2013届高考英语专线突破(书面表达短文改错高效仿真模拟--巅峰训练80页).doc

2013届高考英语专线突破（书面表达巅峰训练）1，第四部分：写作（共两节，满分40分）第一节 短文改错（共10小题；每小题1分，满分10分）Mrs. Williams, my next-door neighbor, have a big house with a beautiful garden in front of them. She is very proud of her house because of it is always clean and tidy. While cleaned the carpets one day she suddenly saw a little mice run across her dining room. She felt terrible ashamed, for she used to telling others that mice were found only in dirty houses. She quickly asked her daughter Jenny help catch the mouse. It takes them almost half an hour to catch the mouse. Afraid of being laughed at by other people around her, Mrs. Williams wanted her daughter to keep it the secret.第二节 书面表达（满分25分）最近， 校车的安全引起了社会的关注。 政府在征集校车安全的条例，请你用英语写一篇短文，提出合理建议并向英语周报投稿。要点如下：1 严期格限制乘坐人数；2 定期进行安全教育；3 设置专门停靠站点；4 严格挑选合格司机。5 注意，词数：100左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。改错：1.havehas 2.themit 3.of去掉 4.cleanedcleaning 5. micemouse 6.terribleterribly 7.tellingtell 8.加to9.takestook 10.thea 书面表达：2，第二节 短文改错（共10小题，每小题1.5分，满分15分）Dear Tom,Im very glad to learn from your e-mail that you and your sister will come to Xian and call on me on July. 1st. And Im terribly sorry that I cant meet you at the airport because I have to attend meeting in Beijing. Now let me to tell you the way to your home. When you got out of the airport, you can take Bus No.29 to YouYi Bus Station. Walk across the Friendship Street to the west, you can see abookstore at the corner. Turn to the left there and go straightly on. Then you can see a bank your left. The apartment building I live in is next to the bank. Find Room 502, which my mother will be waiting for you . Best regard to you all. Yours, Liu Mei第三节 书面表达（满分30分）假定你是中学生李华, 在搜狐微博上看到一位名叫Worryguy的中学生发布的博文。请你根据博文内容、写作要点和要求发布自己的观点。首页微博博客相册 播客我来说两句Worryguy: A parentsmeeting is always meaning a complaints meeting to a slow student. My parents will scold me whenever they come back from it. Now the mid-term exam is over and another terrible parentsmeeting is around corner. What shall I do? Help!微博通知我的评论我的邮箱 发布 表情 点名 图片 视频 写作要点：1. 表明自己的看法； 2. 陈述自己的理由（可举例说明）；3. 提出至少两条建议。要求：1. 短文须写在答题卡的指定区域。2. 短文词数不少于100（不含已写好的部分）。3. 内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯。 4. 书写需清晰、工整。Dear Worryguy, This is really a tough problem to deal with. In my opinion,_ Yours, LiHua短文改错：AndBut meeting 前加a 去掉to your-my got-get Walk-Walking straightlystraight bank后加on which-where(in which) regard-regards作文： Dear Worryguy, This is really a tough problem to deal with. In my opinion, you should not be afraid of a parents meeting. Instead, youd better take a proper attitude to it. In fact, a parents meeting is for the most part a communication meeting, where teachers and parents exchange information and opinions about students situations at school and home, which is beneficial to improving teaching quality. As for your problem, its advisable to have a good talk with your parents and teachers. While talking with your parents, you can focus on how hard you study (if it is the case) and why you failed this time or even ask them to help analyze your failure. When talking with your teachers, better ask them for the law of each subject and effective methods of learning them. Anyhow, improving your grades is the key to solving the problem. Yours,Li Hua3，第二节 短文改错（共10小题，每小题1.5分，满分15分）假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。增加：在缺词处加一个漏词符号（），并在其下面写出该加的词。删除：把多余的词用斜线 （）划掉。修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。注意：1.每处错误及修改均仅限一词；2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。Never should I forget the first English lesson giving by Miss Liu. On that day, when sheentered the classroom, we found out that she was a young and beautiful lady. Then sheintroduced her and said we shouldnt call her Teacher Liu but Miss. Liu. Late, she let us go to the blackboard and say something about ourselves in English on turn. When it was my turn, I felt so shy that I dont dare to say anything before the class. She went up to me and said kind, “Dont be afraid. I believe you can do well.” At last, I went to the blackboard. She praised me for that I had done.