福建高考英语书面表达简析及复习应对策略措施

福建高考英语书面表达简析及复习应对策略措施,惠安一中 陈婉英,一、20042009年福建卷书面表达试题 简要分析,（一）20042009年福建卷书面表达试题题材、体裁、提示方式、词数及赋分一览表,（一）20042009年福建卷书面表达试题题材、体裁、提示方式、词数及赋分一览表,（一）20042009年福建卷书面表达试题题材、体裁、提示方式、词数及赋分一览表,（二）20042009年福建卷书面表达试题简要 分析,第一，话题多样。,第二，开放度越来越大。,第三，词数与赋分稳中有变。,二、09试题回顾,（一）题目： 书面表达（满分25分） 某英语报社拟成立“微笑俱乐部”，现向全球征募会员，要求入会申请者提交一篇题为“I Want to Smile”的英语短文。请你以申请者的身份，根据以下思路图的提示完成一篇短文。,Possible version,There are many advantages of smiling. It can not only make us happy, but also please others. If we smile at life, life will smile on us in return. So I want to smile at all whenever and wherever possible. First, I would like to smile at my parents because they have given me life and taken all the trouble to bring me up. They arrange almost everything for me. With their help, I have made great progress. I would like to say “Thank you” to them with a smile.,Possible version,Then my smile should go to myself, for only in this way can I gain more confidence in smiling my troubles away and live a better life. In a word, lets greet every day with a smile. Tomorrow is another day.,（二）内容要点,1. 微笑的好处；2. 对父母或他人微笑及其理由；3对自己微笑及其理由；4. 小结。,（三）试题简评,我省自行命题以来最为开放的一次，为考生提供了较为广阔的自由发挥的空间。内容与形式的完美结合使得今年的书面表达受到老师们的普遍好评。,既提供了中文信息，也提供了英文信息，而且还有生动的 “笑脸人”的思路图提示方式，新颖独特,寓意深刻。 (你还会笑吗？ 2007年10月21日中国教育报）,（四）书面表达阅评的原则与方式,1书面表达阅评的基本原则,第一，按档次给分,第二，文章内容 （丰富性）,第三，拼写、标点符号、书写 （准确性）,使用的词汇与语言结构 （有效性）,文章的结构 （流畅性）,2.书面表达阅评的方法,第一，总分25分，按5个档次给分,第二，评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分.,第三，评分时应注意的主要点为：内容要点，应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性,2.书面表达阅评的方法,第四，词数少于100和多于150的从总分中减去2分（只要不超线不扣分）,第五，拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。,（五）数据分析,（六）存在问题,审题不清，要点不全,我是 “不倒翁”,2.“头重脚轻， 步履艰难”,“骨感美”There are many advantages of smiling. It benefits us a lot. It plays a very important part in our life.,（七）09年福建高考英语书面表达高分习作及点评,习作一.（24分）,Smile is an expression of love. It benefits us a lot. It can shorten the distance and help get a better understanding with each other. So I want to smile. To smile at my beloved parents, who care for me health and study. They devoted all their love to me. Its obvious that they deserve my thankful smile. Besides, I want to smile at my considerate friends, who would appear every time I need him. They comfort me and give encouragement to me at the right time. Whats more, I want to smile at myself, for all the effort Ive made, for all the good deeds Ive done, for all the progress Ive got. I appreciate myself.,习作一（24分）,In a word, I want to smile. For all the people I love, I want to smile to express my bless to them. Smile every day. (143 words) 文章内容完整，覆盖全部要点；结构清晰、层次分明；并恰当使用衔接词（So, Besides, Whats more, In a word）使全文语意连贯、行文流畅作者娴熟自如地运用定语从句等多种复杂句式，排比句式的使用颇有气势，加上几个形容词使用精妙（beloved parents, thankful smiles, considerate friends, at the right time），使得文章不仅精彩而且具有很强的情感张力情感、思想和语言在文章中融为一体，实为难得遗憾的是，文中出现了 “To smile at” 的无主句，虽瑕不掩瑜，却也如鲠在喉不可不防,习作二.（22分）,As we all know, smiling benefits us very much. It is smiling that makes boys more handsome and girls more beautiful. Whats more, smile is also a symbol of positive life. So I want to smile. I want to smile at my parents or friends. Without their acompany, there is no doubt that I will fell lonely. So I want to smile at them. I want to pass my happyness to them. I also want to smile at myself. A famous writer ever said,”If you like smiling, then I know you have confidence.” So I know, smiling means confidence. I eager to be a person who is full of confidence. As well, I want others to know I am a positive boy.,习作二.（22分）,In a word, living in the world, there is not any reson that we shouldnt smile. Therefore, no matter what will happen, we just need smile. Smiling can overcome all difficult things. So, its high time that we smiled. (161 ) 从内容的丰富性看，文章包含了所有的语言信息，内容完整 从结构的流畅性看，文章使用了 “As we all know, Whats more, so, also, As well” 等衔接语，使上下文语意流畅、逻辑性强 就语言的有效性而言，语言简洁准确，并敢于运用强调句型、虚拟语气、从句等复杂句式 虽然文中出现了一些由于粗心而导致的失误，如：happyness, reson, I eager，但不失为一篇较好的应试之作，完成了试题规定的写作任务,习作三.（20分）,As is known to us all, smiling is of great significance. The advantages of smiling are obvious. Our smiles to our parents or friend will become fresh air, which can lighten their pressures and make them happy. So I want to smile at my parents and friends. Only in this way can they share my feeling of happiness. Besides, smiling at myselves not only can give my a beautiful mood but also some encourages. When Im in trouble, I would like to smile at myselves. Its a power to let me lead a happy life. Futhermore, smiling to others is a way of showing our friendship.,习作三.（20分）,In a word, smiling makes a contribution to making this more and more harmony. Let us smile without any hesitation.(126 words) 文章开头简洁有力；正文部分结构合理、层次分明；结尾回文照应、总结得体衔接词使用得当，过渡自然恰当地使用了定语从句和强调句型等复杂句式，语言正确地道 遗憾的是，文章对advantages of smiling的具体内容没有进行适度的拓展，算是遗漏了重要的次重点,习作四.（19分）,Just as an old saying goes “ Smile for a while and you will be younger” So, I want to smile. As we known, there has a lot of advantages of smiling, which includes that we can smile to relax ourselves when we are nervous or we can convey our greets to each other by smile. Of course, smile is also a good attitude to our life. So I want to smile. Thanks to the advantage of smiling, I also want to smile at my parents or friends, which can lead they have a good emotion all the time. Besides, smile at myself can not only give myself a good spirit but also can give myself a lot of confidence.,习作四.（19分）,In a word, smile has a lot of benefits. Its a positive way of our life. So, I want to smile.(141 words)文章内容上覆盖了所有主要内容，但拓展上详略不够得当；应用了适当的语句连接成分，使全文结构紧凑、语意连贯；尝试着使用定语从句等复杂句型；但在语言的准确性和地道方面有待加强，如：there has, which includes that, Smile at myself can, lead they have等等, 不过不影响意思的表达，能满足写作任务的要求,闪光之处主要有 :,三.对教学的建议,1 领会课标，贯彻精神,2夯实“三基”，阶段侧重 以考