托福仿写范例.docx

第一次课结束我们说好了三篇仿写，担心你可能还没有明白什么叫做“仿写”，没关系，通过三篇文章我都给你把步骤糅合在这里，你就跟着Step1,2,3跟着走就好。Step2的原义输出我已经帮你翻译好了范文，你会发现中文翻译有些在句式结构和语序上（比如英文习惯把状语后置）很诡异，这是为了便于仿写时遵循英文的表达习惯，也为了便于培养好的英文写作思路和表达方式。范文第1题Step 1:请对照学习范文。记忆好的语言表达，词汇搭配。Do you agree or disagree? People should take several different kinds of jobs before they take a career in a long term.【2009.1.23 NA】符号示意：1) Underline单下划线: 充当副词修饰成分的提示（如状语从句使用定语进行省略，如介词短语做状语）2) Double underline双下划线：疑问词引导的从句3) Dotted underline点点下划线：个别词用词提示4) Dot-dash underline点横杠下划线: 动名词做主语5) Wave underline波纹下划线：充当形容词性质修饰成分的提示（如后置定语从句，如介词短语后置）被修饰的成分用粗体标出。Todays economy is diverse and full of opportunities. While there are some people that are able to study a subject or skill and then upon graduation jump right into their career, more and more people are choosing a less traditional path to their careers. Before starting their careers, they try many different kinds of jobs. I believe having many different kinds of jobs helps establish a foundation for success in ones future career.当今的经济变化多样而且充满了机遇。虽然（连词，表示前后的比较，也可用来指让步）有些人他们（定语从句，后置）能够学一个科目或者技能然后一毕业（介词词组）就直接工作，但越来越多的人还是会选择一个不那么传统（比较级的否定）的职业道路。在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略），他们尝试很多不同的工作。我相信有很多不同的工作帮助为成功奠定基础在某人的未来职业生涯中（状语习惯后置句末）。The most compelling reason that recent graduates nowadays are choosing to work many different kinds of jobs is because it helps them figure out what they truly want to do. People are realizing that if you find a career you love, you will not have to work a day in your life. In the long run, this is a very smart move. If people take the time to test out many different jobs, they will know which one is the job they want to do for the rest of their lives. I know many people in older generations that talk about how they did not have a choice in their career. They always explain how they started teaching or nursing simply because that was the best option. They are not happy with their careers and with regret that they could 讲义有错，could和did留一个即可。 did not choose the best career. Working many jobs helps young workers determine their future careers.现在的毕业生都选择很多不同工作的（定语从句，后置）最令人信服的原因是因为这能帮助他们想清楚他们什么是他们真实想要做的。人们意识到如果你找到了你所爱的职业生涯，你一生将不再需要工作一天。那么长期来看，这就是个非常明智的举措。如果人们花点时间去尝试很多不同的工作，他们将知道哪个是他们想下半辈子都想要做的职业。我知道有很多老一辈的人们他们（定语从句，后置）谈论他们如何无法选择自己的职业生涯。他们总是解释他们如何开始教书或者做护士仅仅因为那是当时最好的选择。他们自己的职业生涯不快乐而且满怀遗憾的（介词短语做状语）他们不能够选择最好的职业。多做不同的工作（动名词作主语）就能帮助年轻人决定他们的未来职业。（本段多次用到疑问词引导的宾语从句，注意从句中语序应该是陈述句而非疑问句语序。例如I dont know what I should do.而不是I dont know what should I do.）In addition, gaining experience in many different kinds of jobs helps make people more competitive. When companies hire employees, they look for applicants with diverse backgrounds and a range of experiences. This is practical business sense, since a person with many different experiences can be expected to do many different kinds of jobs. For example, an information technology company cannot just hire employees who know about computers. They must hire people who are familiar with the content. If the company is responsible for creating an educational database for history teachers, having employees who have had prior experience in education and history are the most valuable. By holding many different jobs before starting a career, a person can be more competitive in the job market.而且，在很多不同工作里（状语，后置）获得（动名词做主语）经验帮助让人梦更加有竞争力。当工作雇佣员工的时候，他们寻找有不同背景和各种经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）申请者。这是实际的商业常识，因为有很多不同经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）一个人有很多不同经验的能被期待做很多不同的工作。比方说，一个信息科技公司不能雇佣只知道电脑的（定语从句，后置）员工。他们必须雇佣熟悉内容（定语从句，后置）的人们。