第三节 书面表达（满分30分）近年来尽管政府在改善居住上花了大量资金，但是住房问题仍然是中国许多大城市所面临的最严重问题之一。对此话题你班举行了热烈的讨论。一部分人建议：多造高层建筑(high-rise apartments)，一部分人认为：向地下发展。而你赞成前一种观点。你的理由： 1.建筑费用便宜； 2.久住地下对身体不利；3.地上阳光充足，地下只有人造光源你的结论： 提示：人造光源（artificial lighting）现请你以How to Solve the Housing Problem in Big Cities为题写120字以上的短文。,Never should I forget the first English lesson giving by Miss Liu. On that shall givenday, when sheentered the classroom, we found out that she was a young and beautiful lady. Then sheintroduced her and said we shouldnt call her Teacher herselfLiu but Miss. Liu. Late, she let us go to the blackboard and say something about Laterourselves in English on turn. When it was my turn, I felt so shy that I dont dare in didntto say anything before the class. She went up to me and said kind, Dont be kindlyafraid. I believe you can do well. At last, I went to the blackboard. She itpraised me for that I had donewhatIn recent years the government has spent a large sum of money in improving housing but the shortage of housing is one of the most serious problems facing many big cities in China. Weve discussed heatedly the topic “How to Solve the Housing Problem in Big Cities.”Some of us suggest building more high-rise apartments while others believe to develop underground housing areas. I am in favor of the former opinion. For one thing, it is cheaper to build above ground than below. For another, living underground for a long time will do harm to peoples health. Above all, people are unwilling to live underground with artificial lighting and they prefer to live above ground to enjoy the sunshine.Although there may be some other ways to solve the housing shortage problem, I believe to build more high-rise apartments is one of the promising solutions to the housing problem.一、评分原则1、本题总分为30分，按5个档次给分。2、评分时，应根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。4、评分时，应注意的主要内容：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文连贯性及语言的得体性。5、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。6、如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。二、内容要点：(略)三、各档次的给分范围和要求：第五档次（很好）：（25-30分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。-覆盖所有内容要点。-应用较多的语法结构和词汇。-语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。-有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（好）（19-24分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。-虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。-语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试复杂语法结构或词汇所致。-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档（适当）：（13-18）基本完成了试题规定的任务。-虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。第二档（较差）：（712分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务。-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。-语法结构单调，词汇知识有限。-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。-较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。第一档（差）：（1-6分）未完成试题规定的任务。-明显遗漏主要内容，写一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。-语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。-较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。-缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。信息未能传达给读者。0分未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少、无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。四、说明1. 内容要点可用不同方式表达 2. 对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分4，第四部分 写作书面表达某英文报社正在举办 “An Unforgettable Experience” 征文比赛。假设你是李华，你班参加全校班歌比赛获得一等奖。请根据所给提示写一篇120词左右的英语短文，向报社投稿。写作内容应包括： 1. 准备工作如: 选歌; 展现形式; 服装2. 简述成功原因及个人感受注意：1.短文开头语已给出，不计入总词数。2.短文中不要出现你的真实信息。