河南省郑州市2014高考英语一轮 短文改错、书面表达训练（6）

1 郑州市郑州市 20142014 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 高考英语短文改错 书面表达一轮训练 6 6 附参考范文 附参考范文 一 A few days ago Miss Wang was going home by bike While he was76 riding in the street she saw the man with a knife in his hand and his 77 face covering with a piece of cloth running towards her The man 78 took her handbag out of the basket of her bike and ran away before 79 she could do anything There was no one she could turn for help at 80 that time for it was very late at night Lucky she had her mobile 81 phone at hand Immediately when she took it out and phoned the 82 police She told them what the man was like and in which directions 83 he had run The police came very quickly and catch the robber Miss 84 Wang got her handbag back and felt very grateful for the police had 85 done for her 一 76 he she 77 第二个 the a 78 covering covered 79 80 turn to 81 Lucky luckily 82 去掉 when 83 directions direction 2 84 catch caught 85 for what 结束 A good face is a letter of recommendation Some people say beauty is just a skin deep I don t quite agree with them Good appearance often makes a big difference in social communication competition finding jobs and so on Not only can good appearance help you become more confident but also it helps you be impressed If you want to get a good job the first sight is important Physical beauty is probable to draw much attention However we have to face this problem We have no right to choose our appearance When necessary we can make up ourselves If you think doing this is a good way to improve your confidence just do what you really want to regardless others opinion It is worth all the money and time Facing a variety of social pressures we young people should build confidence Confidence is the key to success In a word you may not be the most beautiful one but you can be the most attractive one you may not the best one but you can be the most confident one Show yourself and chances will kiss you in time 点评 爱美之心人皆有之 我们追求美 创造美 一副好脸孔就是一封介绍信 作者 围绕这一主题进行阐述 在现代社会里 美丽的外表在社交 竞争 求职等方面有着不可低 估的作用 作者立意大胆 构思巧妙 很有个性 文章叙述清楚 层次分明 过渡自然 在 语言表达上 运用倒装句 排比句等句式 增强了文章的感染力 文中语言错误有两处 probable 改为 likely probable 不能用某人或某物作主语 常用 it 作形式主语 构成 it is probable for sb to do sth 结构 regardless 之后 加 of regardless of 是复合介词 意为 不理会 不顾 结束 201 唐山联考 When I was a child my mom was pushed me to study hard 1 hoping I could get a chance to go to college I experience2 pressure for the first time I did that my mom expected3 because I didn t want to let her off I was born to a poor4 peasant family but I really knew life was not easy All the5 3 things my mother did was the result of her hope that I could6 lead better life in the future As the saying goes No pains7 no gains I was finally able to meet my mother expectations and8 have a chance to go to college Thanks to my mother s push and the 9 pressure I made it Now I no longer think pressure is a good thing 10 答案与解析 1 去掉第二个 was 此处不用被动语态 故 was 多余 2 experience experienced 此处应用一般过去时态 与全文时态保持一致 3 that what 这里用 what 引导宾语从句并在从句中作宾语 that 没有这种用法 4 off down 结合上下文可知此处意为 我不想让她失望 故应用 let sb down 表示 让某人失望 5 but and 或 so 此处应为顺承关系而非转折关系 故将 but 改为 and 或 so 6 was were 此处主语为 all the things 故应用 were 7 better 前加 a lead a better life 表示 过一种更好的生活 8 mother mother s 此处表示 达到了妈妈的期望 故应用其所有格形式 9 10 good bad 根据上文可知此处是指 我不再认为压力是一件坏事 故应将 good 改为 bad 结束 怎样做高考英语书面表达题 书面表达 是近期英语高考试卷的最后一项大题 所占分值很大 30 分 做好这一 题目对于考生取得理想的英语成绩至关重要 书面表达 是考察考生综合运用英语能力的一种题型 根据其一般规律 它要求考生 对所给情景和要求写一篇书面材料 做到所写的内容符合所给的情景和要求 文理通顺 它 4 