书面表达之半开放式作文.ppt

书面表达之 半开放式作文 评分标准 假定你是中学生李华 在一位名叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上 你看到如下内容 请你根据博客内容 写作要点和要求 给这位家长回复 I mthemotherofafourteen year old Ihavearuleformydaughter beamongthetop5studentsorgetpunishedinonewayoranother Shehasbeendoingverywellinschool butsomefriendsofminekeeptellingmethatIputtoomuchpressureonher AmIwrong 写作要点 1 表明自己的看法 2 陈述自己的理由 可举例说明 3 提出至少两条建议 要求 1 短文须写在答题卡的指定区域 2 短文词数不少于100 不含已写好的部分 3 内容充实 结构完整 语意连贯 4 书写须清晰 工整 Hi TigerMom WhatpuzzlesyouisactuallyapuzzleformanyparentsinChina Myideais 假设你在某本杂志中 我爱读书 系列漫画里看到了下面这幅漫画 请在日记中描述这幅漫画 并谈谈你所受到的启迪 注意 1 字数要求 不少于120字 2 文中除了粽子可用汉语拼音外 其余词必须用英语描述 3 参考词汇 解开 包装纸等 unwrapSunnyThursdayMarch29 2012ThismorningwhenIreadamagazine Iwasdeeplyimpressedbyaseriesofcartoonswiththethemeof Ilovereading Amongthem thefollowingisthemostattractivetome 半 开放类作文 只给出主题 两三点提示 一段素材或漫画 然后由考生在此基础上充分发挥想象力 自由发挥 自由创作的一种文体 常见的 半 开放式作文命题形式 话题式漫画式 话题式 半 开放作文 围绕题目中所给的特定的话题说明 叙述 举例 最后谈谈自己的感想或发表自己的看法 漫画式 半 开放作文 要求考生根据一定提示 一般是一段20余字的英文提示和一幅漫画 写一篇短文 如此设计该题型目的是要求考生充分发挥想象力和创造力 自由拓展主题 组织篇章结构 这样既能体现出学生活跃的思维 又能表现出他们的逻辑思维能力和灵活运用英语的能力 从而把对考生的写作能力的考查上升到了一个新的高度 漫画式 半 开放作文的写作步骤第一步 描述漫画内容描述漫画内容的基本条件是看懂漫画 要求是 审图要准 定位要清 描述时言简意赅 不可越位 要注意 不要花太多时间挖掘图画深意 常用句式 Inthepicture thereis Asisvividlyportrayedinthepicture Fromthepicturewecanseethat Ascanbeseenfromthepicture Thepicturedescribesaninteresting acommonphenomenonthat Thepicturetriestotellusthat Ps 傻瓜开头句 Whataninterestingpicture 很多范文还就喜欢这个开头 第二步 阐述对漫画的理解所谓对漫画的理解 是指围绕漫画反映的基本事实进行较为细致的解释和自己的看法 感想或人生感悟等 要求是 逻辑清晰 合情合理 挖掘漫画所反映出的社会现象和蕴含的哲理常用句式 Itseemsveryridiculousthat However thiskindofstoryisperformedeverywhere Whatthepictureshowsistheexactreflectionof Theimpliedmeaningofthepictureshouldbetakenintoaccountseriously Andthesocialproblemhasarousedgreatconcernamong Theremay mightbethreefactorswhichcontributeto accountfor areresponsibleforthisphenomenon Firstofall Andthenthesecondreasonisthat Thelastreason Ithink is 对漫画中反映的问题作出评价或建议常用句式 AsfarasI mconcerned Inmyopinion Frommypointofview Onmypart Somemeasuresasfollowsshouldbetakentodealwith Onlyintheseways canwesolvetheproblemof Itisbetter advisableto Iconsideritnecessary 半开放式作文的语篇结构 Part1 描述漫画 有的放矢 中心突出 奠定基础 三分之一 Part2 解图和议论 与描图呼应 推理过程 怎样想 为什么这样想 三分之二 Part3 概括论点 有时还可以联系自己 写漫画性开放作文不变的特点人称 图片描述用第三人称 自己观点用第一人称时态 描图用一般现在时 解图一般现在时 议论和联系自己用一般现在时和一般将来时 变化的是 话题 2009北京高考根据下面提示 写一篇短文 字数不少于50 InyourspokenEnglishclass yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit 写作思路 1 图画中的要素是什么 人 桌子 面条 叉子 2 要素之间有何关系 他在做什么 3 如何理解这幅图 把两只叉子当筷子用 模仿 4 从中得到什么观点 选择正确工具和方法 不能盲目模仿 篇章结构 阐释图片内容 表达自己的想法 可接受的观点 做事要用正确合适的方法 工具 不要盲目模仿别人 复杂不都是好事 在某些情况下 简单是好的解决方法 随着环境的不同而改变思维和方法 入乡随俗 不同国家有不同的文化 要了解和尊重外国习俗 中西文化虽然都很好 但是若结合不好 后果则会更糟 不可接受的观点 多实践 努力坚持到最后就能成功 做事注意力要集中 光学知识不行 还要学会运用 父母太溺爱孩子 以至于孩子生活不能自理 要学会独立 加强中西文化的交流 多教外国人中国的文化 呼吁保护中国的传统文化 Whataninterestingpicture AWesternyoungman sittingatatable isreadytoeatabowlofnoodles HeisholdingtwoforksthesamewayasweChineseholdchopsticks Heistryingsohardtopickupthenoodlesthatheissweatingalot Atfirstglance Ithinkit sabitfunny forweChinesetakeitforgrantedthatchopsticksarethetoolsforeatingnoodles Themaninthepictureistryingtocopyus Obviouslyheisdoingitthehardway Maybeusingoneforkwilldoabetterjob Inmyopinion wedon tneedtocopyothers waysofthinking Sometimesasimplerwayofdoingthingsmaybeabetterway 考生的主要问题 1 审题 