它心里想。于是趁猫先生不注意，飞奔回桌子上搬草莓去了。,“喵！”正在鼠小弟得意扬扬地搬草莓的时候，猫先生又把它抓个正着，,“嗷！”它狠狠地把鼠小弟咬了一口，痛得鼠小弟吱吱乱叫，“这回真的不行了，这只老猫不是那么好欺负的，还是到山上去采野果子回家吃吧。还是要辛勤劳动，不能走邪路。”“猫大哥，我再也不敢了。”猫先生就把鼠小弟放了。,猫再次抓放鼠，并用道德感化鼠，让它改邪归正。,后来，鼠小弟真的改邪归正，成了一位自食其力的好公民。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,总评：这篇习作运用了语言、动作、神态、心理描写，生动地描写了鼠小弟与猫先生相遇、对话、比赛、被抓被放的整个过程。鼠小弟的