既象作文 又不完全是作文 因为考生不能离开情景和要求自行立意 选材 随意发挥 它 类似翻译 但又不同于翻译 因为考生必须根据需要进行适当的发挥 因而有较大的灵活性 所以在做这种题目时 要掌握一个总的原则是 不漏 不错 不多写 不乱写 具体地 则从以下四个方面去考虑 着手 1 读题 明确要求 做好必要的准备工作 高考的书面表达 题材较多 有给文字背 景材料的 有看图作文的 还有两者皆而有之的 对于文字背景材料 考生要仔细阅读 看 懂题目要求 并对材料进行必要的删减 文字材料中有的是有用信息 有的是无用信息 不 进行必要的删减 则会使做出来的书面表达轻者增加了错误的可能性 重者文不对题 逻辑 不清 如下面一篇书面表达 请试着训练读题能力 说明 假定你名叫陈芳 是北京市二中学生 你舅舅曾在你所在的学校读过书 现在国外学习 请用英语写封回信给他 谈谈母校的近况 内容要点如下 学校在你舅舅离校五年后发生了很大变化 旧房拆除 新建了几座教学楼 并扩建了实 验大楼 操场已延伸到了河边 实验大楼设施 facilities 先进 除了有化学 物理 生 物实验室外 还有计算机房及语言实验室 学校鼓励发展学生的各种兴趣 学生们不再象以前那样整天埋头于书本之中 他们有更 多的时间参加各种活动 学校生活丰富多彩 注意 1 信中包括所给内容要点 但不要逐条译成英语 2 长度 80 120 个词 3 信的开头已给出 不计入总词数 No 3 Middle School Beijing July 18 1992 My dear uncle 5 Glad to hear from you again Since you miss your old school ever so much I ll tell you something about it 经过读题 进行必要的删减 内容要点以上的都是属于基本情况 要给予删减 文中不 作反映 内容要点在文中都必须一一反映出来 绝不能漏掉其中一个信息点 若有遗漏 按 阅卷要求则要扣大分 2 3 分 有的考生不读题 不审题 全部文字材料都一一给予译出 弄得啼笑皆非 对于看图作文 考生更应首先要读题 要看懂图中的主题 不应被图中其它次要的内容 所缠住 裹足不前 或走题跑题 考试中所给的图 有的是漫画式的 有的写真式的 漫画 的一般主题鲜明 画中多余的内容很少 考生一般读起来较为容易 也较易于做出必要的删 减 然而写真式的图画 其中与主题无关的内容较多 学生容易拣了芝麻丢西瓜 纠缠于细 小问题上而不能自拔 2 组织 进行必要的语言准备 读题工作结束后 考生要就提供的信息或画面进行语 言上的组织 这一环节非常重要 对 书面表达 的流畅和符合逻辑是举足轻重 读题的核 心工作是作必要的删减 组织的主要工作是作适当的补充 给框架补 血 补 肉 使所 要写出来的文章意思连贯 语言畅通 逻辑严密 还是举前面的例子 此题书面表达要求是写封信 信的开头部分已给出 中间部分可以 根据所给材料进行加工 因材料本身已经关系密切 意思连贯 不需添加内容 但结尾部 分只能由考生自行组织 学校发生了很大的变化 旧貌换新颜 理所当然应该邀请舅舅回母 校亲眼目睹 因此 经过语言组织加工 结尾部分加上这一内容 与情景 情理相符 这不 是多此一举 而是本身的要求 还是画龙点睛之笔 3 转换 进入实质性的语言加工阶段 要做好这一阶段的工作 关键是掌握这么几条 原则 多用简单句 少用复合句 多用短句 少用长句 讲究简明扼要 摒弃烦琐复杂 意 思混浊不清 这一阶段是得分最终高低的关键所在 因此 除了掌握以上重要的原则外 还 应在具体操作中注意选择正确的主语人称和动词的时态 多用贴切的固定短语 尽量使用自 己 拿手 的句子 经常留意句子的语法是否符合要求 从更高要求来说 用英语思维并一 气呵成地完成书面表达是最佳方法 这是上上策 但对于大多数英语水平尚未达到这一步的 考生来说 转换过程中进行有效的控制是非常必要的 只有进行这样的控制 才能有效地控 制错误的发生 才能少扣分 多得分 4 检查 书面表达 的最后一道工序 最后一道工序意味着一旦稍有疏忽 很难再有 弥补 也就无法挽回 因此 仔细认真地检查对于最终的得分是十分重要的 在检查过程中 应注意以下几个方面 1 信息点是否完整 有没有遗漏 根据评分标准 漏信息点是要扣大分的 2 3 分 要细致小心 一一检查 确保无一遗漏 2 语法正确 语法包括两个方面 一是词法 二是句法 词法方面主要检查时态 6 语态 主谓一致 冠词 名词单复数和词语搭配等 句法方面主要检查是否使用一些熟悉句 型 特别是尽力使用简单句这一原则贯彻得如何 总之 要做好 书面表达 是一件并非容易的事情 它需要平时的积累 需要考生在平 时的英语学习中加强训练 以求水到渠成之功 当然 考前的归纳和总结也十分重要 结束 高考英语作文精选范文 看图作文类 10 下面的饼状图 pie chat 显示了你对你校学生兴趣爱好的调查结果 请你用英语给 English Weekly 写一篇短文 报道你的调查结果 并对此结果发表你的看法或建议 词 数 120 左右 首句已给出 不计入词数 A recent survey shows what the students of our school like to do in their spare time From the pie chat we can see 53 of the students like sports so doing sports is the most popular activity in our school The second popular activity for students is surfing the Internet and 36 of the students have interest in it Only a few students about 8 percent of them take reading as a hobby And even fewer are fond of playing musical instruments In my point of view our school should have more sports facilities built to satisfy the need of the students Guidance should be given to students on surfing the Internet and ways must be found to arouse students interests in reading and music 结束 高考英语作文精选范文 看图作文类 11 阅读下面漫画 先对漫画的内容进行描述 然后对这一现象发表自己的看法 100 词左 右 参考词汇 西瓜皮 water melon skin 长凳 bench The boy and the girl in the picture sat on a 7 bench talking merrily while eating a water melon When they went away they left the melon s skin on the bench making it very dirty They didn t want to take any trouble to throw it into the dustbin although it was very near where they were sitting Instead they said that there would be someone who should clean the rubbish However what they did makes others look down upon them If everyone behaves in this way the world will be a big rubbish dump with flies flying round and people will live in a world of diseases