高考英语开放作文讲解

开放作文 2010年开放式作文 生活 社会 请根据下面提示 写一篇短文 InyourspokenEnglishclass yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit 开放作文 15分 分为四档 第一档 13 15第二档 9 12第三档 4 8第四档 1 3以内容和语言定档定分 第二档 9 12 基本完成了试题规定的任务 内容 逻辑和交际等方面基本符合要求 所用语法和词汇满足了任务的要求 语法或用词方面有一些错误 但不影响理解 基本达到了预期的写作目的 第三档 4 8 未恰当完成试题规定的任务 表达未能切题 所用词汇有限 语法或用词方面的错误影响了对写作内容的理解 未能清楚地传达信息 开放作文评分原则 以内容和语言定档定分 立意明确 逻辑清晰 立意 细节描述 语言达意 2010年北京卷请根据下面提示 写一篇短文 词数不少于50 InyourspokenEnglishclass yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit 立意 细节描述 立意1 勇于克服困难 小树在不规则大楼中间顽强生长 立意2 成功来自于不懈的努力 小树努力克服各种困难 最终获取了阳光 立意3 多给孩子成长的空间 楼房的不规则造成了小树的扭曲 立意 细节描述 把图中的内容描述清楚 4 6分过渡句 1 2分含义 2 5分 1描图句 Inthepicture Thepictureshowsthat Ascanbeseenfromthepicture Aswecanseeinthepicture FromthepictureIcansee Asis vividly showninthepicture 怎样用语言描述图片 在描述图片时 推荐一下三种模式 a 常量主语推进模式例1 Whataninterestingpictureitis Whatastrangepictureitis Atreeistwistedbytwoclosely locatedbuildings Itbendsinthemiddle Butitstruggles triesitsbest allthewaytoreachthesky theSun Whataninterestingpictureitis Howinterestingthispictureis Atreeisencircled surrounded bytwoclosely locatedbuildings Itcannotgrowwell Itbendsinthemiddle Butittrieshardtoreachthesky theSun Whataninterestingpictureitis Atreeisstandingbetweentwoneighbouringbuildings Thetreeisnotstraight outofstraight bendsinthemiddle becauseitisaffectedbythebuildings Butitstruggles triesitsbest allthewaytoreachthesky theSun b 总说 分说 总说 推进模式例1 Inthispicture wecanseetwobuildings atree and thesun Thetwobuildingsarecloselylocatedtoeachother arecloselystandingoppositetoeachother Thetreebendsinthemiddleandsqueezesitswayoutofthebuildingssoastogetmoresunshine 例2 Inthispicture wecanseetwobuildings atree and thesun Thetwobuildingsarelocatedoppositetoeachother Thetreeisstandingbetweenthetwobuildingsandbendsinthemiddle Thesunisshiningabovethetree Thoughtwistedbythesetwobuildings thetreestillstrugglesallthewayuptotheair 过渡句 描述图片 个人看法 如 Thispicturetellsusthat Whatimpressesmemostaboutthispictureisthat Thispicturemeansthat Thepicturemakesmethinkof Thispictureshowsusthat Thepicturerevealsthefactthat Thispicturedemonstratesthat Thispictureremindsmeof Thispictureintendstotellusthat Thesituationinoursocietyisthesameaswhatthepictureportrays MorethoughtscanbefiguredoutfromthispictureFromthispicturewefind begintorealize that Thepictureconveysanimportantmessagetous Thepictureconveysadeepmessagethat Whatthepictureconveystousisthat 意义延伸 Icon Index a 常量主语推进模式例1 Formypart thispictureintendstotellushowtopursuesuccessinreality withthetreestandingfor thoseindifficulties andthetwobulidingsforbarriersandfrust