Miss Yu致全体7班Students的作文小贴士part 1.doc

Miss Yu致全体7班Students的作文小贴士part 1 O(_)O满分英语范文（需背诵）1. 假如你是李华,你的英国笔友上周来信说自己性格内向,不善与人沟通相处,并为此苦恼不已,请你以此为话题给他写一封回信安慰他.作文要求:1字数100左右 2:可以适当增加细节,以示全文连贯满分范文:Dear Jim,Im glad to have received the letter you sent me last week.As to your question in your letter. Id like to tell you its common for us students of middle school. I suffer from the same problem at one time. Therefore, you dont have to worry about it too much. If you want to make a difference, you can do the following things.Most important of all, you should try to communicate more with your friends and teachers actively to throw light on what you think of. Only in this way can your friends understand you more. And you can talk about what others care about and the things and persons they are interested in. Besides, helping others is of great importance for you, for others can be kind to you if you are friendly to them.Best wishes to you! Yours faithfully, Li HuaMiss Yu 范文点评：高分策略：1：书信格式正确2 ：文章连贯使用了如下经典连接词：As to your question in your letter（对于你信中提到的问题）承上启下的连贯了上下文；therefore（因此）；Most important of all(最重要的是)；Besides(另外)；For 因为3：使用了经典高中阶段重难点句型，其实这些在我们英语学习中经常遇见，能否让你的作文能够眼前一亮 关键在于是否能在学习中做个有心人 能够在英语作文中学以致用。如下：Its common for us students.对于我们学生来说这是很普遍的现象。Suffer from遭受（必修一的短语 你能想到吗？）Make a difference 做出改变，起作用，有影响；差别对待。（英语高考常见短语）A healthy diet makes a big difference to peoples health.健康的饮食对人的健康有重要的影响We should not make any difference between boys and girls. 我们应该对男孩女孩一视同仁猜猜：Make no difference是嘛意思捏？(o)/you should try to communicate more with your friends and teachers actively to throw light on what you think of.你应该积极的与你的朋友和老师交流来去说明你的想法。（这个句子用的非常好 有两个加分点1：throw light on= provide information / knowledge on 说明2：what you think of.运用了名词性从句的宾语从句）Only in this way can your friends understand you more（only 引导的状语从句的倒装）helping others is of great importance for you帮助别人对于你非常重要（1：动名词短语Helping others作主语， 大家在作文中往往忘记吧动词换成动名词作主语 记住：你的粗心往往会变成你的失分点 2：be of+名词=形容词 be of great importance绝对比very important 来的要出彩）4：字体潦草会把你的作文拉低到15分以下 。范文二：近来你们学校正努力创建和申报省绿色学校，请你据此给某英语报写一篇短文， 内容包括：1:建设绿色校园的重要性。2：绿色校园不仅仅指绿色环境。3：为了建设绿色校园，我们应该。Miss Yu 思路点评：这类作文属于半开放型作文要求1：围绕题目要求去构思2：题目内容要求其实提示了我们从：重要性=节能环保；绿色校园=绿色环境+绿色人文（和谐社会=师生 生生之间的和谐共处）；采取的措施（如何绿色校园=植树 节水 如何绿色人文=互相信任 互相帮助 互相尊重 Mutual trust and respect）.3要总结（Conclusion）这是加分点 可以这样总结：建设绿色校园需要每个人的努力。可以这样写：If everyone do his best to build a green campus , it is certain that our school will take on a new look.如果每个人都为建设绿色校园而努力，我们的学校必将会呈出展现的面貌。4：注意段落安排 语言简洁连贯 可以分条来叙述 这样不至于层次不清 或有重复现象范文展示：（需背诵）Miss YU会抽查大家背诵情况的_ Recently, our school is aiming at building a green campus. What is a green school? It means not only a green campus, but a “green” atmosphere for our study and life. For one thing, a green campus means more plants, less pollution and no waste. Each of us can do something, such as planting trees and flowers or just saving electricity and water in our daily life. It will make a big difference. For another thing, it is necessary for us students to make great efforts to create a harmonious atmosphere of mutual trust and respect between teachers and students. Besides, it is important to keep a friendly and supportive attitude to each other. Accordingly, if everyone does one thing for our school, well surely turn our school into a better one.Miss Yu满分范文点评：1. 