看不懂图 造成立意错误 只有描图 没有议论 或是只有议论 没有描图 2 写作技巧 描图和议论脱节 展开议论时 表述不清 逻辑混乱 议论空洞 缺乏内容 3 思维能力 比较简单 不够活跃 4 语言基本功 时态 单词拼写错误多 InanEnglishspeechcompetition youareaskedtodescribethefollowingpictureandexplaintothejudgeshowyouunderstandit 积极合理的立意 不能自私互相帮助承担责任团结就是力量面对共同问题时不要推卸责任解决共同的问题 清楚共同的垃圾老鼠是世界环境的破坏者 各国国家之间不要自私要合作 停止破坏环境 保护世界共同环境 不可接受的立意 中西方文化交流单方面帮助别人自扫门前雪父子关系不合 老鼠做协调人父子对待问题和困难 有不同方法 缺乏沟通 老鼠在同区域 Ascanbeseeninthepicture twomenareholdingsticksreadytokillthemouse Whentheydrivethemousetothecommonarea bothofthemexpecttheothertocatchit Iftheyworktogether theywillsurelykillthemouse Thepicturetellsusthatweshouldcooperatetoovercomethedifficulties Thetwomenarejustlikewestudentsandthemouseisjustlikethedifficultiessharedbyus Infaceofdifficulties eachofusshouldtakeonourownresponsibilityandworktogethertoachievesuccess Justasanoldsayinggoes unityisstrength Onlywhenweworktogetherwillsuccesscome Onepossibleversion 互助 半开放作文写作建议 1 学会理解漫画 2 掌握漫画类开放作文的篇章结构 3 培养逻辑思维意识 4 鼓励和锻炼发散思维 5 养成深层思维的习惯 形成正确的世界观 升华文章主题 6 扎实的语言基础知识 良好的逻辑思维能力 扎实的语言基本功 字多字好 压迫力 切题点全 硬道理 无错无改 装美丽 虎头豹尾 震撼力 按序分段 领导力 靓词靓句 最给力 作文高分必备要素 10年西城区一模开放作文 Asisshowninthepicture ahalf emptybottleisgoingtostickalabelof full onitsbody feelingproudandconfident Thepictureseemstobereflectingakindofsocialphenomenon Wemightoftenmeetsomepeoplewholookconfident tryingtoimpressotherswiththeir rich knowledge However justlikethebottleinthepicture whattheyreallyknowisjustalittle Whattheyactuallyhaveintheirheadisfarfromenough Asanoldsayinggoes emptybottlesmaketheloudestnoise Therefore it swisetoenrichourselveswithknowledgeandtrytomakeourheadfull 参考词汇 label标签 10年朝阳区一模开放作文提示词 放大镜 magnifier Ascanheseeninthepicture thereisasmallspotonthetablewhileamanislookingatitwithamagnifier Throughthemagnifier thespotseemsbiggerandclearer Thepicturehasareflectioninourdailylife Thespotisjustlikeaperson sstrongpointorweakpoint Ifweenlargeone sstrongpoint wemayrecognizeitandcanfindsomethingworthlearningfromtheperson Onthecontrary ifhisweakpointisalwaysfocusedon hewillfeeldiscouraged whichpreventshimfrommakingprogress Inmyopinion weshouldmakeitclearwherethemagnifierisusedandwhatcanbeenlarged 10年宣武区一模开放作文 Inthepicture wecanseeamanpickingapples Butinordertopicktheapples hecutsdownthetree Thepicturewantstotellusthatwhateverwedo weshouldn tonlyfocusonwhatwearedoingatpresent Ifweneglectourfuture we llendupinfailure Justlikethemaninthepicture althoughhecangetapplesthistime hewillnevergetfruitsfromthetreeagain Thepictureremindsmeoftheenvironmentalproblems Ifwepaynoattentiontotheenvironmentjustinordertoearnmoremoneynow howcanweliveahappylifeinthedirtysurroundings Sotrytothinkaboutourfuturewhendoingthings 10年东城区一模开放作文 参考词汇 playhopscotch跳房子 Inthepictureweseeagroupofchildrenplayinghopscotchhappilywhileaboyissittinginfrontofhiscomputer fullyabsorbedinagame Thispictureintendstoshowhowchildrentodayandinthepastspendtheirfreetime Intheolddays therewasnomodernequipmentsuchasTVsetsorcomputers sochildrenkilledtime playinggamesoutdoors Withthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnology childrenaresoattractedbycomputergamesthattheybecomeaddictedandstayinfrontofthescreenalldaylong Unlikethekidsplayinghopscotch ateamgame theboywhotendstospendmoretimealoneeasilydevelopspsychologicalproblemssuchasalackofasenseofcooperationandcommunicationskills