九年级英语全册Unit6Whenwasitinvented同步作文指导课件新版人教新目标版.ppt

Unit6Whenwasitinvented?Writing,写作题目：Computerage,Learningaim,Talkabouttheusageofcomputersandyourideasonthem.,Haveyouseentheseinventions?,Whentalkaboutthemostimportantinventionoftheworld,whatcomestoyourmindfirst?,Telephones_in1876.They_callpeople.(用途),wereinvented,areusedto,Ourlifehasbecome_(convenient)sincecarswereinvented._,carscausealotofairpollutionforus.,moreandmoreconvenient,However,computers,Ourlife_(已经大大改变）_（因为）theinventionsofcomputers.Wecan_(上网）oncomputers.Wecan_(购物)ontheInternetandsoon.Butifwespend_(太多时间）oncomputers,itwillbebadforourstudy.,goshopping,becauseof,toomuchtime,hasgreatlychanged,getontheInternet,电脑问世以来，大大改变了人们的生活。请围绕下面的提示，写一篇80词左右的英语短文谈谈电脑对我们生活的影响。倡议同学们恰当使用电脑。提示：发明时间：1976年最有用的发明之一，如玩游戏、写文章、听音乐利用电脑上网，购物，聊天长时间使用电脑对视力及学习有害参考词汇：getontheInternet上网，eyesight视力intherightway恰当的方式,writingtask,WritingSteps,审-列-加-连-美,think,list,add,connect,beautify,Think（审题）体裁：_人称:_时态:_List（用简单句列出文章的要点）,说明文,第三、一人称,一般现在时,Add（加开头，结尾使文章完整）Connect(使用关联词，从句，过渡词）Beautify(使用好词好句美化文章）,Add,介绍产品用途,Computersareusedin/forComputerscanhelpdo,点明主题,Computersareoneofthemostusefulinventionsintheworld.,结尾,Ithink,连词:as(everyoneknows),before,after,when,if,because过渡词：however,besides,also,whatsmore表示列举的词：forexample,suchas,总结性的短语，句子：inmyopinion,inaword,inshort,ingeneral,Ithink,审-列-加-连-美,ThemostusefulinventioncomputerInthepastfewyears,moreandmoreinventionshavecomeintoourlife.Ithinkcomputersareoneofthemostusefulinventions.Weliveinthe“computerage”.Computersareusedinmanyfields.Theyareveryimportantbecausetheycanworkfasterandmakenearlynomistakes.Computerscanhelppeopledoalotofwork.Writersusethemtowrite.Teachersusethemtohelpteaching.Theyarealsousedforstudyingbystudents.Whatsmore,wecanuseacomputertosearchforinformation.Computersareveryusefulandhelpfulinourlife.Theyhavechangedourlifeandimprovedthequalityofpeopleslife.Theyareourfriends.Ithinkeveryonewantstohaveone.,Sample1,timetowrtie,开声朗读自己的文章，并从结构、人称、时态、字数、拼写、大小写、标点符号等方面进行自我修正。,Task1,自我欣赏与修正,同伴互赏,欣赏角度：写作基本要求:人称,时态；2.要点齐全；3.结构:开头，正文，结尾；4.好词好句。,Task2,欣赏与修正请交换习作欣赏，用红笔划出对方的亮点词、句,并运用改错符号找出不足，进行适当修改。评分以满分15分为标准，给同伴的习作打分。点评由亮点欣赏到不足的修正（篇章结构分析-细节点评),集体赏析，共同进步,Task3,Computershavegreatlychangedourlifesincetheywereinventedin1976.Theyareoneofthemostusefulinventionsintheworld.Theyareusedtodomanythings,suchasplayingcomputergames,writingarticlesandlisteningtomusic.Besides,wecanusethemtogetontheInternet.Thenwecandoshoppingandchatwithfriendsonline.,Sample2,However,computersalsohavedisadvantages.Ifwespendtoomuchtimeoncomputers,itisbadforoureyes.Whatsmore,spendingtoomuchtimegettingontheInternetwillaffectourstudy.Inmyopinion,weshouldusethecomputersintherightway.,Homework,Rewriteyourarticleandhanditin.,本单元我们主要学习了被动语态，学会利用被动语态谈论发明的历史、描述物体的用途。此类文体属于说明文，说明文常用一般现在时。写此类文章应明确说明的先后顺序，描述产品的特点和用途，最后结合发明给人们生活带来的便利谈谈自己的感受。,习作