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高考写作 1 评分标准 2 内容框架 第四部分：书面表达（满分 25分） 假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。 要点： 1. 问题： 2. 手机不响铃，不能发短信；该产品已售完，无法更换；型号新，无配件，无法维修。 3. 要求：公司应尽快予以更换。 注意： 1. 词数为 100左右； 2. 参考词汇：配件 spare part 3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入你所写词数）； 4. 已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。 When I bought it home, I found there were several problems about the quality of the mobile phone. There is no ring in the new mobile phone, besides, it can not be used to send short messages. When I want back to the local company, the manager told me this product has sold out and that I wasn t able to change it. What s worse, this style mobile phone is a new product, there is no spare part and can t to be repaired. These problems worries me most. I hope your company would change it for me as soon as possible. 【 分析 】 基本表达清楚；时态运用恰当；采用了些简单连接手法；内容较连贯；准确性不够。 中国式英语 语态错误 动词用法错误 单词误用 15 第四部分：书面表达（满分25分） 假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。 要点： 1. 问题： 2. 手机不响铃，不能发短信；该产品已售完，无法更换；型号新，无配件，无法维修。 2. 要求：公司应尽快予以更换。 注意： 1. 词数为 100左右； 2. 参考词汇：配件 spare part 3. 电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入你所写词数）； 4. 已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。 However, some problems are presented with this mobile phone. In the first place, when there are phone calls, the mobile phone just can t ring. In addition, short messages can never be sent. when I came back to the mall for exchange, I was disappointed to be told that this model had been sold out. Worse still, it is a new model, thus no spare part is available at the moment. Nowhere can I have this phone repaired. Maybe there are some alternatives to handle this case, but I hope it can be dealt with and solved as soon as possible. In brief, my personal viewpoint is that you replace this mobile phone. I m looking forward to your reply. 【 分析 】 全文共九个句子 ,其中有 两个时间状语从句 ,一个并列句 ； 一个倒装句 ； 一个表语从句。 运用了 however, in the first place, in addition, worse still, in brief 五个过渡性词汇。 运用了 available, alternative 两个较高级词语。 en en but can I is that However In the first ace, In ition, orse still rief, available alternatives 25 1 评分标准 keep to the point accuracy (spelling and grammar) bright points(words , phrases and sentence) natural 2 内容框架 1 真题一（环境保护 一次性筷子的使用） (how to make your content logical) 2 真题二（周末集体活动 介绍一个地方） (how to make bright points for your article) 3 真题三（讨论动物园是否应搬出市区） (how to make accuracy) 4 历年真题翻译练习 真题一 假如你叫李华，是一名高中学生。根据下面内容，写一封倡议书，呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子。 注意： 1开头和结尾已给出。 2字数 100左右。 3参考词汇： reject throwaway chopsticks 写作步骤 1 扩展 -逻辑性 -分段 2 翻译 -亮点 -词与句 3 检查 -错误 假如你叫李华，是一名高中学生。根据下面内容，写一封倡议书，呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子。 注意： 1开头和结尾已给出。 2字数 100左右。 3参考词汇： reject throwaway chopsticks 目前状态 导致结果 采取措施 1扩展 砍伐森林会导致很多严重的环境问题。 面对这样的情况，我们应该采取一些措施来保护森林了。 目前，中国的森林正遭受着严重的破坏。 2 翻译 第一部分 Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, 中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题。 中国的森林覆盖率仅为 13%，但是中国每年要生产大约 450亿双筷子，而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐 2500万棵树。有环保主义者警告，照这样的速度，中国可能在 20年内就要砍伐所有的森林。 面临着 森林破坏问题 覆盖率 大约 450亿 2500万 警告 灭绝 be confronted with the problem of deforestation be covered with approximately 45 billion 25 million warn die out 中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题。 中国的森林覆盖率仅为13%，但是中国每年要生产大约 450亿双筷子 而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐 2500万棵树。 有环保主义者警告，照这样的速度，中国可能在 20年内就要砍伐所有的森林。 China is confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china produces approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. China is confronted with the serious problem of forest destruction. 13% of china is covered with forest, but china produces approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks. These chopsticks need us to cut down 25 million trees. Some environmentalists warn the public thatthe forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. Confronted with the serious problem of deforestation. 13% of china is covered with forest, however approximately 45 billion pairs of throwaway chopsticks are produced by China annually, which means that we need to cut down 25 million trees. Therefore, some environmentalists warn the public that the forest of China will die out after 20 years by this speed. 被动语态 定语从句 连词 分词作状语 第二部分 砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题 ，例如，水土流失，废气排放增多，温室效应。人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难。 砍伐森林 水土流失 废气排放增多 遭受 Excessive deforestation soil erosion the increase emission of carbon dioxide suffer from 砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题， 例如，水土流失，废气排放增多，温室效应 . 人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难。 Excessive deforestation will lead to a series of environmental changes, for instance, soil erosion,the increase emission of carbon dioxide ,especially the green house effect. Its sure that the humen will suffer from a disater which is caused by ourselves. 第三部分 所以，我们是该采取一些措施来保护我们的森林资源了。 its time that sb did sth. 万能措施一 The long term goal of environmental protection is to prevent the creation of pollutants and wastes and to produce durable, recyclable goods. 万能措施二 In view of sustainable development, the exploitation of mineral resources should be under strict government. 万能理由三 Mankind should join hand in hand to create an inhabitable world for themselves and their offspring. 