段落的展开如何做到论述的具体和充分.ppt

段落的展开-如何做到论述的具体和充分,以2011年6月四级作文online shopping为例,范文一,Nowadays with the ever rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology , shopping on the internet has been a fashion especially among the youngsters. Online shopping has made our daily life more convenient and comfortable. For example , shopping on the internet can save students a great deal of time on the way between home and store, so they would be able to concentrate more time and energy on their academic work. The internet has shorten the distance between manufacturers and consumers and thus we can even buy goods in other countries .On the other hand , lack of the face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. What s more， the delivery will increase the risk of items damage. In my opinion, shopping on the internet is a irreversible trend. More and more people will be accustomed to it. It will be much more popular in the near future. And at the same time we should take some measures to make it perfect.,具体而充分地展开段落-第1段,Nowadays with the ever rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology , shopping on the internet has been a fashion especially among the youngsters. 在现象陈述中，捎带原因分析（information technology)因果分析法 提及了网购的主要人群，即青少年。举例法 从general 到specific,具体而充分地展开段落-第2段,Online shopping has made our daily life more convenient and comfortable. For example , shopping on the internet can save students a great deal of time on the way between home and store, so they would be able to concentrate more time and energy on their academic work. The internet has shorten the distance between manufacturers and consumers and thus we can even buy goods in other countries .On the other hand , lack of the face to face deal makes online shopping less reliable and trustworthy. What s more， the delivery will increase the risk of items damage. 主题句之后，用举例法（学生网购节省时间专注于课业）来充分论述； 自然过渡到第二种具体的网购便利：跨国网购 话题转向网购的不利之处，仍然有二。两者都很简练，但不失具体（没有当面交易的保障，投送过程中的货物损坏） 另，几个关联词使 上下文无论是递进、转折，还是举例都过渡自然，衔接得当 从general 到specific,具体而充分地展开段落-第3段,In my opinion, shopping on the internet is a irreversible trend. More and more people will be accustomed to it. It will be much more popular in the near future. And at the same time we should take some measures to make it perfect. 结尾：个人观点的陈述是温和中立型-肯定其存在的合理性，同时提出需要改进的地方。 作为结尾，概括性强一点会有一定的高度。 不可抵挡的趋势，会更加广为接受 采取措施使其更加完善其缺点。（不需要就具体的措施展开论述，因为这已经不是文章的主体部分） 需要补充的是，虽然结尾处概括性较强，但内容仍然饱和，不是干巴巴地总结复述前文，也不是空洞地喊口号。,范文二,Today, with the rapid development in electronic commerce, business are attempting to gain great popularity by using online shopping to interact with customers. According to Jack Ma, founder and CEO of Alibaba Group, A serves more than 70 million members from more than 250 countries and territories. In fact, both online shopping and traditional shopping have some advantages and disadvantages. To begin with, online shopping is very convenient for shopping and allows for a vast selection of goods to be at your fingertips. You dont have to worry about the crowds in the mall, finding for a parking spot, and stuck in a traffic jam. Besides, with the online tools that enable goods comparison, you can compare prices and qualities to make a better decision with less effort. However, though online shopping is 24/7 available, a recent study has found that privacy was still the top concern of people while security ranked bottom. Furthermore, people are worried that the goods wont be what they have expected by viewing online. It would be inconvenient if the size or colour didnt fit, the consumers had to return it. Some goods are not returnable. Some are used or damaged when they are shipped. In conclusion, although there are advantages of online shopping, there also some negative concern of online shopping. Sellers need to make improvements of the online shops with consideration on consumers perspective. By doing so, online shopping will gain popularity among people and will become widely to benefit sellers, buyers, and society.,具体而充分地展开段落-第1段,Today, with the rapid development in electronic commerce, business are attempting to gain great popularity by using online shopping to interact with customers. According to Jack Ma, founder and CEO of Alibaba Group, A serves more than 70 million members from more than 250 countries and territories. 第一段陈述现象，别开生面，从商家而非消费者的角度描述普遍网购现象。 使用的权威数据引证法，进行具体描述 从general 到specific,具体而充分地展开段落-第2段（1）,In fact, both online shopping and traditional shopping have some advantages and disadvantages. To begin with, online shopping is very convenient for shopping and allows for a vast selection of goods to be at your fingertips. You dont have to worry about the crowds in the mall, finding for a parking spot, and stuck in a traffic jam. Besides, with the online tools that enable goods comparison, you can compare prices and qualities to make a better decision with less effort. 主题句之后，用两个过渡词把网购的三个相关优点联系起来（convenience，vast selection和goods comparison） 对各个优点都进行了较为具体的阐述 从general 到specific,具体而充分地展开段落-第2段（2）,However, though online shopping is 24/7 available, a recent study has found that privacy was still the top concern of people while security ranked bottom. Furthermore, people are worried that the goods wont be what they have expected by viewing online. It would be inconvenient if the size or colour didnt fit, the consumers had to return it. Some goods are not returnable. Some are used or damaged when they are shipped. However使话题转向缺点，三个缺点（隐私、安全和所见非所得）分成两部分，简述前两个缺点，选择第三个进行了具体的论述（尺寸颜色不符要求，退货的麻烦