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,好作文的“美”,书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求,第五档（很好25-30分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式所致；具备较强的语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档（好19-24分）完成了试题规定的任务。比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。,词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。,句子结构运用得当可以让文章彰显档次，从而使整篇文章增色生辉。,连接词使用恰当，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、结构紧凑。,增强书面表达效果的技巧,Strategy1应用高级词汇,(1)Thespringsceneryisbeautiful.Thespringsceneryis_.(attractive,appealing,charming,fantastic,breathtaking)(2)Itisgoodtogoforaspringouting.Itis_togoforaspringouting.(enjoyable,beneficial,worthwhile),Tip1:尽可能使用高中阶段习得的词汇或尽可能使用具体化词汇,e.g.Toomuchpressureis_toourhealth.Smokinginpublicplacescanbea/an_act.3.Aheavysmokeroftengivesoffa/an_smell.4.Theladyburstintotearsonhearingthe_news.5.Workingtoolongwithoutabreakwillhavea/an_effectonourfitness.6.Thoughhetriedmanytimes,theresultwas_,disappointing,/unsatisfactory/discouraging/,harmful,annoying,unpleasant,terrible,negative/harmful,注意：切勿滥用高级词汇，选词应切合语境,Strategy2善用高级短语词组,(1)Wecanenjoytheflowersinthewild.Wecan_theflowersinthewild.(2)Theentranceexaminationisnear.Theentranceexaminationis_(3)Weshouldworkhardtoachieveourdream.Weshould_toachieveourdream,feastoureyeson,aroundthecorner,Tip2:多记一些常用的同义词组，写作时能受益匪浅.,makeefforts/sparenoeffort/takepains,resultin;leadto;bringabout;contributeto;,beeager/dyingfor;longfor;haveastrongdesirefor;lookforwardto;,makefull/gooduseof;takeadvantageof,haveagoodcommandof;getthehangof,haveaneffect/influenceon,befondof;growinterestedin;haveapreferencefor;haveanaffectionfor;,Strategy3巧增修饰成分,Wecanfeastoureyesontheflowersinthewild.Wecanfeastoureyesonthe_flowersinvariouscolorsandgestures.,(1),(2),Weareimpressedbythescenery.Weare_impressedbythe_scenery,deeply,breathtaking,Tip3:熟悉各种形容词/副词/介词短语用法，用时能得心应手,delicate,常用的写作高级副词,1.Thecomputerisplayingan_(越来越)importantroleinpeopleslife.2.Weonlygotothemovies_(偶尔).3.Priceshaverisen_sincelastmonth.(飞涨)4.Weare_gratefulforyourtimelyhelp.真心）5.Shefrownedandwas_puzzled.(显然),extremely;occasionally;slightly;definitely;actually;increasingly;exactly;unexpectedly;surprisingly;absolutely;rarely;effectively;eventually;similarly;undoubtedly;obviously;particularly;regularly;sincerely;sharply,increasingly,occasionally,sharply,sincerely,obviously,Strategy4活用词性转换,1.Itisimportanttohaveashortbreakfromdailyroutine.Itisof_tohaveashortbreak.2.Itisobviousthatarefreshedmindwillhandleyourschoolworkmoreefficiently._,arefreshedmindwillhandleyourschoolworkmoreefficiently.3.Ashortbreakfromroutinewillbenefitourstudy.Ashortbreakfromroutineis_ourstudy.4.Theyarenotsatisfiedwiththeiracademicresults.Theiracademicresultsarefarfrom_.Theiracademicresultsfailtoreachtheir_.,Obviously,beneficialto,satisfactory,satisfaction,Tip4:掌握常见同源词组，会有意想不到的表达效果.,greatimportance,Strategy5试换句子主语,（1）巧用被动语态Wshouldmakefulluseofeveryminute.Everyminuteshouldbemadefulluseof.Alotofpeopleacceptthisview.Thisviewis_accpeted.,(2)巧用形式主语“it”ImuststressthateverythinghasitsadvantagesanddisadvantagesIt_thateverythinghasitsadvantagesanddisadvantages,widely,mustbestressed,(3)巧用无灵主语SuddenlyIhadagoodidea.Suddenlyagoodidea_me.Ididntknowhowtodescribethebeautifulscenery.Thebeautifulscenerywas_.Words_mewhenIsawthebeautifulscenery.,failed,beyonddescription,occurredto/struck/hit,Strategy6避免用词重复,Somestudentsthinkthatitisworthwhiletogoforaspringouting.Othersthinkthatitisawasteoftime.Somestudents_thatitisworthwhiletogoforaspringouting.Others_thatitisawasteoftime.Somestudents_theviewthatitisworthwhiletogoforaspringouting.Others_itisawasteoftime.,Tip4:掌握多种同义替换方式，可达到词汇多样化的效果.,argue/insist,claim/suppose,hold,believe,Strategy7灵活变换句型,简单句用的太多，会造成文章读起来单调乏味。