如果公司负责制造一个给历史老师的（介词短语表修饰，后置）教育数据库，拥有（动名词做主语）具有在教育和历史方面有先前经验的（定语从句，后置）员工是最宝贵的。通过做过很多不同工作在开始职业生涯之前（分词表状语从句的省略），一个人能在就业市场里（状语习惯后置到句末）更加有竞争力。Once you start your career, having a diverse background will help you accomplish more with your job. For example, my father first worked as a waiter before he became a writer for an advertisement agency. One of his first accounts was for the restaurant T.G.I.F. My father used his experience as a waiter as inspiration for the advertisement campaign they ran. The restaurant was so pleased with my fathers work that they signed an exclusive contract with his company. Soon after that he was promoted and later went on to become the youngest manager of the creative department in the history of this advertising agency. Using knowledge from past jobs gives you the perspective to rise quickly in your career.一旦你开始了你的职业生涯，有（动名词做主语）多种多样背景能帮助你在工作上（状语习惯后置到句末）成就更多。比方说，我的父亲在他成为广告公司作家之前（状语，后置）开始做的是服务员。他 最早期的描述之一是给一个T.G.I.F.的餐馆。我父亲用了他做服务生的经历作为他们运行的（定语从句，后置）广告活动的灵感。餐馆非常满意我父亲的工作所以他们和他的公司签了一份独家合同。那之后很快就被提升了后来继续成为了他们广告公司历史上（状语习惯后置到句末）最年轻的创意部门的经理。使用（动名词做主语）过去工作的知识给你视角来（to do表目的）让你在职业生涯中晋升更快。Holding many different jobs before starting your career is a smart thing to do. Building your resume with a range of jobs helps you decide which career is best for you. The various experiences not only make you more competitive than other job applicants, but it also helps you be a more valuable and resourceful employee. (Anna, 529 words)在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略）做（动名词做主语）很多不同工作是一个明智的做法。用各种工作经历来（介词短语表方式）塑造（动名词做主语）你的简历帮你决定哪个工作生涯是对你最好的。各种各样的经历不但使你比其他的求职者更加有竞争力，而且帮你成为一个更有价值和足智多谋的雇员。Todays economy is diverse and laden with opportunities. Although some people who learn one subject or techniqueskill could get to jump right intowork right after graduation, increasing number of people tend to make a less traditional option of their career. Before beginning their careers, they will try various jobs. It is believed that the experiences of numerous different jobs help to establish a foundation in ones future career.The most convincingCompelling reason why undergraduates choose to try many jobs is that the trial it could give a help hand to clarify figure out what they want from the bottom of their heart. People are aware that if one finds a job that he enjoys, he would spend no time working from then on. In the long term, it is a behavior full of wisdom smart move. If people use some time to try various jobs, they will know which job is the one that they want to do in the rest of their life. I know many old people in older generations who complain that they were unable to have a chance to choose a job when they were young. They always explain how they start teaching or nursing only simply because it was the best choice then. They find their careers unpleasant and their life full of regret for they had little ability to select their most suitable jobs. So having experiences of different jobs would help the youngsters determine their future career.Moreover, gaining experience from numerous jobs will make one more competitive. When employing peoplehiring employees, companies prefer to seek for candidates with a background of different a range of job experiences. For example, an information technique company cannot only have employers who knows nothing but handling computers. It is necessary to employ the people who are familiar with some specific fields. If the company is responsible for building a database for history teachers, owning an employer who has a previous experience in education and history is beneficial. Through doing different jobs