An Unforgettable ExperienceI will never forget the day when our class won the first prize in the Class Theme Song Competition. _KeyI. WritingI will never forget the day when our class won the first prize in the Class Theme Song Competition. Proud as we are, it is how we prepared ourselves for the big day that impresses me most. Getting prepared for the competition was no easy work. It took us several days to decide on the song written by the “music genius” in our class accompanied by the melody of “When You Believe”. Then came the two weeks of practice, during which we learnt to cooperate with each other so as to sing a song of harmony in chorus. On top of that, what helped our class stood out were the creative style we showed on stage and the specially designed T-shirts we wore. Talking of the highlights of our performance, personally I think it is our enthusiasm and team work that make our class a success in the competition. Our enthusiasm put us forward even on stormy days while team work paved the way to better understanding and cooperation. With all the efforts made, not only do we enjoy a great success but we have a closer friendship with each other, which we will keep in mind for ever. 第二节 5，书面表达（满分30分） 目前，越来越多的中学生利用周末上各种各样的培训班或请家教。对于这一现象，存在两种不同观点：有些人认为有必要另一些人认为没有必要有老师辅导比自己学好有更多机会和老师互动可以弥补上课错过或没听懂的东西容易养成依赖习惯学生需要时间休息和娱乐导致有的学生在常规课堂上不认真听讲请您根据以上提示，以Are Training Classes or Tutors Necessary ?为题，写一篇120 词左右的短文，反映表中内容，并简要阐述自己的观点。文章开头已给出， 不计入总字数。参考词汇：家庭教师：tutor 要求：层次清晰，连贯流畅；表达灵活，不要逐字逐句翻译。文章开头已给出： Are Training Classes or Tutors Necessary ?Nowadays, more and more students attend different kinds of training classes or hire tutors to improve their grades at the weekends. Are Training Classes or Tutors Necessary ? Nowadays, more and more students attend different kinds of training classes or hire tutors to improve their grades at the weekends.Some think it necessary to do so. Firstly, its more effective to study with a teachers help than by themselves. Secondly, you can have more chances to communicate with teachers (there are more interaction between students and teachers.) . Besides, you can make up for what you miss or fail to understand in classes on weekdays. Others think it unnecessary. For one thing, students can easily form the habit of dependence. For another, students need time for rest and recreation at weekends. Whats worse, attending training classes or hiring tutors even causes some students not to listen attentively in their regular classes.In my opinion, whether a training class or tutor is needed just depends. If you are really very weak at or interested in a certain subject, maybe its OK for you. But be sure to choose a good and suitable class or teacher, otherwise it would be a waste of time and money.6，第四部分：书面表达第一节：完成句子（共10小题；每小题2分，满分20分）阅读下列各小题，根据所给的汉语句子，用句末括号内的英语单词完成句子。71. By the time he was twelve years old, he _ a chemistry lab of his own. (set) 他十二岁时，已经建立了自己的化学实验室。72. _ that China produces one third of the worlds cigarettes. (astonish)令人震惊的是全世界三分之一的香烟是由中国生产的。73. _ should be no reason for treating ones neighbors as strangers. （occupy）工作繁忙不应该成为“对面不相识”的借口。74. Rosalyn loves sports. She is proud _ competitions and to have broken a record by running 800 meters this year. (participate)罗莎琳热爱运动。她为今年参加比赛并打破800米赛跑的记录而感到骄傲。75. Not until we watched the Earth Day program on TV _ much about global warming. (learn)直到我们观看了地球日的电视节目，我们才了解了大量关于全球变暖的问题。76. The settlement is home to nearly 1,000 people, _ their village homes for a better life in the city. （leave）近千人在这一小社区居住，他们当中很多都是从农村老家来城市寻求更好的日子的。77. He arrived in New Orleans without a penny in his pocket _ that there were boats for South America. （find）他身无分文的来到新奥尔良时，却发现那里没有开往南美洲的船了。78. _ of over 400km per hour, the train can complete the 30-kilometre journey in eight minutes. （travel） 以每小时400多公里的速度行驶，所以这辆火车能在8分钟之内可以完成30公里的行程。79. When the survivor came to himself, he was eager to know _that saved him from the burning house. (be) 当生还者醒过来后，他急切的想知道到底是谁把他从燃烧的房子里救出来的。 80. Had he not broken the rules last week, he _ this week, which annoyed his mother. (fall)要是上周他没有违反纪律，这周他就不会掉队，这让他妈妈很懊恼。