作文复习课件

,初中英语写作训练吕春燕2019.5.9,中考英语作文评分标准一档13-15分包含所有要点，应用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇，用词准确、语法正确、句子通顺、行文连贯、表达清楚，具有较强的语言运用能力。二档10-12分基本包含所有要点，应用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇，句子较通顺，表达较清楚，但有少量错误。三档7-9分内容包含了多数要点，语言表达过于简单，句子不够通顺，有部分语言错误，基本上不影响总体理解。四档4-6分只包含了少数要点，语言不规范，句子无条理，行文不连贯，语言错误严重，影响理解。五档1-3分只写出与要求的内容相关的一些信息词语，语言错误多。六档0分空白,Aliceismyabestfriend,shecomefromCanada.sheisverytall,hairisverylong,helikesports.butIdontknowifdoesshelikeswim?Shelikeschinese,andshedowellinit,weallverylikeshe.,去掉,comes,She,her,she,likes,去掉,likes,swimming,Chinese,does,去掉,her,verymuch,Forexample,Howcanwewriteagoodcomposition?,审列连加查誊,书面表达六步法,。,审：认真审题，找出文章要表达的中心及要求。,书面表达第一步：审,节约资源,保护环境,从我们身边的小事做起。LiMing是一个注重“低碳”生活的中学生，假设你是他,请以“MyLow-carbonLife”为题，写一篇80词左右的短文，简单描述自己的“低碳生活”。要点：(1)每天步行上学;(2)离开教室时，关灯、电扇、电视等；（3）不用水时，记得关水龙头，循环使用水；（4）充分使用纸张（5）不使用塑料袋。参考词：onfoot,turnoff,tap(水龙头),reuse,makefulluseof,plasticbag写作要求：（1）内容包括所提供的信息及要点，可适当发挥，但不要逐条翻译；（2）不得透露考生姓名、学校等信息。,文章中心:,我叫李明(全部考生都叫李明)，我的低碳生活,要求:,1.80词左右,2.写作要求(1)(2),列：用简单的句子和短语列出文章的要点.,书面表达第二步：列,(1)每天步行上学,Igotoschoolonfooteveryday./Iwalktoschooleveryday.,(2)离开教室时，关灯、电扇、电视等,remembertoturnoffthelights,theTVandthefans,（3）不用水时，记得关水龙头，循环使用水；,turnoffthetap.reusewater,（4）充分使用纸张。,Imakefulluseofpaper,（5）不使用塑料袋,Dontuseplasticbags,Igotoschoolonfooteveryday./Iwalktoschooleveryday.2.Ialwaysremembertoturnoffthelights,theTVandthefanswhenIleavetheclassroom.3.WhenIamnotusingwater,Ialwaysturnoffthetap.Ioftenreusewater.forexample,whenIfinishwashingtheclothes,Iusethewatertocleanthefloorandwaterflowers.4.Ithinksavingpaperisnecessary,soImakefulluseofpaper.5.IuseclothbagsinsteadofplasticbagswhenIgoshopping.,为了衔接紧密和避免逐条翻译的嫌疑，可以在适当的地方添加事例或紧密相连的话,然后连成句。,连：恰当运用连接词，使文章层次清晰，各部分衔接自然。,书面表达第三步：连,1.WhenIamnotusingwater,Ialwaysturnoffthetap.Ioftenreusewater.forexample,whenIfinishwashingtheclothes,Iusethewatertocleanthefloorandwaterflowers。2.Ithinksavingpaperisnecessary,soImakefulluseofpaper,加：加首尾，使文章结构完整。可以采用总分总，分总结构。开头和结尾应注意简洁，漂亮，最好采用开门见山的形式，结尾应注意与题目或开头相呼应，并且要扣题有力。,书面表达第四步：加,MynameisLiMing.Iamamiddleschoolstudent.Ilikehavingalow-carbonlife.结尾：Itsimportantforustoprotecttheenvironment.Itsimportantforustolivealow-carbonlifetoprotecttheenvironment.,开头：,（比较）,查：检查1格式是否正确2词汇是否用对3是否符合英语习惯表达4时态是否正确5用主动语态好还是用被动语态好6标点是否用对7人称是否用对8主谓是否一致9.名词的单复数等,书面表达第五步：查,誊：誊写。将检查后的作文整洁地抄写在横线上注意：横线就是我们英语作业本的第三条线（基准线），小写字母都要穿过这条线。