在保证要点全面、表达正确的基础上，提高表述的层次，写出丰富多彩的句子来，以表现自己“具备较强的语言运用能力”。,（1）借用连词保持语意流畅Somestudentsthinkthatitisworthwhiletogospringouting.Othersinsistthatitisawasteoftime.Somestudentsthinkthatitisworthwhiletogospringouting_othersinsistthatitisawasteoftime.Itwasanunusualexperienceforus.Illneverforgetitfortherestofmylife.Itwasanunusualexperienceforus,_Illneverforgetfortherestofmylife.,while,which,Theentranceexaminationisdrawingnear.Wedontwanttoplay.Withtheentranceexamination_,wedontwanttoplay.Wehavetogooversomanylessons,sowecantspareanytimeforentertainment.Withsomanylessons_,.Wehavelittletimeavailable.Wecantaffordtodoanythingthatisnotconcernedwithstudy._littletimeavailable,wecantaffordto.,Strategy7灵活变换句型,drawingnear,(2)灵活运用with和非谓语结构,Having,togoover,(3)合理使用特殊句式（倒装/强调/省略等）,1.Goingforaspringoutingcanrefreshourselvesanditcanreduceourpressuretoo.（Notonlybutalso）Notonlycangoingforaspringoutingrefreshourselvesbutalsoitcanreduceourpressure2.Thoughitisinterestingtohaveaspringouting,wecantaffordthetime.Interesting_itistohaveaspringouting,wecantaffordthetime.3.Timeissopreciousthatwecantwasteit.(倒装句)_timethatwecantwasteit.,as/though,Sopreciousis,Strategy7灵活变换句型,4.Hardworkcanleadustosuccess.(强调句)Itishardworkthatcanleadustosuccess.5.Wecanrealizeourdreambyworkingagainsttime.(倒装句)Onlybyworkingagainsttimecanwerealizeourdream.6.Whenweareexposedtonature,wecanfeastoureyesonthewondersofnature.(省略句)When_nature,wecanfeastoureyesonthewondersofnature.,exposedto,Practicemakesperfect!,Practice现在正是春暖花开春游时节。你校学生会以“高三学生要不要参加春游活动”为题，向高三学生作调查。请你根据下表所提供的调查结果并简要发表自己的看法，以“WhetherornotshouldSenior3studentsgospringouting?”为题，写一篇短文，上交学生会。,注意：1、短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。2、词数：词数120左右。3、参考词汇：高考：collegeentranceexamination.,WhetherornotshouldSenior3studentsgospringouting?WehavehadaheateddiscussiononwhetherSenior3studentsshouldgospringouting.,WhetherornotshouldSenior3studentsgospringouting?WehavehadaheateddiscussiononwhetherSenior3studentsshouldgospringouting._.Moststudents,about65%,arefortheideathatSenior3studentsshouldgospringouting.Theythinkitgoodfortheirhealthtobeclosetonatureandhavesomefreshair._,theycanalsorelaxthemselvesforawhileandresttheirbrainssothattheywillbemoreenergetic.Theythinkitwilldogoodtotheirstudies._,about35%ofthestudentsareagainsttheidea.Theysaythatwithcollegeentranceexaminationdrawingnear,theydontfeellikegoinganywhere._,theythinkgoingspringoutingwilltakeatleastadayoff.Theycantaffordthetime.Theythinktheyshouldfixalltheirattentionontheirstudies.,Opinionsaredividedonthequestion,Whatsmore,Ontheotherhand,Besides,inaddition;additionally;furthermore;moreover;,Onthecontrary;Incontrast;However;,WhetherornotshouldSenior3studentsgospringouting?WehavehadaheateddiscussiononwhetherSenior3studentsshouldgospringouting.Opinionsaredividedonthequestion.Mostofthestudents,about65%,a