before the career starts, one could become more competitive in the job market.Once you start your career, having a various diverse background would help you gaining more accomplishment in your career. For instance, my father was a waiter before he becomes became a writer in an advertisement company. He helped a restaurant called T.G.I.F. My father used his experience as a waiter as the inspiration of the advertisement for it. The restaurant is quite satisfied with his work so they sign an individual contract with his company. Soon after that my father was promoted and became the youngest manager in the creative department in this company. Making use of previous knowledge widens ones horizon to offer you a greater promotion in your career.Before starting a career, it is a wise choice to get different job experience. Shaping your resume using various jobs help you decide which job fits you best. Abundant experiences not only make you more competitive but make you an employer with wisdomsourceful and value.要注意单复数和动词的人称时态。Step 2:合上范文书，对照着以下翻译提纲，进行原义输出（开始的时候可以一段一段来）当今的经济变化多样而且充满了机遇。虽然（连词，表示前后的比较，也可用来指让步）有些人他们（定语从句，后置）能够学一个科目或者技能然后一毕业（介词词组）就直接工作，但越来越多的人还是会选择一个不那么传统（比较级的否定）的职业道路。在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略），他们尝试很多不同的工作。我相信有很多不同的工作帮助为成功奠定基础在某人的未来职业生涯中（状语习惯后置句末）。现在的毕业生都选择很多不同工作的（定语从句，后置）最令人信服的原因是因为这能帮助他们想清楚他们什么是他们真实想要做的。人们意识到如果你找到了你所爱的职业生涯，你一生将不再需要工作一天。那么长期来看，这就是个非常明智的举措。如果人们花点时间去尝试很多不同的工作，他们将知道哪个是他们想下半辈子都想要做的职业。我知道有很多老一辈的人们他们（定语从句，后置）谈论他们如何无法选择自己的职业生涯。他们总是解释他们如何开始教书或者做护士仅仅因为那是当时最好的选择。他们自己的职业生涯不快乐而且满怀遗憾的（介词短语做状语）他们不能够选择最好的职业。多做不同的工作（动名词作主语）就能帮助年轻人决定他们的未来职业。而且，在很多不同工作里（状语，后置）获得（动名词做主语）经验帮助让人梦更加有竞争力。当工作雇佣员工的时候，他们寻找有不同背景和各种经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）申请者。这是实际的商业常识，因为有很多不同经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）一个人有很多不同经验的能被期待做很多不同的工作。比方说，一个信息科技公司不能雇佣只知道电脑的（定语从句，后置）员工。他们必须雇佣熟悉内容（定语从句，后置）的人们。如果公司负责制造一个给历史老师的（介词短语表修饰，后置）教育数据库，拥有（动名词做主语）具有在教育和历史方面有先前经验的（定语从句，后置）员工是最宝贵的。通过做过很多不同工作在开始职业生涯之前（分词表状语从句的省略），一个人能在就业市场里（状语习惯后置到句末）更加有竞争力。一旦你开始了你的职业生涯，有（动名词做主语）多种多样背景能帮助你在工作上（状语习惯后置到句末）成就更多。比方说，我的父亲在他成为广告公司作家之前（状语，后置）开始做的是服务员。他 最早期的描述之一是给一个T.G.I.F.的餐馆。我父亲用了他做服务生的经历作为他们运行的（定语从句，后置）广告活动的灵感。餐馆非常满意我父亲的工作所以他们和他的公司签了一份独家合同。那之后很快就被提升了后来继续成为了他们广告公司历史上（状语习惯后置到句末）最年轻的创意部门的经理。使用（动名词做主语）过去工作的知识给你视角来（to do表目的）让你在职业生涯中晋升更快。在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略）做（动名词做主语）很多不同工作是一个明智的做法。用各种工作经历来（介词短语表方式）塑造（动名词做主语）你的简历帮你决定哪个工作生涯是对你最好的。各种各样的经历不但使你比其他的求职者更加有竞争力，而且帮你成为一个更有价值和足智多谋的雇员。Step 3:打开范文书，把刚才仿写的文章一段一段，一句一句，一字一字进行对照。对照工具：word上方“审阅”工具栏中的“修订”功能，打开即可。有些虽与原文不同，但只是同义词之间的互换不是问题。注意那些1）自己在仿写时脑海空白不知如何表达的语料 2）自己表达时候难免出现的中式表达（可能在用词可能在句型）这是要重点进行对照的。范文第2题Step 1:请对照学习范文。记忆好的语言表达，词汇搭配。Do you agree or disagree? Colleges and universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working.符号示意：a) Underline单下划线: 充当副词修饰成分的提示（如状语从句使用定语进行省略，如介词短语做状语）b) Wave underline波纹下划线：充当形容词性质修饰成分的提示（如后置定语从句，如介词短语后置）被修饰的成分用粗体标出。Thick underline 粗下划线：并列结构c) Double underline双下划线：疑问词引导的从句d) Dotted underline点点下划线：个别词用词提示Nowadays, how to get a better job is a popular topic among students and parents. Some people believe that colleges and universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working. Personally, I support the idea, because job support programs would benefit not only the student, but also the university and in turn society. 现在，如何获得一个更好的工作是学生父母间（介词短语表修饰，后置）很流行的话题。有些人认为大学应该提供给学生更好的工作储备在他们开始工作之前。个人来说，我支持这个想法，因为工作支持项目能不单单对学生有好处，还能依次对学校和社会有好处。