3 检查 纠错 Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics, theyre due to the disappearing of forests. Dear friends, do you know they were eatlen by you when use the chopsticks? Every year it products 45 billion chopsticks from China. The forests only cover 13 percents in China. These need 25 million of trees. Someone who cares the environment has alarmed that China may use out all of its forests according to this speed! It means that the environment of China will break down entirely. So please throw away chopsticks now! using the throwaway chopsticks may kill our forests. China whose forests only covers 13% of its land, produces 45000000000 throwaway chopsticks every year. This needs 2500 million trees to be cut down. Whats worse, some environmentalists even warned that if we continue using these chopsticks at this speed, it will be possible for China to use up all its forest resources in only 20 years.( At that time, we human beings could not live on the plannet any longer and there way be no living thing on the earth, either. What a frightening thing it is! )So we should not use the chopsticks any more in order to make a better environment for our younger generation and for ourselves. Dear friends, lets take action from now on! 必备词汇 disaster, flood, hurricane, lighting, thunderstorm, tornado, volcano, wave, ash, furniture,feather,fur, latitude,equator,longitude bury, occur, strike, ruin,erupt, eruption. current, tropical, violent, previous, 常用表达 污染大气 无节制地开发资源 乱扔垃圾 砍伐森林 冰川融化 土地沙漠化 渡过灾难 回收再利用垃圾 减少废气排放 最大化地利用资源 pollute the atmosphere exploit natural resources excessively litter around deforest the poles melt desertification survive the disaster recycle the garbage reduce the exhaust emission maximize the use of resources 真题二（仿写） 假定你是一名导游，你将接待一个外国旅游团。请你拟定一份 100词左右的导游词向客介绍青岛。要点如下： 1.青岛位于山东半岛的南端，面积 10654平方公里，总人口 699万； 2.青岛三面环海，大海是青岛的魅力所在； 3. 古代名人如李白，蒲松龄，康有为等的足迹遍布青岛各地，留下了华美的诗文。 4. 青岛是一座现代化城市，现代化的工厂和楼房林立。 参考词汇；半岛 peninsula Paris is the capital and largest city of France, situated on the River Seine. It is one of the most beautiful cities in the world and is visitied by more than eight million tourists every year. cover an area of with a population of Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10,654 square kilometers and with a population of 6.99 million. France is Europes third largest country and faces the United Kingdom acoss the English Channel. Florence is an Italian city which became famous because of the Renaissance. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue seawater. Many of Florence s most beautiful paintings and sculptures were produced by great artists such as Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo. Greeces best writers lived in ancient Athens. Their work has influenced writers ever since. poet essay celebrity Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Qingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. international possess modern Qingdao is a beautiful city of China, situated in the south of Shandong peninsula , covering an area of 10,654 spuare kilometers and with a population of 6.99 million. Qingdao faces the sea which becomes famous because of the blue seawater. Chinas best writers travelled around ancient Qingdao.Many of China s most beautiful essays and poems were produced by great artists such as Li Bai, Pu Songlin and Kang Youwei. Qingdao is a international city, which possesses a great many modern buildings and factories. 1 连接词 2 框架词 3 内容词 1 连接词汇 表列举： for example、 for instance、 that is to say 表补充： besides、 in addition、 moreover 表对比： on （ the） one handon the other hand, in spite of 表原因： because of、 thanks to、 due to、 owing to 、 as a result of 表结果： therefore、 thus、 as a result、 so 表结论： to conclude、 in a word、 in brief、 to sum up in a nutshell in conclusion 表转折： however、 nevertheless、 yet 汉语意思 普通用词 亮点词汇 不同的 越来越 面临 重视 很多 讨论 关注 发生 意识到 different more and more face emphasize many discussion attention happen realize various , vary from growing, increasing confront attach importance to vast, a overwhelming majority of, quite a few, an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of debate, controversy focus occur be aware of 汉语意思 普通词汇 亮点词汇 认为 重要的 支持 不同意 喜欢 好的 坏的 think believe, hold, argue, maitain, harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely shared that, it is universally ackowledged that, to my mind, as far as I am concerned important essential, vital, significant, notable support be in favor of, approve of disagree disapprove of , frown on sth like prefer, feel inclined to , be keen on, be fond of , appeal to good benefical, positive, favorable, perfect, pleasurable bad dreadful,unfavorable, poor, adverse 普通词汇 亮点词汇 名词 reason factor 动词 cause contribute to, attribute to , lead to , result from, account for 连词 because since , in that , seeing that, now that 普通词汇 亮点词汇 第一项 first in the first place, to begin with, first and foremost 第二项 second in the second place, furthermore, besides 第三项 third in the third place, finally, last but not least Page 43 内容词汇 1解决 2损害 3给与 4培养 5优势 Solve, deal with, cope with, handle, resolve, address, tackle Damage, hurt, injure, harm, impair, undermine, jeopardize Give, offer, render, impart, provide,supply, afford Develop, cultivate, foster Advantage, merit, virtue, benefit, upside, strength Page 44 6缺陷 7使迷惑 8重要的 9保护 10确保 Disadvantage, demerit, drawback, downside, weakness Puzzle, bewilder, perplex, baffle Protect, conserve, preserve Key, crucial, critical, important, significant, vital, substantial, indispensable, imperative Assure, ensure, guarantee, pledge Page 45 11消除 12导致 13宣称 14有益的 15影响 Eliminate, clear, remove, clear up, take away, smooth away Lead to, bring about, result in, cause, spark off, conduce to, procure, induce, generate Allege, assert, declare, claim Useful, helpful, be