卷面整洁不一定加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分。,书面表达第六步：誊,f/g/j/p/q/y,MynameisLiMing.Iamamiddleschoolstudent.Ilikehavingalow-carbonlife.Igotoschoolonfooteveryday.Ialwaysremembertoturnoffthelights,theTVandthefanswhenIleavetheclassroom.WhenIamnotusingwater,Ialwaysturnoffthetap.Ioftenreusewater,forexample,whenIfinishwashingtheclothes,Iusethewatertocleanthefloorandwaterflowers.IneveruseplasticbagssoIoftenmakefulluseofpaper.Ithinksavingpaperisnecessary,Itsimportantforustolivealow-carbonlifetoprotecttheenvironment.,anicehead(总),anicebody（分）,anicetail（总）,在你的成长过程中，许多人、许多事一直陪伴着你，支持着你，温暖着你，感动着你。请你以”Saythanksto_”为题写一篇短文。写出要感谢的对象，原因及感激语言。语言表达流畅、准确。词数70个左右，书写规范，不得出现真实姓名等。,文章中心内容及要求:1、对象、原因、感激的语言。2、人称（shehe）3、时态（一般时、过去时、将来时）,书面表达第一步：审,主体内容：感谢的原因,Whytosaythanks?,Mymotherisverykindandnicetome.,Shetakesanumbrellatome,Shelooksaftermecarefully,Sheencouragesme,Shehelpsme,Shetakesgoodcareofme.,Shecooksbreakfastforme,书面表达第二步：列,主体内容：感谢的原因,Whytosaythanks?,Mymotherisverykindandnicetome.,Shegetsupearlyto,Shetakesanumbrellatome,SometimesShewhenitrains,Shelooksaftermecarefully,Sheencouragesme,Shehelpsme,Shetakesgoodcareofme.,cookbreakfastforme,EverytimeIwanttogiveup,WhenImeettrouble,WhenIamill,书面表达第三步：连,开头：感谢谁,我的妈妈,Iwillfinishmyjuniormiddleschoolsoon.Iwanttothankalotofpeople.Theyalwayshelpsmeduringmygrowingup.butIreallywanttosaythankstomymother.,Saythankstomymother,书面表达第四步：加,结尾：感谢的言语,Tosaythankstomymother?,Iwillgotoseniorhighschoolintwomonths.IreallywanttosayIloveherverymuch.Thankyoumymother,Thankyouforlookingafterme.,Thankyouforhelpingme.,Thankyouforencouragingme.,.Iwillstudyharderinreturn(回报)。,书面表达第四步：加,主体内容：感谢的原因,Whytosaythanks?,Mymotherisverykindandnicetome.Shealwaystakesgoodcareofme.Shegetsupearlytocookbreakfastforme.SometimesShetakesanumbrellatomewhenitrains.WhenIamill,shelooksaftermecarefully.SheoftenhelpsmeWhenImeettrouble.EverytimeIwanttogiveup,shealwaysencouragesmetostandupagain.,书面表达第五步：查,Iwillfinishmyjuniormiddleschoolsoon.Iwanttothankalotofpeople.Theyalwayshelpmeduringmygrowingup.butIwanttosaythankstomymother.Mymotherisverykindandnicetome.Shealwaystakesgoodcareofme.Shegetsupearlytocookbreakfastforme.SometimesShetakesanumbrellatomewhenitrains.WhenIamill,shelooksaftermecarefully.SheoftenhelpsmeWhenImeettrouble.EverytimeIwanttogive,shealwaysencouragesmetostandupagain.Iwillgotoseniorhighschoolintwomonths.IreallywanttosayIloveherverymuch.ThankyoumymotherIwillstudyharderinreturn。