First, better job preparation benefits students seeking better jobs. For example, thanks to the help of the training courses at my school, I now work as an editor for a multimedia production company. When I was sophomore, the office of employment guidance in my university offered a course called job preparation for students. The course taught us how to choose our careers, how to plan our future and how to apply and interview for jobs. With the skills I learned in this course, I found a job before graduation. 首先，更好的工作储备有利于学生找更好的工作。比方说，多亏于我们学校训练课程的帮助，我现在为一个多媒体制作公司（介词短语表修饰，后置）作编辑。当我大二的时候，我们学校的就业指导办公室提供了一个叫工作准备的（分词表定语从句的省略，后置）课程给学生。这个课程教会我们如何选择我们的职业生涯，如何规划我们的未来以及如何申请和面试工作。Second, better job preparation benefits the fame of the university. For instance, the competition of education has greatly increased in recent years. If universities can offer students better job preparation before they begin to work, more and more students will want to apply to for 讲义错误apply to应改为apply for，才是“申请” these universities. Job preparation programs will also create more successful graduates, who will want to donate more money to their former university. More funding will allow the university to improve their facilities and hire better teachers. As a result, the whole level of university will rise, and the reputation of university will grow. 第二，更好的工作储备有利于学校的名誉。比如说，近年（状语，习惯后置句末）教育的竞争已经很大增加。如果大学能提供给学生更好的工作准备在他们开始工作前，越来越多的学生将愿意申请这些学校。工作准备项目也将创造出更多成功的毕业生，他们（后置定语从句）将愿意捐更多的钱给他们的母校。更多的资金将能让大学提升设备而且雇佣更好的老师（两个动词词组之间的并列结构）。所以，大学的整体水平将会上升，而且大学的名誉将会提高（这句话之间的并列结构，中间的and不可省略）。Finally, better job preparation benefits society as a whole. For example, better job preparation will prepare students to enter the workforce with more ambition, inspiring them to create more advanced products. For example, when my cousin was a senior at the Shanghai Conservatory of Music, the school helped him to find a part-time job of composing piano music. He really liked this job, and he realized his passion for composing music for radio and television studios. If he had not done this internship, he would have never realized his potential. More inspired workers means a more productive economy, which in effect strengthens society. Therefore, better job preparation in universities is not only important to students and schools, but also to society. 最后，更好的工作准备有益于整个社会。比方说，更好的工作储备将预备好学生让他们能有更多雄心（介词短语，状语后置）进入职场，激发（分词表伴随）他们创造更高级的产品。比方说，当我的堂兄在上海音乐学院读大四的时候，学校帮助他找了一份钢琴乐编曲的兼职工作。他很喜欢这个工作，而且他意识到他对为广播和电视演播室（介词短语表修饰，后置）作曲的热情。更多有灵感的员工意味着更有创造力的经济，这（后置定语从句）事实上能加强这个社会。所以，在大学更好的工作准备不但对学生和学校很重要，也对社会（并列结构）。Considering the above analysis, it is clear that universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working, because it benefits the student, university and society. (389 words)鉴于上面的分析，很清楚的是（it做形式主语）学校应该提供给学生更好的工作准备在他们开始工作前，因为这有利于学生，大学和社会。Step 2:合上范文书，对照着以下翻译提纲，进行原义输出（开始的时候可以一段一段来）现在，如何获得一个更好的工作是学生父母间（介词短语表修饰，后置）很流行的话题。有些人认为大学应该提供给学生更好的工作储备在他们开始工作之前。个人来说，我支持这个想法，因为工作支持项目能不单单对学生有好处，还能依次对学校和社会有好处。首先，更好的工作储备有利于学生找更好的工作。比方说，多亏于我们学校训练课程的帮助，我现在为一个多媒体制作公司（介词短语表修饰，后置）作编辑。当我大二的时候，我们学校的就业指导办公室提供了一个叫工作准备的（分词表定语从句的省略，后置）课程给学生。这个课程教会我们如何选择我们的职业生涯，如何规划我们的未来以及如何申请和面试工作。第二，更好的工作储备有利于学校的名誉。比如说，近年（状语，习惯后置句末）教育的竞争已经很大增加。如果大学能提供给学生更好的工作准备在他们开始工作前，越来越多的学生将愿意申请这些学校。工作准备项目也将创造出更多成功的毕业生，他们（后置定语从句）将愿意捐更多的钱给他们的母校。更多的资金将能让大学提升设备而且雇佣更好的老师（两个动词词组之间的并列结构）。所以，大学的整体水平将会上升，而且大学的名誉将会提高（这句话之间的并列结构，中间的and不可省略）。最后，更好的工作准备有益于整个社会。比方说，更好的工作储备将预备好学生让他们能有更多雄心（介词短语，状语后置）进入职场，激发（分词表伴随）他们创造更高级的产品。比方说，当我的堂兄在上海音乐学院读大四的时候，学校帮助他找了一份钢琴乐编曲的兼职工作。他很喜欢这个工作，而且他意识到他对为广播和电视演播室（介词短语表修饰，后置）作曲的热情。更多有灵感的员工意味着更有创造力的经济，这（后置定语从句）事实上能加强这个社会。所以，在大学更好的工作准备不但对学生和学校很重要，也对社会（并列结构）。鉴于上面的分析，很清楚的是（it做形式主语）学校应该提供给学生更好的工作准备在他们开始工作前，因为这有利于学生，大学和社会。Step 3:打开范文书，把刚才仿写的文章一段一段，一句一句，一字一字进行对照。对照工具：word上方“审阅”工具栏中的“修订”功能，打开即可。有些虽与原文不同，但只是同义词之间的互换不是问题。