初中英语作文Afunnyweekend.评析

第 1 页 共 3 页 初中英语作文初中英语作文 Afunnyweekend Afunnyweekend 评析评析 A funny weekend On Saturday morning I visited my grandparents then I watched TV at grandparent s home I was hungry grandma was kind to me she cooked lunch for me After lunch I went for a walk at park I had fun with them at there Two hours latered I went home On Saturday night Isaw an interesting movie with my friends Sunday was came In the morning Idid my homework and studied forthe English test In the afternoon I went to the library and read about history Then I went to the book store I bought books Then I went shopping I bought my favorite food at the night Istayed at home and watched Kartoon on TV then I surfed the net Do you think my weekend is very funny On Saturday morning I visited my grandparents then I watched TV at their 第二 次出现 用 their 代替 不显得罗嗦 home 第 2 页 共 3 页 Soon 加上表示时间的词 显得文章逻辑性强一点 I was hungry Grandma was kind 去掉 to me 读起来更顺口 and she cooked lunch for me After lunch I went for a walk in the park 在 公园 I had fun with them there there 前一般 不用介词 Two hours later later 是副词 不能 加 ed I went home At night I saw an interesting movie with my friends Sunday came came 是动词 前面不能有 be 动 词 In the morning I did my homework and prepared 用 study 不够准确 for the English test In the afternoon I went to the library and read about history Then I went to the book store to buy some 用 to 结构连接更紧密 books Then I went shopping I bought my favorite food In the night 短语为 at night 或 in the night Istayed at home and watched cartoons 单词拼写错误 on TV then I surfed on the net Do you think my weekend is very funny 再次总写 回应开头 1 文章结构严紧 前呼后应 总分结构明显 第 3 页 共 3 页 句子表达大部分正确 2 你的周末充实而又有意义 可以看出你是个 很爱生活又懂