考研英语写作B部分.ppt

考研作文,大作文,评分标准,A节应用文的评分侧重于信息点的覆盖和内容的组织、语言的准确性、格式和用语的恰当。可在文中使用提示语中的关键词，但使用其中的词组或句子则会被扣分。B节作文的评分重点在于内容的完整性、文章的组织连贯性、语法结构和词汇的多样性。高分作文A节(910分)、B节(1720分)的具体要求1很好地完成了试题规定的任务。2包含所有内容要点。3语法结构合理、词汇丰富。4语言自然流畅，语法错误极少。5有效采用多种衔接手法，文字连贯，层次清晰。6格式和用语恰当。,大纲要求,全国硕士研究生入学考试英语大纲要求考生在40分钟内完成160-200单词的英语大作文。所写的作文作应具备：1）单词拼写正确，标点使用正确，语法准确无误，用词合理恰当；2)作文结构合理，内容统一连贯，字数符合要求。,计分标准,第一档：2017分：内容切题，包括提纲的全部要点；表达清楚，文字连贯；句式有变化，句子结构和用词正确。文章长度符合要求（160-200单词）。第二档：1613分：内容切题，全部包括题目的要点；表达比较清楚，文字基本连贯；句式有一定变化，句子结构和用词无重大错误。文章长度符合要求（160-200单词）。第三档：1210分：内容切题，基本包括题目的要点；表达基本清楚；句子结构和用词有少量错误。文章长度符合要求（160-200单词）。,计分标准,第四档：95分：内容基本切题，基本包括题目的要点；语句可以理解，但有较多的句子结构和用词错误。文章长度基本符合要求（120-160单词）。第五档：41分：基本按题写作，但只有少数句子可以理解。第六档：0分：文不切题，语句混乱，无法理解。,命题规律,一、话题大入口小，命题主旨总是趋向社会积极面，和国家“和谐”话题相一致，二、对语言要求超过对社会常识要求,历年大作文题目,提纲作文,父母与孩子缺乏沟通1992电视广告1993交友1994希望工程1995健康1996,提纲作文分类,A.社会问题类1.表扬类：希望工程（1995）2.中性类：电视广告（1993）3.批判类：父母孩子缺乏沟通（1992）B.自身素质类：1.交友（1994）2.健康（1996）,图表、图画作文,吸烟与健康1997虚假承诺1998野生动物保护1999渔业资源耗竭2000爱心2001文化交流2002温室花朵经不起风雨2003终点又是起点2004,图表、图画作文,虐待老人2005追星2006缺乏信心2007合作2008网络对人际交往的影响2009文化“火锅”2010破坏自然环境2011,图表、图画作文分类,A.社会问题类1.表扬类1）文化交流（2002）2）文化“火锅”（2010）2.中性类1）追星（2006）2）网络对人际交往的影响（2009）,图表、图画作文分类,3.批判类1）吸烟与健康(1997)2)虚假广告（1998）3）野生动物保护（1999）4）渔业资源耗竭（2000）5）破坏自然环境（2011）,B.自身素质1.表扬类1）爱心（2001）2）终点又是起点（2004）3）合作（2008）2.批判类1）温室花朵经不起风雨（2003）2）虐待老人（2005）3）缺乏信心（2007）,高分必备三条件,1单词脱俗2句式多样3结构清晰,1、单词脱俗,如图所示AsisshowninthepictureWecanseefromthepictureShowdemonstratemanifestdepictillustratePicture-cartoon可加上一个词修饰showVividlysymbolicallyfiguratively,1、单词脱俗,引出主题1.Whatthepictureimplymaybe.Imply-reflectconveydeliver,1、单词脱俗,分析原因(很多原因可以解释这个问题)Thereasonsforthissocialphenomenonare.Manyfactorscontributeto/bringaboutthissocialphenomenon.Whatmayaccountforthissocialphenomenon?,1、单词脱俗,坏现象导致不好结果ItwillhaveabadimpactonBad-negative/undesirable/adverse/unfavorableImpact-consequence,1、单词脱俗,我的态度认为：Iholdtheopinionthatclingtotheidea,reckonIharbortheideathatItisuniversallyacknowledgedthat.”,1、单词脱俗,引出解决措施(为了解决这一问题)（是该做一些措施解决）1.Inordertosolvetheproblem1.Toeradicatetheproblem2.Weshouldtakesomemeasurestosolve.2.Itishightimeforustotakesomecountermeasures.Itisimperativeforustotakesomecountermeasures.,1、单词脱俗,要解决一个问题，各方的努力是必不可少的EffortfromdifferentaspectsisnecessaryAcombinedeffortisofnecessity,1、单词脱俗,对有害doharmto/beharmfultobedetrimentaltoBedisastrousto,1、单词脱俗,我们应该重视、强调WeshouldpayattentiontosomethingAttachimportancetolayemphasisonSomethingshouldbegiventoppriority.Itssymbolicmeaningsubtlyconveyedshouldbegivenprofoundconsideration.,1、单词脱俗,提高公众意识Weshouldimprovepeoplesawareness.Publicawarenessshouldbepopularizedandupgraded,1、单词脱俗,图画看似简单，却引起深深地思考Thepictureseemssimple,butitmakesustothinkdeeply.Simpleasitis,itbringaboutprofoundconsideration.,1、单词脱俗,越来越多的人、专家认为Moreandmorepeopleexperts.Individualexpertinincreasingnumber.,1、单词脱俗,解决措施分两个方面，对政府而言,就个人而言Asforthegovernment.,fortheindividual.Intermsofthegovernment,.,Whatsmore,B.,1、单词脱俗,SearchBesidesAspectCommonideaNecessary,GoogleAdditionallyRespectfacetSharedideaBeofnecessityindispensableinevitable,1、单词脱俗,VeryDisagreesthLeadtobeabletoimportant,OverwhelmingexceedinglyFrownonsthContributetoBecapableofSignificantbeofimportance,1、单词脱俗,ChoosecomefromFamouspeopleOpinionprimary,makeanalternativetoStem/derivefrom/arisefrom/originatefromCelebrityPerspectiveradical,fundamental,1、单词脱俗,SoItispossiblethat.cause,Consequently,accordinglyItisfeasiblethatgiveriseto,2、句式多样,如图所示，描绘图画如图所示，引入主题左右图画:Thesetwopicturesdemonstrateusaremarkablescene:Inthepictureontheleft_.Thepicture,however,ontheright,demonstrates_.上下图画:Ifonecarefullystudiesthetwocartoonsabove,itwillfindthattheyarecloselyrelatedinmeaning.Intheupperpicture,However,inthelowerone,2、句式多样,一个令人愤怒的景象：AnangryfeelingarisesinmymindwhenIlookatthispicture.Asisillustratedinthepicture表扬类：Thecartoondepictsaninspiringsceneintheabovedrawing_.Thescenedepictedinthepicture,Ifeel,shouldcatchmostviewersattention.Asisvividlyillustratedintheblackandwhitepictureabove,描述图画。,2、句式多样,以物喻人，引入主题：Thisdrawing,whichisrenderedintheformofacartoon,isfilledwithprofoundmeaning.以物喻人，引入主题：Thecartoonseemtopertainflowers,butactuallytheyarereferringtohumanbeings.以物喻人，引入主题：Ascanbeseenfromthecartoon,nowadaysmanypeoplefollow_某物（以物喻人）_andswarmintothetideof.,2、句式多样,简单图画，寓意深刻：Thecartoon,simpleyetcarryingrichmeaning,demonstratesthat.简单图画，寓意深刻：Therehasbeenmuchdiscussionrecentlyaboutapicture.主题Simpleasitis,thesymbolicmeaningthepictureconveysisprofound.,2、句式多样,联系现实，引出主题：isknownasoneofthemostseriousproblemsintodaysworld._canbeseeneverywhere.Asisshowninthegraph_.,2、句式多样,联系现实，引出主题：Throughtheartisticpresentation,wecanbeeasilyremindedofacontroversialissueinourdailylife-theeffectofthe_on_.,2、句式多样,关于野生动物保护，给出建议Tosolvetheproblemofmentionedabove,Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakesomestrongandeffectivemeasuressuchasheighteningpeoplesawarenessofwildlifeprotection,keepingpopulationgrowthunderreasonablecontrol,andmakingasmucheffortasitcantorestoreandcreatemoresuitablereservesforthesurvivalanddevelopmentofwildlife.Inaword,ifthegovernmentandthewholesocietyreallyrealizetheproblem,paymoreattentiontoit,andworktogetheronit,thereiscertaintobeanencouragingprospectinwildlifeprotection.,2、句式多样,给出例子：Sincemanyofthephilosophicprinciplesweadheretoareabstractedfromdailylife,itiseasytofindexamplesintheworldaroundus.Theideaillustratedinthispictureisnoexception.Forinstance,_.Thisproblemisnotlimitedtothesituationhereillustrated,butcanbefoundalmosteverywhere.Atypicalexampleisinthecaseof,2、句式多样,中性类，有利有弊类_cannotsimplybeconsideredanegativebehavior.Sometimesitseemsthat_,buteverythingshouldbedoneinmoderation,andthisisnoexceptionInspiteofdespitethedisadvantagessideeffect,ithasitscompensatingbeneficialeffect.,通过谚语、电影台词引入主题,考研英语写作高分句式,1.适当使用被动语态2.短句稍微拉长3.适当使用插入4.擅长使用非限定性定语从句5.要有亮点句型,考研英语写作高分句式,适当用被动代替主动（贝克汉姆，追星）Wecanoftenseethisphenomenonamongyounggenerationinsocietytoday.Thephenomenonof“”canoftenbeseenamongyounggenerationinsocietytoday.,适当用被动代替主动,贝克汉姆，追星Peoplethinkthatweshouldnotalwaysconsider“Celebrityworship”anegativebehavior.Celebrityworshipcannotsimplybeconsideredanegativebehavior.,适当用被动代替主动,人们应当谴责不赡养老人的行为（虐待老人）Weshouldcriticizeandcondemnsuchbehavior.Suchbehaviorshouldbestronglycriticizedandcondemned.,适当用被动代替主动,政府应当实施法律和规则来阻止虚假承诺（母鸡卖蛋）Thegovernmentshouldenactandenforcemorerigidlawsandregulationstopreventthesepromises.Morerigidlawsandregulationsestablishedbythegovernmentshouldbeenactedandenforcedtohindertheseridiculouscommitmentsuperficialpromise.,适当用被动代替主动,我们应该尽最大努力告诉年轻人污染环境的可怕后果。Weshouldtryourbesttotelltheyoungpeoplethebadconsequenceofenvironmentaldamaging.Greateffortsshouldbemadetoinformyoungpeople(teenagersadolescentjuvenile)especiallythedreadfulconsequencesofenvironmentalpollutionanddestruction.,适当用被动代替主动,举例子：Wecanfindsuchexampleseverywhere.Suchexamplescanbefoundineverycorneroftheworld.,短句拉长,贝克汉姆（什么原因导致年轻人追星）年轻人好奇、不成熟、天真等Theunder-agedarecurious,immatureandnaveTheunder-agedarecurious,immatureandnave,andcanneitherresistthetemptationaroundnormakeasoundjudgment.,短句拉长,贝克汉姆（追星导致分心学习）Theattentionoftheadolescentcouldbedistractedawayfromstudy.Theattentionoftheadolescentcouldbedistractedawayfromstudy,whichistheirsoletask,andsomeofthemmaygounreasonable.,短句拉长,过度捕捞（国家应该执行严格的法律）Thegovernmentshouldenactandenforcemorerigidlawsandregulations.Thegovernmentshouldenactandenforcemorerigidlawsandregulations,suchasthebanonfishingduringsomeperiodsoftheyearandthepreventionofprofit-orientedcommercialbehaviors.,短句拉长,母鸡卖蛋（本应是职责，却当成承诺）Wemayobservethatsomeofthepromisesaretheirduties.Butwemayobservethatsomeofthepromisesarenothingbutdutiesthesepeopleshouldfulfill,justlikethemostcommoneggslaidbythehen,短句拉长,Factorieshavedischargedgasandliquid.Thenewly-builtchemicalfactorieshavedischargedharmfulandevenpoisonousgasesandliquidswhichhavehadaseriouslynegativeimpactonthesurroundingenvironment.,插入语,坦率地说，文化交流可以促进国家之间的相互了解。Tobefrank,culturalcommunicationmaypromotemutualunderstandingamongnations.Culturalcommunication,frankly,maypromotemutualunderstandingamongnations.,插入语,在我看来，文化融合对全球化有深远影响。Accordingtome,culturalintegrationhasafar-reachinginfluenceonglobalizationandeconomiccooperation.Environment,asIseeit,hasafar-reachinginfluenceonglobalizationandeconomiccooperation.,插入语,事实证明，碰坏环境是要付出昂贵的代价。Environmentaldestruction,itturnsout,isahigh-pricedoption.,插入语,其他人虽然不酗酒吸毒，精神也正常，但就是缺乏让自己生活好转的基本能力。Manyothers,whilenotaddictedormentallyill,simplylacktheeverydaysurvivalskillsneededtoturntheirlivesbetter.,善用定语从句(图画描述时起解释作用),善用定语从句,Afamilyfootballmatch,whichistotallydifferentfromaregularone.Withoutstrikers,only4goalkeepers,whoaresonsanddaughteroftheoldfather,areguarding4goalsrespectively.Besides,theoldfatheractsasaballtoreplacetherealone.,善用定语从句,善用定语从句,Asisdisplayedinthedrawing,aflowerblossomswellinagreenhouse,whichcanresiststorm.Incomparison,oncethegreenhouseisremoved,theflowercannotwithstandanymoreandwitherssoon.,善用定语从句,善用定语从句,Asisdemonstratedinthecartoon,ahenismakinghercommitmentandclaimingtohaveroundandcompleteeggs,whicharewithoutedgesandcornersandcontainallessentialparts.,善用定语从句,善用定语从句,Aswecanseefromthepicture,aheatingsystem,whohaswon3medals,isclaiming:providingheatinaccordancewithweatherandtemperature,亮点句型,虐待老人(1)再怎么强调.的重要性也不为过。_cannotemphasizetheimportanceof_toomuch.我们再怎么强调保护老人的重要性也不为过。Wecannotemphasizetheimportanceofprotectingtheseniortoomuch.,亮点句型,碰坏环境(不可否认.)Thereisnodenyingthat+S+V.不可否认的，我们的环境已经每况愈下Thereisnodenyingthatthequalitiesofourenvironmenthavegonefrombadtoworse.,亮点句型,过度捕杀鱼类全世界都知道.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat+句子全世界都知道自然资源对我们是不可或缺的。例句：Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthattreesareindispensabletous.,亮点句型,环境碰坏、滥杀鱼类毫无疑问.Thereisnodoubtthat+句子毫无疑问的我们的监管制度制度令人不满意Thereisnodoubtthatourgovernmentalsupervisionsystemleavessomethingtobedesired.,亮点句型,虐待老人.的原因是.Thereasonwhy+句子isthat+句子我们照顾老人的原因是因为尊敬老人是中国的传统美德。Thereasonwhywemusttakecareoftheel