注意那些1）自己在仿写时脑海空白不知如何表达的语料 2）自己表达时候难免出现的中式表达（可能在用词可能在句型）这是要重点进行对照的。Nowadays, how to get a better job has become a popular topic among students and parents. Some people argue that universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working. Personally, I support this idea, because job preparation programs not only benefit students but also schools and society.First of all, better job preparation is beneficial for students to seek a job. For instance, thanks to the job training courses in my school, I now work as an editor for a multimedia production company. When I was a sophomore, the job guidance office provided a course called job preparation for students. It was this course that taught us how to choose our careers, how to plan our future, how to apply and how to interview for jobs. With the skills I learned in this course, I found a job before graduation.Secondly, better job preparation benefits schools reputation (fame). For example, the competition of education has increased greatly in recent years. If universities can offer students better job preparation before they start their careers, growing number of students would be willing to apply for those universities. Job preparation program will create more successful undergraduates as well, who will prefer to donate more money to their universities. More financial support (funding) will allow the school to promote facilities and hire better teachers. As a result, the whole level of the university wound rise and the reputation of the university will be enhanced.Finally, better job preparation benefits the society as a whole. For example, better job preparation make the students prepared and confident when they enter to workforce, inspiring them to create more advanced products. For instance, when my cousin was a senior in Shanghai Conservatory Institute, he found a part-time job as a piano composer with the help of the university. He enjoyed the job a lot and was aware of the passion of composing for the radio and television studio. More inspired employees means more efficient economy, which in fact strengthen the society. In a word, better job preparation at university is crucial not only for students and universities, but also for society.Considering the analysis above, it is clear that universities are supposed to give students better job preparation before the start of their careers, because it benefits students, universities and society.范文第3题Step 1:请对照学习范文。记忆好的语言表达，词汇搭配。Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Thebestwaytoimprovethequalityofeducationistoincreaseteachers salaries.The issue of how to improve the quality of education has attracted the public attention all over the world. Some may argue that raising teachers paycheck is the best way to achieve such goal. In my opinion, despite several benefits, this proposal is not the best solution.如何提高教学质量的（介词短语表修饰，后置）问题已经吸引了世界各地（状语，习惯后置句末）公众关注。有些人或许认为提高老师的工资（动名词做主语）是实现这个目标（to do表目的，后置）最好的方式。在我看来，虽然（后接名词，=in spite of）有一定的好处，这个提议不是最好的解决方案。Admittedly, raising teachers salaries is a good way to boost better education performance. Since a high salary represents a highly valued and appreciated job, to give teachers a more decent paycheck may improve their self-esteem and propel them to optimize their syllabus. Besides, a higher salary makes the job market more competitive. In the past, the brightest intellectuals may pick more challenging and profitable jobs; however, with the salary-raising policy, teachers would become more desirable. Since quality of teachers largely determines that of the educ