条理清晰 符合题目要点要求2. 行文流畅 使用了经典连接词如：Recently最近 ；not onlybut also; For one thing一方面；for another thing另一方面；Besides= whats more=moreover另外；Accordingly=SO因此；总之= in a word=in brief=all in all=in short大家要学会使用这些经典连接词呦，有木有记住？( o?)？3. 使用出彩的高阶词汇短语 如：Aim at=target at 把。作为目标；瞄准 make a difference做出改变，起作用，有影响；差别对待。（英语高考常见短语）；create a harmonious atmosphere创造和谐氛围（这几个单词在作文中出现频率很高 你的作文里有了它们绝对很是出彩）mutual trust and respect互尊互信 keep a friendly and supportive attitude to each other.要友善帮助别人supportive 支持的4. 要想把作文写得出彩 来自平时点滴的积累 希望你们在英语学习中做个有心人5. 让你的作文字体给你争光 现在起 开始一点一点的改善你的英语字 别让它给你抹黑哇议论文常见格式：模版. 关于人们有不同的观点。一些人认为 There are different opinions among people as to _ .Some people suggest that _. 2. 俗话说（常言道），它是我们前辈的经历，但是，即使在今天， 它在许多场合仍然适用。 There is an old saying_. Its the experience of our forefathers，however，it is correct in many cases even today. 3. 现在，它们给我们的日常生活带来了许多危害。首先，； 其次，。更为糟糕的是。 Today, _ which have brought a lot of harms in our daily life. First, _Second,_. What makes things worse is that_. 4. 现在，很普遍，许多人喜欢，因为，另外（而且） 。 Nowadays，it is common to _. Many people like _ because _. Besides，_. 5. 任何事物都是有两面性，也不例外。它既有有利的一面，也有不 利的一面。 Everything has two sides and _ is not an exception，it has both advantages and disadvantages. 6. 关于人们的观点各不相同，一些人认为（说），在他们看 来， Peoples opinions about _ vary from person to person. Some people say that _.To them,_. 7. 人类正面临着一个严重的问题，这个问题变得越来越严重。 Man is now facing a big problem _ which is becoming more and more serious. 8. 已成为人的关注的热门话题，特别是在年青人当中，将引发激烈 的辩论。 _ has become a hot topic among people，especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way. 9. 在我们的日常生活中起着越来越重要的作用，它给我们带来了许 多好处，但同时也引发一些严重的问题。 _ has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life.it has brought us a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well. 10. 根据图表/数字/统计数字/表格中的百分比/图表/条形图/成形图可 以看出。很显然，但是为什么呢？ According to the figure/number/statistics/percentages in the /chart/bar graph/line/graph，it can be seen that_ while. Obviously，_，but why? （二）中间段落句 1. 相反，有一些人赞成，他们相信，而且，他们认为。 On the contrary，there are some people in favor of _.At the same time，they say_. 2. 但是，我认为这不是解决的好方法，比如。最糟糕的 是。 But I dont think it is a very good way to solve _.For example，_.Worst of all，_. 3. 对我们国家的发展和建设是必不可少的，（也是）非常重要的。 首先，。而且，最重要的是 _is necessary and important to our countrysDevelopment and construction. First，_.Whatsmore, _.Most important of all,_. 4. 有几个可供我们采纳的方法。首先，我们可以。 There are several measures for us to adopt. First, we can_ 5. 面临应该采取一系列行之有效的方法来。一方 面，另一方面， Confronted with_，we should take a series of effective measures to_. For one thing，_For another，_ 6. 早就应该拿出行动了。比如说，另外。所有这些方法肯定 会。 It is high time that something was done about it. For example. _.In addition. _.All these measures wil