读后续写训练范例.ppt

续写导练 五 阅读下面短文 根据所给情节进行续写 使之构成一个完整的故事 Iwastouchedthroughexperiences memories books stories animals angels andmostofallotherpeople Peoplehavemovedmeandmolded 对 影响重大 mewithmomentsofloveandexamplesofkindness OnetimeonthedaybeforeChristmasmanyyearsagowhenIwasaminimumwagemill 工厂 worker Ifoundmyselfwithverylittlemoneyandverylittletimetobuymysmallchildrenafewsimpletoys IknewthattheywouldhavetobecheaponesandIhopedmychildrenwouldlikethem Ihatednothavingenoughtogivethemmore Ihatedbeingpoor AndIhatedfeelingbadatChristmasratherthanhappy Ipulledintoastoreparkinglotandcountedmymoneyagain Itwasn tmuchbutmaybeIcouldgetsomethingsmallwithit AsIwasgettingoutofthecarInoticedtheSalvationArmy 救世军 bellringerattheentrance IfeltbadagainbecauseIdidn tfeelIcouldspareanythingtogivehim Istartedwalkingtowardstheentrancewhentwocarspulledintoemptyparkingspotsinfrontofme Thefirstwasashiny newCadillacandIfeltatwingeofjealousywhenIsawit Hownice Ithought Woulditbetohaveenoughmoneytobuyacarlikethat Thesecondcar though wasanancientsedan 轿车 morebeat upandrustythantheoneIwasdriving Amanhopped 冲 outoftheCadillacandhurriedintothestorerightpastthebellringerwithoutasecondglance Outoftheoldsedancameayoungmotherwiththreesmallchildrenintow 紧随着 Herclotheslookedaswornoutashercar yetshestoppedinfrontofthebellringer smiled openedherpurse anddroppedabillinhisredkettle 钱罐 读后续写的基本步骤 一 短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息 明确故事的任务 环境和情节 并概括文章大意 二 划线词分类 为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇 可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物 地点 动作情节和事物 具体和抽象 等分类 三 设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文 后文的桥梁 第二部分注意整篇文章的首位呼应 四 初稿 五 修改 一 短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息 明确故事的任务 环境和情节 并概括文章大意 character time place plots details thedaybeforeChristmas manyyearsago astoreparkinglot theauthor bellringer amanowningaCadilac ayoungmotherowninganoldcar 1 Theauthorwaspoorandfeelingbad 2 themanandthemotherrespondedquitedifferentlytothebellringer 3 Sumupthemainideaofthepassage 1 Manyyearsago Theauthorwasaworkwithasmallwage Hefeltbadbecause 2 Whenhepulledintoastoreparkinglot hefeltbadagainbecause 3 Whenhewalkenintotheentrance hefoundamanowninga whileayoungmother However they 二 划线词分类 为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇 可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物 地点 动作情节和事物 具体和抽象 等分类 三 设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文 后文的桥梁 第二部分注意与整篇文章的首位呼应 part1 part2 Theauthor sattitudetothemanandthemotherHisopinionsonrichness nolongerfeelingbadandfollowingthemother sexampleanddroppedabilltothebellringer Buyingthingsforhischidrenandexpectingamerrychristmas 四 初稿 part1 itisbettertoberichintheinside Itiswrongtojudgeapersonbyhisappearanceorwords Ihadrespectforthepoormotherandwantedlearnfromher part2 Itookouta10 poundbilland Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildren 五 修改 Paragraph1 Istoodthereforaminuteinastonishment Maybe Ithoughttomyself it sbettertoberichontheinsideinsteadoftheoutside Thatrichmanshouldhavedonesomethingtohelpthepoor buthedidn t Sometimesitwasreallywrongtojudgeapersonbyhisorherappearance Ireallyhadrespectforthepoormotherfromthebottomofmyheart Shesetagoodexampleforherchildrentofollow Paragraph2 Inthatsecondawarmthtouchedme myjealousyandhatred 憎恨 leftme andalltheloveandjoythatareChristmasfilledme Ifishedabilloutofmyownpurse droppeditintheSalvationArmykettle andwishedthebellringeramerryChristmas Ifoundafewfunthingstogivemykidsanddroveh