Soinmyopinion modernsciencemaynotbenefitpeople 10年丰台区一模开放作文 Whataninterestingpicture Aboyissleepingonalargeopenedbookwithsheetsofpaperandapairofglassesbesidehim Hemusthavedonesomereadingbeforefallingasleep Besides thesweetsmileonhisfaceshowsthatheissatisfiedwithwhathehasgainedfromthebooks Tomyunderstanding thepictureintendstotellustheimportanceofdoingsomereading Wecanincreaseourknowledge broadenthemind enrichourlifeandmakeourselvesrelaxedbyreadingbooks Asastudent Ithinkweshouldreadasmanygoodbooksaspossible Onlyinthisway canweimproveourselvesgreatly 10年崇文区一模开放作文 Fromthepicturewecanseethatabunchofsticksstaytogetherandlookhappy whileonestickisaloneandlooksupset Ithinkthepictureconveysthemessagethatworkingtogethercanbringpeoplehappiness Everyonedreamsoflivingahappylifeforever However itisimpossibletoenjoylifebyoneselflikethelonelystickinthepicture Ifheorsheworkstogetherwithhisorherteammatesorpeers heorshewillcertainlybeimpressedandcheerup Inmyopinion wehavetorealizetheimportanceofteamworkandtrytoinvolveourselvesintheactivitiesasmuchaspossible 10年海淀区一模开放作文 Inthepicture thereisacup whichisusuallypresentedtothewinnersinsportscompetitions Thecupisdefinitelyasymbolofgreatsuccess Butwhatmakesmepuzzledisthatamagnifyingglassisusedtoseeitslightscratchonthecup whichisnotatallobvious WhatIseeinthispictureremindsmeofpeoplewhouseamagnifyingglasstoseethefaultsinothers Thosepeopleareusuallyverydemandingandpicky Theyonlyseethe scratches insteadofthewholecup Asweallknow everyonehasbothstrengthsandweaknesses Therefore weshouldbeobjectiveaboutothers achievementsratherthanfindfaultswiththemonpurpose Onlyinthiswaycanharmonybeachievedandconflictsbeavoided 提示词 放大镜magnifyingglass 10年石景山区一模开放作文 FromthepictureIcanseeaboytrappedbyaheavystone onwhich Laziness wassaid Oneoftheboy shandsisholdingaballoon whichresemblesthe talent However theballooncan thelphimflyupbecauseoftheheavestonedownbelow Thepicturereallysendsamessagetous Evenifyouaregiftedtosomedegree youcan tjustrelyonyourtalent Talentdoessomesupporttoyoursuccess butcan tguaranteeunlessyoupayforthataswell Workinghardisthebasetomakesureyoucanreachyourgoal So doyouwantyourdreamtocometrue Youshouldtryhardevenifyouarequitebright Inthepicture twogoatsaretiedtoeachotherwitharope Theybothseesomegrassinoppositedirections andtrytopulltogettheirownfood Theyareunsuccessful becausetheropeistooshorttoallowthemtoeatthefoodatthesametime Thepictureistryingtotellusthatcooperationisbetterthanconflict Bothofthegoatswanttheirfoodatthesametime whichhasformedaconflictbetweenthem However iftheydecidetocooperateandeatthegrassontheleftfirst andthenthegrassontheright theywillbothbeabletogettheirfood Thusthingswillturnintoa win win double win situation Therefore rememberthatsometimesourgoalisnotthatwegetsomethingandtheothergetsnothing butthatallpeoplegetwhattheywant Cooperationwillbenefiteveryone Inthepicture wecanseeacircleofbricksstandingnexttoeachother Thefirstbrickontherightisfallingdown causingthefallingofthenextone Intheend thewholecirclewillberuined Thepictureconveysamessagethatthesuccessofaprojectdependsoneachindividualstep Wheneachindividualstepisgivenfullattention itisquitelikelythatthewholeprojectwillbeasuccess Inthesameway amistakeinonestepmayleadtoacompletefailureofthewholeproject asisshowninthepicture Soea