第二节：短文写作（共1题；满分30分）（原创）请根据以下提示，结合你生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文。 Life is a series of eventsboth good and bad. Just when we start to get comfortable with a person, a place or a situation, something comes along to change the recipe. The truly successful person expects the unexpected, and is prepared to make adjustments. 注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；除诗歌外，文体不限；内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；词数为120左右。_完成句子71. had set up 72. It is astonishing / People are astonished / What astonishes people is73. Being occupied with work 74. to have participated in75. did we learn 76. many of whom left 77. only to find 78. Travelling at a / the speed79. could have run 80. would not fall behind 短文写作评分标准第五档（很好，2530分）很好地完成了试题规定的任务；按要求写出了内容要点；语言结构和词汇选用恰当、丰富；语言错误极少；有效采用不同连接手段，层次清楚；格式和语域恰当；完全达到与目标读者交流的目的。第四档（好，1924分）较好地完成了试题规定的任务；包含基本内容要点，允许漏掉一到两个次要点；使用较为丰富的语法结构和词汇；语言较为准确，只在试图表达较复杂意义时才出现个别错误；采用了较适当的衔接手法，层次清楚；格式与语域较恰当；达到与目标读者交流的目的。第三档（适当，1318分）基本完成了试题规定的任务；包含多数内容要点，可能漏掉一些内容；应用的语法结构和词汇能基本满足任务需求；有一些语法及词汇错误，但不影响理解；采用了简单的衔接手法，内容较连贯，层次较清楚；格式与语域基本合理；基本达到与目标读者交流的目的。7，第四部分：书面表达 (共两节，满分40分)第一节：完成句子（共10小题；每小题2分，满分20分）阅读下列各小题，根据括号内的汉语提示，用句末括号内的英语单词完成句子，并将答案写在答题卡上的相应题号后。71. Our teachers often say whether we _ relies on our attitude.(achieve)我们老师常说我们能否实现目标取决于我们的态度。72. It was in the city where _ that he received his compulsory education. (live)他是在那个他曾经住过的城市接受的义务教育。 73. In response, Jiang Yu states that we hope the foreign countries dont _in South Sea dispute. (involve)姜瑜在回应中称我们希望外国不要卷入南中国海的争端。74. By the time _ , I will have finished the book.(come)到他回来时，我将完成这本书。75. _ at the meeting is important for you as well as for me. (present)出席这个会议对你对我都很重要。76. Out _of students, most of whom were once my sons classmates. (rush)一群学生冲了出来，他们大部分曾经是我儿子的同班同学。77. The weather is hotter and hotter; I would rather that _winter now. (be)天气愈来愈热，我宁愿现在是冬天。78. I _ there when the traffic accident occurred. (happen)车祸发生时我碰巧在那儿。 79. He didnt come to school yesterday _ that he was ill. (fact)他昨天没来上学是因为他生病了。80. Our new campus is _ of the old one. (size)我们的新校园是老校园的五倍大。 第二节：短文写作 (共1题，满分30分)请你就“物价上涨及中学生节省开支”这一话题写一篇发言稿，发表看法，并包括如下要点： (1) 受访者对物价上涨的反映；（2）你在日常生活中对物价上涨的体会； （3）中学生在日常生活中应如何精打细算，节省开支； （4）呼吁同学们从小事做起，发扬节约的中华美德。注意：1. 词数120左右；2发言稿中不能现出真实姓名和学校名称。参考词汇：受访者 respondents 美德virtue(s) Dear boys and girls, Its my great honour to make a speech here. Recently, the Peoples Bank of China conducted a quarterly survey on prices in 50 cities. _KEY71.can achieve our goal 72.he once lived73. get involved74. he comes back75. Being present 76. rushed a crowd/ a group 77. it were/was 78. happened to be 79. because of /owing to/ due to the fact 80. five times the sizeOne Possible Version: Dear boys and girls, Its my great honor to make a speech here. Recently, the Peoples Bank of China conducted a quarterly survey on prices in 50 cities. Nearly half of the respondents said they couldnt tolerate the increasing prices, while some others considered it OK although they acknowledged the truth. As a result, many families began to seek various ways to save money. The survey does draw my attention to the rapidly increasing prices in my daily life. Take food as an example, the prices of pork, beef, fish, chicken, as well as various vegetables, have risen at least 20%. It seems that money is flowing out of our pockets more quickly, but silently. Although we middle school students feel less stress than our parents do, we should also have a proper budget for our pocket money. For example, we can make the most of each exercise book and reuse some waste paper. Or we can also try to cut down our expenses on unnecessary magazines, CDs and so on. In a word, we can save money in many aspects in our daily life. All in all, saving money is a great Chinese virtue and it is especially needed in this period. Thank you!8, III 写作（共两节，满分40分）第一节 基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）近年来，我国校车安全事故频发，引发社会强烈关注与反思。请根据以下提示，