,书面表达第六步：誊,howtowriteagoodcomposition,开头:开门见山中间结尾:与主题相呼应强劲有力,书面表达六步法,（审-列-连-加-查-誊）,抓要点找连接词造好句连句成段,假设你们班正在开展“争当文明学生”为主题班会的活动，同学们在讨论会上都踊跃发言。请根据下列词汇，以“Tobepolitestudents”为题用英语写一篇短文谈谈你的看法。字数80作左右.要点：1.在校对老师有礼貌；2.按时完成作业，不抄别人的;3.积极参加各种课外活动;4.在公共场合对人友好,礼待他人;5.给老人和带小孩的人让座;6.不乱丢垃圾.提示:atschool,polite，copy，after-schoolactivities，inpublic，friendly，forexample，onabus,littersthabout，protecttheenvironment,书面表达第一步：审,要点：1.在校对老师有礼貌；2.按时完成作业，不抄别人的;3.积极参加各种课外活动;4.在公共场合对人友好,礼待他人;5.给老人和带小孩的人让座;6.不乱丢垃圾.,提示:,atschool,polite，,copy,after-schoolactivities，,inpublic，friendly，,forexample，onabus,littersthabout，,protecttheenvironment,书面表达第二步：列,1.在校对老师有礼貌；atschool,polite，2.按时完成作业，不抄别人的;copy3.积极参加各种课外活动;after-schoolactivities4.在公共场合对人友好,礼待他人;inpublic，friendly5.给老人和带小孩的人让座;forexample，onabus,6.不乱丢垃圾.littersthabout,Weshouldbepolitetoourteachers,Weshouldfinishourhomeworkintime.Weshouldntcopyothers,Wedbettertakepartinkindsofafter-schoolactivities.,Weshouldbefriendlyandpolitetopeopleinpublic,Weshouldgiveourseattotheoldandthewomenwithchildrenonthebus.,DontlitterDontthrowlitterhereandthere.,书面表达第三步：连,1.在校对老师有礼貌；atschool,polite，2.按时完成作业，不抄别人的;copy3.积极参加各种课外活动;after-schoolactivities4.在公共场合对人友好,礼待他人;inpublic，friendly5.给老人和带小孩的人让座;forexample，onabus,6.不乱丢垃圾.littersthabout,Weshouldbepolitetoourteachers,Weshouldfinishourhomeworkintime.Weshouldntcopyothers,Wedbettertakepartinkindsofafter-schoolactivities.,Weshouldbefriendlyandpolitetopeopleinpublic,Weshouldgiveourseattotheoldandthewomenwithchildrenonthebus.,DontlitterDontthrowlitterhereandthere.,书面表达第三步：连,Weshouldbepolitetoourteachers,Weshouldfinishourhomeworkintime.Weshouldntcopyothers,Wedbettertakepartinkindsofafter-schoolactivities.,Weshouldbefriendlyandpolitetopeopleinpublic,Weshouldgiveourseattotheoldandthewomenwithchildrenonthebus.,Weshouldprotecttheenvironmentaroundus.,开头：,Asstudents,itisnecessaryandimportantforustobepolite.Howtobepolitestudents?,结尾：,Allinall,weshouldlearnwhatgoodmannersare,showpolitenesstoanyoneanddoanythinginapoliteway.,书面表达第四步：加？,Weshouldbepolitetoourteachers.,Weshouldfinishourhomeworkintimeinsteadofcopyingothers.,Wedbettertakepartinkindsofafter-schoolactivities.,Weshouldbefriendlyandpolitetopeopleinpublic.,Ifwetakeabus,Weshouldgiveourseattotheoldandthewomenwithchildren.Weshouldalsoprotecttheenvironmentaroundus.Dontthrowli