Besides it will be impossible for dustmen to clean the world woth such people living in it 结束 高考英语作文精选范文 应用文类 I 应用文类 1 外籍教师 Lynne 任教期满准备回国 学校答应派车送她去机场 她在临行前一天写了张 便条提醒办公室李老师 1 请检查 check on 明天的车是否落实 提醒司机 remind sb of sth 提醒某人做某事 2 她之所以要确定一下 是因为太早不好叫出租车 3 感谢费心 并感谢一年来的关 心 4 在学校一年来 生活愉快 难忘 很可能再来 5 留下一些英语书给贵校图书馆 希望对学生有用 字数 100 120 个词 Hi Mr Li Could you please check on the car to take me to the airport Please remind the car driver of this I want to be sure of this car because it will be too early in the morning to call a taxi if the school car doesn t show up I am sorry to trouble you again Here I thank you again for all that you have done for me during my stay in your school I really enjoy teaching here and will never forget the day I spent with my students Probably I will come back some day I leave some English books to your library I hope they will be useful to your students Yours Lynne 结束 高考英语作文精选范文 应用文类 2 假设你是李华 最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应迁出市区 以下是你 所在班级讨论的情况 请你给该报写一封信 反映讨论结果 赞成迁出 反对迁出 游客多 交通堵塞 建于 1906 年 中外闻名 郊区环境好 搬迁易造成动物死亡 注意 1 词数 100 字左右 信的开头已为你写好 2 可根据内容要点适当增加细节 以使行文连贯 8 3 参考词汇 郊区 suburb June 3 2005 Dear Editor Recently our class have had a heated discussion about whether the Beijing Zoo should be moved out of the city Some of my classmates are in favor of the move They say large crowds of tourists to the zoo will result in traffic jams They also say that once moved animals will have more space and better living conditions in the suburbs However other students are against the idea saying that the Beijing Zoo built in 1906 has a history of 100 years and is well known at home and abroad So it should remain where it is What s more moving may cause the death of some animals To move or not this is a big decision which has to be made by people in Beijing Yours truly Li Hua 结束 高考英语书面表达讲义 表格作文 3 25 min 2012 师大附中月考 假如你是红星村的李华 家乡人民决定开发农业旅游 邀请你参 与策划红星生态山庄旅游项目 并请你写一篇英语文章向旅游者推介红星生态山庄 地理位置 长沙市以北 35 公里处 占地面积 15 平方公里 北面靠山 湘江 从村边经过 主要产品茶叶 绿色蔬菜 鱼等 娱乐休闲项目钓鱼 生态旅游有利 条件 不少于两条 参考词汇 ecological village 注意 自拟标题 词数不少于 120 9 参考范文 One possible version A village like no other Do you feel tired after a week s hard work in the noisy city Why not visit Red Star Ecological Village and try something different to relax yourself Red Star Ecological Village is a beautiful and quiet village located 35 10 kilometers north of Changsha which only takes approximately 30 minutes drive from the center of the city It covers an area of 15 kilometers It is a place where you can see many big pine trees in the mountains in the north where you can see a lot of ducks on the Xiangjiang River and where you can join the villagers picking up green tea leaves and growing vegetables in the garden If you are a fishing lover you can go fishing in the pond and barbecue what you get in the water under the big trees It is really fantastic to enjoy your lunch in the open air with your family and friends talking and laughing Whether you are looking to try green food or enjoy quiet country life Red Star Ecological Village is the place for you Come to Red Star Ecological Village and try something different to relax yourself 结束 短文改错 第一节 短文改错 共 10 小题 假如英语课上老师要求同学们交换修改作文 请你修改你同桌写的作文 文中共有十处 语言错误 要求你在错误的地方增加 删除或修改某个词 增加 在缺词处加上一个漏字符号 并在其下面写上该加的词 删除 把多余的词用斜线 划掉 修改 在错的词下划一横线 并在该词下面写上修改后的词 注意 1 每处错误及修改均仅限一词 2 只允许修改十处 多者 从第 11 处起 不计分 I saw an accident happened on my way to home this afternoon A girl was crossing the street on a zebra crossing while a young man drove a mot