Basicwritingtraining写作基本训练.ppt

Basicwritingtraining Learntousesomecomplicatedsentencesandnon predicateverbs 近几年高考英语作文佳句赏析 节选 08年江苏卷Manypeoplesuggestthatparentsshouldlistenmoretotheirchild sotheywillunderstandthembetter andfinditeasytonarrowthegenerationgap 09年浙江卷Everythingdone theysatintheyardchattingwiththeelderlypeople 10年浙江卷Whiletherestofuswereenjoyingourleisuretimeincoolandcomfortablerooms shespentthewholeafternoonresearchingandselecting Howdoyoufindthesentencesabove 11年江苏卷1 Thepictureshowsusatouchingmomentwhenalittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmum 2 Allthisremindsmeofmymotherwhohasbeendoingwhatevershecouldtoletmehavethebest 12年江苏卷Toavoidsuchconflicts weshouldbekindtooneanother whichisessentialtoenjoyingaharmoniouslife Whydowefailtodoso Somemistakesweoftenmakeinourcomposition whenweareusingcomplicatedsentencesornon predicateverbs 1 Nomainclause Thekeeperwhohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime sohecouldkeepcalminthestorm Thekeeperhadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime sohecouldkeepcalminthestorm 2 Usecommainawrongway Theoldmanthoughtofhisson tearscamedownfromhisface Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings itismadeofglass Thehallwhichismadeofglassisdifferentfromallotherbuildings Theoldmanthoughtofhisson tearscomingdownfromhisface 3 Expressinanunnaturalway ThereareoverfiftystudentsinthisschoolwhoaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday OverfiftystudentsinthisschoolaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday 4 Puttoomanycompoundsentencestogethertosendinformation Weweredrivingoutintothecountry andwesawourEnglishteacherridinginabus andthebuswascrowded Itisabeautifulday andthesunisshiningandabreezeisblowing Itisabeautifuldaywiththesunshiningandabreezeblowing Asweweredrivingoutintothecountry wesawourEnglishteacherridinginacrowdedbus Willyou Expresswithonesentence Theboyisveryyoung Hedoesn tknowmuchaboutthesociety Theboyisveryyoung sohedoesn tknowmuchaboutthesociety Theboywhoisveryyoungdoesn tknowmuchaboutthesociety Expresswithonesentence Thequestionthatourteacherraisedtodaywasverydifficult Nooneinmyclasscouldanswerit Thequestionthatourteacherraisedtodaywassodifficultthatnooneinmyclasscouldanswerit Sodifficultwasthequestionraisedbyourteachertodaythatnooneinmyclasscouldanswerit Expresswithonesentence Ihavekeptthephotoattheplace Icanalwaysseethephotoattheplace Thephotoremindsmeofthedays IstudiedinBritaininthosedays IhavekeptthephotoattheplacewhereIcanalwaysseeit soitremindsmeofthedayswhenIstudiedinBritain IhavekeptthephotowhichremindsmeofthedayswhenIstudiedinBritainattheplacewhereIcanalwaysseeit Kateisanewstudent Shecomesfromanorthernprovince Shespeaksadialect Wefindithardtounderstandherdialect Kate anewstudentfromanorthernprovince speaksadialectwhichwefindhardtounderstand Expresswithonesentence 不是人人都能学好英语 小学生同时学汉语和英语反而会影响汉语学习 第一步 拆分成几个简单句 不是人人都能学好英语 小学生同时学汉语和英语 这会影响汉语学习 第二步 分别翻译这几个简单句 NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoollearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 ThatchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametimewillaffecttheirChinesestudy becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish Method1 NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 IfchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime thiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy Method2 becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish canyou Challengeyourself 要求 1 用两句话表达表格内容2 两句话要有连贯性 第一处要点 1 人越来越多 2 那些人用网络购物 第二处要点 网上购物可以节省很多时间和钱 第三处要点 1 随时随地2 方便快捷 第一处要点 1 人越来越多 2 那些人用网络购物 1 Therearemoreandmorepeople 2 Thosepeoplegoshoppingonline 1 Therearemoreandmorepeoplewhogoshoppingonline 2 Therearemoreandmorepeoplegoingshoppingonline Combinethetwo 第二处要点 网上购物可以节省很多时间和钱 Shoppingonlinesavestimeandmoney Combinethetwo 第三处要点 1 随时随地2 方便快捷 Itcanbedoneatanytimeandatanyplace Itisveryconvenienttodoshoppingonline Shoppingonlinecanbedoneatanytimeandatanyplace soitisveryconvenienttodoit 用两句话 连接三处要点 1 Therearemoreandmorepeoplewhogoshoppingonline 2 Shoppingonlinesavestimeandmoney 3 Shoppingonlinecanbedoneatanytimeandatanyplace soitisveryconvenienttodoit Thereasonwhymoreandmorepeoplearedoingshoppingonlineisthatitsavestimeandenergy Moreover sinceshoppingonlinecanbedoneatanytimeandatanyplace itisconvenienttodoit 1 一个乞丐在路边讨钱 askformoney 李先生匆忙赶路上班 没有注意到那个乞丐 2 乞丐很生气 伸出 stickout 拐杖 差点把李先生绊倒了 tripover 3 李先生意识到他是个残疾人 便在口袋里找钱给他 4 李先生拿出了一张百元钞票 a100 yuannote 突然一阵风把钞票吹到了空中 5 乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票 李先生站在那里 惊得合不拢嘴 实战演练 以下是你根据图画内容和题目要求 经过观察 整理排列成的五个信息块 请分别用一个句子表达出来 并组成一篇连贯性的短文 Exchangeanddiscussyourpartner scomposition thengiveeachotherascoreaccordingtothefollowingcriteria Pairwork AbeggarOneday whenMr Lihurriedonhiswaytowork abeggarontheroadsidewasaskingformoney butMr Lipaidnoattentiontohim Asaresult thebeggargotangryandstuckouthiswalkingstick whichalmosttrippedMr Liover Realizingthebeggarwasadisabledperson Mr Libe