2012年湖北高考英语作文评析及今后教学建议.ppt

2008年湖北高考英语作文 试题评析及今后教学建议,08年湖北高考英语作文试题评析 08年湖北高考英语作文试题及评价 08年湖北高考英语学科作文评卷情况 学生答题常见错误 今后高中英语教学之我见,高考作文试题 书面表达(满分25分) 假设你是卜曼宜,你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机.因有质量问题,要求该公司更换.请根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件. 1.问题: 手机不响铃,不能发短信; 该产品已售完,无法更换; 型号新,无配件,无法维修. 2.要求: 公司应尽快予以更换. 注意:1.词数为100左右; 2.参考词汇: 配件 3.电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好.(不计入你所写词数) 4.已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡.,评分原则,本题总分为25分,按5个档次给分. 评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分.由于本次写作内容已明确给出，因此评分档次的确定应侧重于语言的表达. 词数少于80和多于120的,从总分中减去2分. 评分时,应注意的主要内容为:内容要点,应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性,上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英,美拼写及词汇均可接受。 如书写较差,以至影响交际,将分数降低一个档次.,Possible version,Dear Sir, I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan,P.R.China. Ten days after that,it didnt ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller,but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. Later I went to the repairman. He said since it was a new model in China,it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that. How can I wait that long? Therefore, I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely yours,档次的给分范围和要求,第五档(很好):(21-25分) 要点完整，表达清楚，无重大语法错误.完全完成了试题规定的任务. -覆盖所有内容要点. -应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 -语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力. -有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑. 完全达到了预期的写作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages. This really brings me a lot of troubles. So I contacted with your company. But the staff told me that the products had been sold out so they couldnt change a new one for me. They felt sorry for me and suggested me to have it repaired. Unfortunately,the type of the mobile phone is so new that the repairman said he couldnt solve the problem as there was no spare part for it. Hearing that,I lost my last hope. So now Im writing to you hoping that you can help me. Please change a new one for me as soon as possible.,第四档(好)(16-20分)表达基本清楚,缺少个别要点,有些语法错误.完成了试题规定的任务.,-覆盖主要内容. -应用的语法结构或词汇能基本满足任务的要求. -语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致. -应用简单的词句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。 达到了预期的写作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone has some problem on its quality. First,the phone which I bought from you cant ring and I cant use it to write a message,either. Second,the products have been sold out that I cant change for another one. Last but not least,the style is new and dont have spare part, so I cant have it repaired. Im so worried because Im waiting to use it. So I hope that the company can change a new one for me as soon as possible. Thats all what I want to say. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon!,第三档(适当)(11-15分) 尚能表达,缺少多个要点，语法错误较多.基本完成了试题规定的任务.,- 基本覆盖主要内容. -应用的语法结构或词汇能基本满足任务的要求. -有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解. -应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯. 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的.,Range finders,I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help.,第二档(较差)(6-10分) 表达含糊不清,不能成篇. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务.,-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容. -语法结构单调，词汇项目有限. -有较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解. -较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,Range finders,But this mobile phone has some troubles. The mobile phone hasnt voice when calling. And it doesnt make notes to others. I think I cant use the mobile phone. So I want to have a new one. But in WuhansTele Mall, this size mobile phone have sold out. They havent one to give me. And this size is new, the company havent spare part to repair the mobile phone. So I want your company can give a good mobile phone soon. I think yur company should considerate us. I only want a good one. Thanks.,第一档(差): (1-5分) 动了笔,仅罗列了不成句的单词. 