英语书面表达的润色.ppt

英语书面表达的润色,句式的多样 选词特色 关联词的使用 合理的想象和发挥,高考英语科考试说明中第五档（2125分）的给分范围和要求,覆盖所有内容要点； 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇； 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽量使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言应用能力； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的。 全、准、顺 、雅,一、复杂多样的句式,复合句 倒装句 强调结构 非谓语 感叹句 虚拟语气 独立主格结构、反意问句、并列句、名言、警句等,2004年广州一模的书面表达为例,假设你是某中学生英文报的小记者，对中学生课外上网的利弊进行调查采访。以下是学生们对上网的看法。请你根据他们的观点写一篇简要的调查报告，并呼吁正确使用互联网。 使用互联网的益处1、资源丰富2、节省时间3、方便交流和沟通 使用互联网的弊端1、内容良莠不齐2、沉迷网络游戏会影响学业3、过多使用会影响健康,1各种复合句 1）Theres no doubt that the Internet does us good. 2) The majority of students believe that they benefit a lot from the Internet. 3) As is known to all, once addicted to the online games, the students no longer concentrate on their studies. 4) Helpful as the computer is, some still stick to the opinion that not everything on the internet is good for us students.,2. 倒装句 1) Never before could we be exposed to so much information with just a click. 2) Only with great care and under proper guidance will the students improve their studies and enjoy making new friends by surfing the internet. 3) With the increasing popularity and convenience that the internet brings, there arises the argument over its bad effects on teenagers. 4) Presented as follows is the result of a recent survey on how students view the Internet.,3. 强调结构 1) It is the internet that makes the world much smaller. 2) Isnt is the internet that provides people with a more convenient way of communication? 3) The internet does enable people to communicate with each other more easily and quickly.,4. 非谓语 1） We should try to make proper use of the computer, making it a good partner that benefits our life as well as our study. 2) Being absorbed in the games, students may have difficulty in controlling themselves, leaving their homework undone. 5. 感叹句 1) How hard some students find it to tear themselves away from computer games！ 2) How convenient it is to use the computer!,6. 虚拟语气 1）As more and more students stay up surfing the internet，it is high time that we discussed the problem 2) Without the internet, we would not have enjoyed our life so much. 3) Some people insist that teenagers be kept away from the internet.,二、选词特色(2004年广州一模),do sb good, do sb harm, have ones health damaged , leave ones homework undone, benefit, addicted to, concentrate on, be exposed to, under proper guidance, provide, enable, absorbed in, have difficulty in doing , tear oneself away from, be kept away from , make proper use of, stay up, act as a two-edge sword, teenagers, as follows等等。,三、关联词的使用,（1）表时间的：now, then, afterwards, soon, before long, shortly after that, minutes later, just now, just then, suddenly, immediately, the moment, etc. （2）表顺序及过程的：first(ly), first of all, second(ly), at first, then, next, at last, finally, etc. （3）表转折的：but, yet, and yet, instead, however, although, though, otherwise, or else, in spite of, etc.,（4）表结果的：thus, therefore, so, as a result, seeing that, luckily, (un)fortunately, etc. （5）表强调的：first of all, above all. indeed, surely, certainly, of course, after all, at least, at most, etc. （6）表并列的：and, also, as well, etc. （7）表递进的：besides, whats more, in addition, even, once more, what was worse, to make things worse, etc.,（8）表解释或说明的：in other words, that is, that is to say, namely, for example, actually, and so on, such as, personally, believe it or not, to tell you the truth, according to this, for this reason, etc. （9）表比较的：just like, just as, in the same way, more or less, on the contrary, on one hand, on the other hand, while, etc. （10）表总结的：finally, in conclusion, in a word, in general, generally speaking, in short, as you / we know, in the end, in all, etc.,2004年广州一模的书面表达可以用上以下的过渡性词语: whats more ( also, beside, in addition), worse still ( whats worse, to make things worse), however, therefore, as a result, on the other hand, on the contrary, generally speaking等待。,四、合理的想象和发挥,Last Sunday, our class organized some volunteer activities. Group One went to the Peoples Park to plant trees and water the flowers. Group Two went to the Bus Station to do some cleaning. Group Three went to the street to raise money for the Hope Project. Group Four went to the old peoples home to put on performances. Late in the afternoon we returned home，and we were happy.“流水帐”式，缺少“血”和“肉”。,Last Sunday, our class organized some volunteer activities, from which all of us learned a lot. Group One went to the park to plant trees and water the flowers to make it more beautiful. Group Two managed to give the Bus Station a spring cleaning. As a result, it took on a new look. Group Three headed for the street and helped to raise money for the Hope Project, so that more people in the poor areas can afford their schooling.,Group Four went to the old peoples home and presented wonderful performances, the aged laughing all the time, happier than ever. Late in the afternoon we returned home, worn out, but we were happy to have enjoyed a meaningful day.,关联词的使用练习,One day I was walking in the street. I saw a thief stealing a car near a house. I ran to the house. I wanted to tell its owner what was happening.Nobody was there. I decided to shout at the thief and stop him stealing the car. The thief got out of the car, seized me and threw me to the ground. I got badly injured, my head bleeding all the time. I struggled to stand up. I gave a phone call to the police station. The police turned up and caught the thief.,One day I was walking in the street when I saw a thief stealing a car near a house. Without hesitation, I ran to the house in order to tell its owner what was happening, but nobody was there. So I decided to shout at the thief and stop him stealing the car. Suddenly the thief got out of the car, seized me and threw me to the ground. At that time I got badly injured, my head bleeding all the time. I struggled to stand up and gave a phone call to the police station. Several minutes later the police turned up and caught the thief.,某报纸刊登有人化装行乞的照片,请你为此写篇评论,要点为: 1.假装残疾和无助是欺骗行为 2.行乞原因 3影响市容 4.政府应采取措施杜绝此类事件,要点分析及发挥：,看到这些图片感到震惊。 这些street beggar本来可以自食其力，却假装看起来贫穷、残疾、无助，与偷窃无异。他们想钱来得容易，怕辛苦。如果我们对他们有怜悯之心，正中其下怀，更多人效仿。 不顾自己尊严，被人歧视。有损城市现象。 政府应采取措施杜绝此类事件 ，帮助真正无助的人,选词与造句： 看到这些图片感到震惊。 shocked/a shock/shocking pictures 这些street b