未完成试题规定的任务.,-明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求. -语言支离破碎,有很多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解 -缺乏语句间的连接成分，结构紊乱,内容不连贯. 信息未能传达给读者. 0分 未能传达给读者任何信息: 内容太少，无法评判;写的内容均与所要求内容无关.,Range finders,When the mobile phone has buy over. Then I know the mobile phone cant open the music and cant write the mail. But the mobile phone is very new. So no spare part can be it make good. And this mobile phone is buy over.We cant give people a new and good one. So,please your consideration be kuick make good this mobile phone and give the mobile phone(new good) to me.,08年湖北高考英语作文试题评析,题材贴近生活,有时代气息 日常生活中最常见的交流工具手机;现代科学技术的代名词 手机出现故障的问题也是我们经常遇到的事情. 高一课本Unit9 Technology这一单元的课文 “life on the go”,就是一篇关于手机的文章. 从题材的选材来看，非常生活化,具有时代鲜明特征. 但是也在某种程度上限制了部分学生.,要点提示得当,难度适中，考生有话可说 作为提纲式作文, 本次作文要点提示简练,全面,既给了学生充分发挥的空间,也控制了一定范围,从而达到既考察学生应用语言能力的目的,也从客观上保证了学生正常水平的发挥.,能够较全面地考察考生应用语言的能力 出题者试图通过日常生活中的普通事件来考察考生综合运用语言的能力. 比如 要点1 “手机不响铃,不能发短信”, 考生可以用The mobile phone cant ring or send messages的一般句式,也可用The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages或者The mobile phone cant ring,nor can it send messages(倒装句句式)等高级句式.,要点2 “该产品已售完,无法更换”, 考生可以用The new type of it has been sold out,so they cant change a new one for me ;也可用The model has been sold out,as a consequence,its impossible for them to change me a new one或者The model has been sold out, which makes it difficult for me to have a new one或者The fact that the model has been sold out makes me unable to change it等等。,要点3 “型号新,无配件,无法维修”。 可以用Since its a new model,and therere no spare parts,I cant get it repaired 这一基本句式；也可用So new is its type without any spare parts that I cant get it repaired或者With its new type and no spare parts left,I find it hard to have it repaired或者Due to its new model with no spare parts,I have no access to its repair等等.,考生答题常见错误,1.单词拼写错误 考生由于基础不扎实，或记忆不准确，或临场心理紧张等原因造成单词的拼写错误。,2.时态混乱,语态模糊.,不少考生在答题时不注意动词时态前后的相互照应,现在时态,过去时态,完成时态混用,3.一些词汇尤其是动词的不准确的应用 比如They suggest me to have it repaired（对suggest这一动词用法错误）；又如I hope you to take some measures to fix it（对hope to do 的错误运用）；或者So I contacted with your company（对contact的错误用法),4.Chinglish的表达 如 “手机不响铃,不能发短信;”有的考生译为 “The mobile phone not ring,and send message”;又如 “该产品已售完,无法更换;”有的考生译为 “The product sold over,cant change”又如 “型号新,无配件,无法维修.”有的考生译为 “The type is new,no spare part,cant repair”,5.表达平淡 更多的考生是直译了汉语提示,没有尝试用高级词汇或者高级语法表达.比如这样一篇作文: I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help. 如果词汇和语法结构不够严谨出了差错,得分就会更低.,小议对今后高中英语教学指导,夯实语法基础，尤其是中英文语言差异明显的语法项目。 高考英语作文是对考生在整个高中阶段所学英语知识的综合应用能力的考察.任何一门语言,离不开字,词,句,篇,以及把它们串连在一起的基础语法. 我们是在不知不觉中充分利用语境掌握了母语的基本规则,并在以后的学习中逐渐强化而达到运用自如的境地;而英语作为一门外语，在没有这种自然语境的情况下，更多地应是通过日常教学达到学习,理解,掌握并运用的目的.,尤其是中英文语言对比差异明显的语法项目如动词被动语态的理解和运用仍是大多学生学习英语中的壁垒.比如这样的完成句子: 1.Finally,the people in this country began to realise measures should be taken to protect the environment.(要采取措施保护环境).不少学生译为take measures to protect the environment; 2.It made the people present at the meeting disappointed that no agreement was reached (会议没有达成一致意见).学生根据汉语译为the meeting didnt reach an agreement.这都是受母语干扰引起的.,再就是英语中一些动词如seated, dressed, located, lost等,我们常用be seated （表示“坐着”）be dressed（表示“穿着）” be located（表示“坐落于”） be lost（表示“迷失”）.而这种动词在对应的中文中几乎是不可理喻的.,背诵美文,美句,增强英语语感 我们现在所学的课文中不乏好句: 1. On the third day I was struggling through stormy weather and during the next week the wind grew stronger and I found myself spending a whole day in my tent.(Senior Book1B Unit17);,2. Seconds count in an emergency,and knowing what to do can mean the difference between life and death. (Senior Book 2A Unit8); 3. A better understanding of the environment is necessary,as is the willingness to act.(Senior Book 2A Unit9); 4. By looking at a problem in as many ways as possible,creative thinkers can find solutions that would otherwise remain invisible.(Senior Book 2B Unit18);,其次，也可以在课外精选一些短小精悍的文章有步骤有计划地让学生背诵.比如新概念英语第二册中就有不少原汁原味的